Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Wow, Dana is definitely a number, isn't she? Never once thinking about the consequences of her stealing it on Claire. I hope she is tempted to wear it during the actual tournament because I believe she'll be detected, eliminated and justly humiliated. Moving along nicely, Jim!

Jay

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

Thanks, Jay. Pretty good guesses, but there may be one or two surprises yet.

I don't think you were around for Part 1, so I'll give you a short sample of what Dana was like in 7th grade. This is narrated by Abby and takes place when she is sitting at lunch for the second day in a row with a boy who stutters:

It would have been a perfect lunch hour until Dana Padgett and some other "cool girls" came over to the table and sat down with us.

Dana said, "Hi Shabby. Looks like you've got a b-b-b-boyfriend now. Aren't you a cute couple?"

Fred jumped right in. "W-why don't you j-j-just leave, D-D-D-Dana."

"Good idea, F-F-F-Fred. I'm dying of boredom here listening to you get a sentence out. Let's g-g-g-go, girls," she said, getting up to leave. The others laughed as they got up too and followed her out.

reply by Jay Squires on 31-Jan-2023

YES! I wish I'd read that chapter. It explains a lot!

Comment from royowen

Excellent

She really is a nasty piece of work, folk who have little conscience are really dangerous in this already nasty work. But really if there iscacevicebto make one become a scratch golfer when they have a handicap that would be great, Beautifully written Jim, blessings Roy

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

Thanks, Roy. She's a menace alright. Let's see if there's any justice.

reply by royowen on 01-Feb-2023

I hope so

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

Dana has so much nastiness bred into her that she makes a great anti-hero. She also feels perfectly righteous stealing the suit from a child and then wearing it, if necessary, to defeat that child's mother in a golf tournament. Very good chapter.

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

No morals, no scruples. I don't remember if you came in during Part I, but she was a bad apple back then too. Here's a passage from Part I. Abby was eating lunch for the second day in a row with a boy named Fred who stuttered:

It would have been a perfect lunch hour until Dana Padgett and some other "cool girls" came over to the table and sat down with us.

Dana said, "Hi Shabby. Looks like you?ve got a b-b-b-boyfriend now. Aren?t you a cute couple?"

Fred jumped right in. "W-why don?t you j-j-just leave, D-D-D-Dana."

"Good idea, F-F-F-Fred. I?m dying of boredom here listening to you get a sentence out. Let?s g-g-g-go, girls," she said, getting up to leave. The others laughed as they got up too and followed her out.

reply by Carol Hillebrenner on 01-Feb-2023

59 years turned my Dana into someone who needs my help. She still doesn't listen to me, but she's kind. Dana may die a bad one.

reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

So you think there's no hope for her? We'll see.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Dana is going to cheat. I am wondering what the baby powder a will do to the suit. I can't wait to find out. Thank you for sharing.

but it did help me to win some of them. (help me win some. I think it's a little smoother.)

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

So you think Dana will wear the suit during the tournament? We'll see.

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Nice. I see Dana digging her own grave, little by little.

I think this chapter being shorter than most could've used an interjection with Abby since it spanned two weeks. Just so her disappointment, investigative work or re-fabrication of the suit was still in play. Just a thought...
Still, good writing.
John

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

That's a good thought. I will think about it. Thanks for the idea, John.

Comment from Daniel Fernandes

Excellent

This is wonderfully written. Have not been seeing every chapter but have a general idea from the different chapters I am able to review. Love the imagery and appreciate the recap to keep the readers up to speed. Thank you for sharing this.

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

You're very welcome. Thanks for the great review, Daniel.

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

Obviously, cheating would be within her wheelhouse, she stole the suit.
I hope it rains, and lightning strikes her down. Poor Claire. Whatever did she do to deserve a punishment.

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

That's funny about the rain. My wife said the same thing: that it should rain and short out the suit and make it go haywire with all her limbs twitching and flapping around!

Don't worry about Claire; the punishment won't be too bad :)