Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Melissa,
Very nice free verse poem. The beginning and ending resembled each other...
"to look into eternity/I gazed at forever"
It's fitting, as "forever" is a synonym for "eternity", and God is the Alpha and Omega... the beginning and the ending in the Book of Revelation. They are also the first and last letters of the Greek alphabet.
I think, when God looks down here to Earth, He sees the mountain peaks first, surrounded by clouds. Then He sees us. And a few of us are trying to climb the mountain! He gave us a desire to give it our best shot. To excel. To at least try. Those of us that succeed in life might know their insignificance when contemplating the "vastness" of God.
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023

Hello KB... I hope you are having a fantastic day. Thank you for your wonderful review. I can tell you are a man of Faith and learning. I liked your thoughts... Hugs, my friend.

Melissa

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

It can be overwhelming to
gaze at the horizon and not know what lies ahead. And storming seas and cloudy skies can add to the uncertainty. You've captured those feelings very well in this free verse!

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

Thanks so much June... I don't write much FV, but hope to begin expanding into that territory too.

Melissa

Comment from Jasmine Girl

Excellent

I like these short sentences. It's almost pretty to look at the shape of the poem. Yes the universe is so vast and the time is so long and endless. The entire human history is so insignificant in the life of the earth that is around 4.5 billion.

Well done.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

Thank you Lisa... I don't write much FV, but thought I would dust off that form and give it a go. :)

Melissa

Comment from kahpot

Exceptional

Wow! I have not written a free verse as yet though have read many, this one just swallowed me up, I think I may finally understand (free verse), for me an exceptional read, very well written****kahpot

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

Hey there Kim... thank you for your wonderful review. I am trying, like you, to understand FV better and to practice this type more often. So appreciate you!

Melissa

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your free verse was well-presented, Melissa.
The image was perfect. Your words could not
have been more perfect either. I could imagine
this as really happening.
Thanks for sharing, Jan

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

Hi Jan. Thank you so much for your lovely words and review!!

Melissa

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

This has a surrealist feel to it and I wonder if a dream inspired it. The short lines contrasts the words of "vastness," "forever" , and "eternity." But it fits with the feeling of being finite and insignificant compared to the universe.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

Thank you Helen. I am trying to become more adept at writing FV. Its a challenge to me!

Melissa

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Wonderful free verse with concrete imagery and nice presentation.

I get the same feeling when I go to the shore looking into the deep ocean. As people, sometimes we are insignificant compared to nature.


Nice presentation. Good imagery of spring and sound of chimes.

Good luck in the contest.

Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

Thanks Gypsy... yes, I get that feeling too when I gaze at the ocean.

Melissa

Comment from Carol Clark2

Excellent

That must have been a long walk! Lol! Good free verse. I like that your soul trembled as you looked at forever, and the feeling of insignificance when looking at eternity. Good thought! Blessings.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

Thanks bunches Carol!! Have a lovely evening!

Melissa

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

The poem for me was comforting. I found it to be descriptive and creative.
Looking into eternity is vast - thinking about it brought me peace. I
really enjoyed these words. The artwork is perfect!
Hi Melissa, have a wonderful day!....Maria

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

Hello Maria. Thank you so very much!! Have a great evening!

Melissa

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

Eternity is a long, long time fir ever and ever is too. We must keep reminding ourselves as we go forth to find heaven waiting for us with open arms.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

Thanks so much Barbara... hugs!!

Melissa