Writ Upon Our Souls
Only close family & friends can leave scars.10 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Hello and welcome to Fanstory! I see you have persevered through the physical challenges of MS to painstakingly pour your heart into this free verse with two finger finesse...
Kudos to you! I do not know your writing experience, but I found some very cerebral references here that elevated the entire presentation of your theme...
"Etched in pain, only dearest ones.
you trust because you must,
may touch the hollows and ridges,
hidden beneath obdurate mineral laminations."
Bravo.
You have a new fan!
Karenina
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Hello and welcome to Fanstory! I see you have persevered through the physical challenges of MS to painstakingly pour your heart into this free verse with two finger finesse...
Kudos to you! I do not know your writing experience, but I found some very cerebral references here that elevated the entire presentation of your theme...
"Etched in pain, only dearest ones.
you trust because you must,
may touch the hollows and ridges,
hidden beneath obdurate mineral laminations."
Bravo.
You have a new fan!
Karenina
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much!
Send me links to your work and will review :)
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There will be time! :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Yes those who are close are the ones who can truly hurt us emotionally and leave a scar that is hard to heal, I struggled with some of the metaphors as this is a very personal write of deep emotional hurt. Welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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Yes those who are close are the ones who can truly hurt us emotionally and leave a scar that is hard to heal, I struggled with some of the metaphors as this is a very personal write of deep emotional hurt. Welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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It is sometimes hard but it does fuel our writing and so we grow.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a very powerful free verse entry to this contest. The text is a good size. The message while sad is stated with crystal clear clarity. I loved several lines in your poem. These are just great lines of poetry........ Layers of scar tissue will shield them,
travertine limestone formed when calcareous waters flowed across your memories concreting them in rock.
This is a blind writing contest so adding your name at the end should not be done. You have penned a poem you can be proud of penning. Your visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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This is a very powerful free verse entry to this contest. The text is a good size. The message while sad is stated with crystal clear clarity. I loved several lines in your poem. These are just great lines of poetry........ Layers of scar tissue will shield them,
travertine limestone formed when calcareous waters flowed across your memories concreting them in rock.
This is a blind writing contest so adding your name at the end should not be done. You have penned a poem you can be proud of penning. Your visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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oops! will fix
I am typing with only 2 fingers, MS does its damage, so clutzy.
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Okay, you are welcome.
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Tried to fix all - hope it worked :) one finger typing tonight... :)
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It's a great first poem. There appears to be one finger in your visual. 😀
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:)
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thanks again
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Thanks so much!
Send me links to your work and will review :)
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Thanks so much!
Send me links to your work and will review :)
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You are welcome. Just click on my photo and go to my portfolio if you like.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Your image is captivating. Many people do have scars that are left by loved ones or people you thought were your friends. I guess the best way is to not be affected from the scars, have thick skin. Like your poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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Your image is captivating. Many people do have scars that are left by loved ones or people you thought were your friends. I guess the best way is to not be affected from the scars, have thick skin. Like your poem.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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Thank you. I recently let go of a brother who seems to have let go of me years ago. I found several others with MS and similar diseases did the same. This is my response to our group's lives and strength.
What may I review of yours?
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Layers of tragedy and sorrow lie buried below that carefully applied make-up. The worst thing is that many more of us have been there than anyone ever cares to imagine. kay
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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Layers of tragedy and sorrow lie buried below that carefully applied make-up. The worst thing is that many more of us have been there than anyone ever cares to imagine. kay
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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Thank you. I recently let go of a brother who seems to have let go of me years ago. I found several others with MS and similar diseases did the same. This is my response to our group's lives and strength.
What may I review of yours?
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Review of mine? It depends what interests you. I just did a free verse on alcohol addiction, or if you wait a few days there will be an essay on covid (the plague of vaccinations) but especially a tribute to Fleedleflump. kay
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Writ Upon Our Souls, reminds the readers of all the invisible scars that we carry through the years that become our basis of decision-making going forward.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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This free verse, Writ Upon Our Souls, reminds the readers of all the invisible scars that we carry through the years that become our basis of decision-making going forward.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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Thank you. I recently let go of a brother who seems to have let go of me years ago. I found several others with MS and similar diseases did the same. This is my response to our group's lives and strength.
What may I review of yours?
Comment from royowen
Firstly, welcome to fanstory, this is a very good first, a little on the prosy side, but great wording and advisory in nature. There's some really good variety on fanstory so I think you'll like, lots of contests, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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Firstly, welcome to fanstory, this is a very good first, a little on the prosy side, but great wording and advisory in nature. There's some really good variety on fanstory so I think you'll like, lots of contests, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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Thank you. I recently let go of a brother who seems to have let go of me years ago. I found several others with MS and similar diseases did the same. This is my response to our group's lives and strength.
What may I review of yours? Don't think of my work as prosy - food for thought, thanks.
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Prosy is more essay like- without poetic device, such as Metaphor, some rhyme, (without consistency) alliteration Etc. Otherwise there is no distinction.
Comment from JLR
Congratulations! Your first post, may you find this wonderful website a great resource and place of safety toi share your work.
It would be most helpful to single space your lines,
Create natural paragragh formating to let your
wise words allow the reader to drink in your well delveloped thoughts.
Thanks for dipping your toe in the world of poetry, write often and I wish you great successes!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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Congratulations! Your first post, may you find this wonderful website a great resource and place of safety toi share your work.
It would be most helpful to single space your lines,
Create natural paragragh formating to let your
wise words allow the reader to drink in your well delveloped thoughts.
Thanks for dipping your toe in the world of poetry, write often and I wish you great successes!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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I did - will try to fix - MS now allows me only 2 fingers to type - wearing and I miss things.
Thank you. I recently let go of a brother who seems to have let go of me years ago. I found several others with MS and similar diseases did the same. This is my response to our group's lives and strength.
What may I review of yours?
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Wow! Kudo?s to you for your formidable strength to overcome a tough life hurdle, I am quite impressed, my writings are under my nome de plume JLR
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Thanks so much!
Send me links to your work and will review :)
Comment from country ranch writer
We hide life's scars hoping no one can see threw our pain and suffering over the years in private we let our tears silently fall hoping no one discovers what you have gone through with the abuse.
Thursday 1/26/2023.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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We hide life's scars hoping no one can see threw our pain and suffering over the years in private we let our tears silently fall hoping no one discovers what you have gone through with the abuse.
Thursday 1/26/2023.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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Ye s. So many kinds...
Thank you. I recently let go of a brother who seems to have let go of me years ago. I found several others with MS and similar diseases did the same. This is my response to our group's lives and strength.
What may I review of yours?
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Congratulations for writing your first poem in Fanstory.
I've been here two years and have grown as a writer.
What you write about scars and bruises can be identified
By almost anyone. However, in my life strangers, have also inflicted scars upon me throughout the years.
Nice imagery and symbolism.
Good luck with this gray poem.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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Congratulations for writing your first poem in Fanstory.
I've been here two years and have grown as a writer.
What you write about scars and bruises can be identified
By almost anyone. However, in my life strangers, have also inflicted scars upon me throughout the years.
Nice imagery and symbolism.
Good luck with this gray poem.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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Thank you. I recently let go of a brother who seems to have let go of me years ago. I found several others with MS and similar diseases did the same. This is my response to our group's lives and strength.
What may I review of yours?