One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from w.j.debi
I know you are the Haiku queen on the site, but I didn't know you wrote prose. I love this. You go in depth into how it feels to be totally alone. Even the introvert needs human contact and, with it missing, repeats the grieving process many times. Is there hope for the future? Can the human race recover through this one person? Love that you end the story with that contemplative verse to emphasis the feeling of despair.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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I know you are the Haiku queen on the site, but I didn't know you wrote prose. I love this. You go in depth into how it feels to be totally alone. Even the introvert needs human contact and, with it missing, repeats the grieving process many times. Is there hope for the future? Can the human race recover through this one person? Love that you end the story with that contemplative verse to emphasis the feeling of despair.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hello, Debi, this poem is called 'Haibun'. It's a Japanese poem that combines prose and haiku. Long stories are not my cup of tea but short stories are fine. I try a variety of poems to keep it interesting. :)
Thank you for taking the time to read my poem. I appreciate your exceptional six stars review!
gypsy hugs
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Hi Gypsy,
Thank you for the information. You keep giving me more to study. LOL.
Debi
Comment from AP Apgar
I think I like your verse - story, I hope will remain fiction - paints a gloomy picture of possible outcomes of another war in our time - the bomb drop in the second world war was indeed devastating- read books about it -a war now would certainly be much worse for those who survived the initial, and multi-pal strikes that would be involved- and with warheads thousands of time more lethal. In the real world being at ground zero would be a blessing. On that cheery note - Good Job, lets pray now. AP
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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I think I like your verse - story, I hope will remain fiction - paints a gloomy picture of possible outcomes of another war in our time - the bomb drop in the second world war was indeed devastating- read books about it -a war now would certainly be much worse for those who survived the initial, and multi-pal strikes that would be involved- and with warheads thousands of time more lethal. In the real world being at ground zero would be a blessing. On that cheery note - Good Job, lets pray now. AP
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much, ap, I appreciate your review.
Gypsy
Comment from Carlos' girl
The title of this story caught my eye. Beautiful and lonely. I believe Some people are destined to live a life of solitude. It can be beautiful. I like this story it has a poetic quality. I think of Lara in Dr Zhivago living alone, waiting for her lover in the cold winter. I think it is that hope that sustains us. Maybe this character will meet her true love...i hope so
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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The title of this story caught my eye. Beautiful and lonely. I believe Some people are destined to live a life of solitude. It can be beautiful. I like this story it has a poetic quality. I think of Lara in Dr Zhivago living alone, waiting for her lover in the cold winter. I think it is that hope that sustains us. Maybe this character will meet her true love...i hope so
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate your kind review and the time you spent reading it. Happy Weekend!
Gypsy hugs
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Thanks Gypsy
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Your lady in this poem inspired me to write a poem "Sugar and Tea" :)
Comment from Mary Vigasin
At first, I did not know where this was going, and then the reason for her loneliness was revealed as a survivor of a Nuclear war.
Absolutely creative and clever.
I sometimes think using I to start every sentence hurts a piece, but not in this case, as the character's world revolves around her alone.
Well done.
Mary
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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At first, I did not know where this was going, and then the reason for her loneliness was revealed as a survivor of a Nuclear war.
Absolutely creative and clever.
I sometimes think using I to start every sentence hurts a piece, but not in this case, as the character's world revolves around her alone.
Well done.
Mary
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Mary,
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. You are very kind.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
Well, I cried, and I laughed, (man or sperm bank) as the one you have described in this story many emotions while reading your words, I am very glad that you left me with a positive thought, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Well, I cried, and I laughed, (man or sperm bank) as the one you have described in this story many emotions while reading your words, I am very glad that you left me with a positive thought, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Kym, thank you very much for the exceptional six stars review... you are very kind.
Gypsy hugs
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I like what I like
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with me. I have read that children in orphanages in third world countries only get their basic needs met and are so overcrowded the being held or touched isn't possible. These children fail to thrive because of it. It's sad, some will die. I'm sorry, I know that doesn't match your entry, but it's what came to my mind. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with me. I have read that children in orphanages in third world countries only get their basic needs met and are so overcrowded the being held or touched isn't possible. These children fail to thrive because of it. It's sad, some will die. I'm sorry, I know that doesn't match your entry, but it's what came to my mind. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Japanese poetry is very visual and insightful. Whatever comes to the reader's mind is different for each person, there is no wrong review. I am honored that it prompted you to reflect on the meaning.
Barbara, thank you very much for the helpful and kind feedback. I appreciate the excellent five stars review.
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Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine write, Gypsy--did you ever see the Twilight Zone where Burgess Merideth is the last surviver of an event that kills everyone else, and is happy because people bother him and he loves reading books. He finds a library and settles own to start reading and accidently breaks his glasses and is unable to see without them
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Another fine write, Gypsy--did you ever see the Twilight Zone where Burgess Merideth is the last surviver of an event that kills everyone else, and is happy because people bother him and he loves reading books. He finds a library and settles own to start reading and accidently breaks his glasses and is unable to see without them
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Mike, thank you very much for the helpful and kind feedback. I appreciate the excellent five stars review.
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Comment from lyenochka
Great job with your haibun-like entry to this contest! I think you captured the reality of the world as it could be after such a nuclear winter. I like how the narrator ends with a positive outlook to maybe be the source who could repopulate the Earth. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Great job with your haibun-like entry to this contest! I think you captured the reality of the world as it could be after such a nuclear winter. I like how the narrator ends with a positive outlook to maybe be the source who could repopulate the Earth. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Big Sister. I hope I win but you never know. I'm glad you like it, coming from you, it means a lot to me. You are one of the top best writers.
Love,
Marival ❤️
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Aww! No, there are a lot of great writers here who don't post as much! 💖
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Apart from the fact that I believe Covid-19 to have been our foe in WWIII so I would call your war WWIV this is an excellent entry to the contest. Chilling that you feel we have learnt so little from the past, but excellent nevertheless. kay
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Apart from the fact that I believe Covid-19 to have been our foe in WWIII so I would call your war WWIV this is an excellent entry to the contest. Chilling that you feel we have learnt so little from the past, but excellent nevertheless. kay
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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It's science fiction, it's doesn't reflect my opinion. I have faith in us too.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from Jasmine Girl
This is a very emotional piece. You are good at writing prose and this one impressed me. Human touch is important. Because of the pandemic, I don't have to go to work anymore. I stay home and work remotely. I want to write more so I cut down to part-time. Now whenever I go to office, I enjoy seeing people. I miss going to the office. My husband and I are doing some group activities like rowing and dancing.
Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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This is a very emotional piece. You are good at writing prose and this one impressed me. Human touch is important. Because of the pandemic, I don't have to go to work anymore. I stay home and work remotely. I want to write more so I cut down to part-time. Now whenever I go to office, I enjoy seeing people. I miss going to the office. My husband and I are doing some group activities like rowing and dancing.
Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Rowing and dancing sounds like fun. My daughter and her husband work for the state and have been working from home since the pandemic started. They save a lot of money on gas.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs