It's in My Blood
My journey of becoming a teacher and writer.75 total reviews
Comment from Reese Turner
How I so relate. My road has been long and winding with some wrong turns, dead ends and traps. But, add these up and it equals adventure. Yours has been a neat trip and now you are in a great income lane, with the dedication to take some side roads when you choose. I like it. Live your life, lady!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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How I so relate. My road has been long and winding with some wrong turns, dead ends and traps. But, add these up and it equals adventure. Yours has been a neat trip and now you are in a great income lane, with the dedication to take some side roads when you choose. I like it. Live your life, lady!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Reese! I appreciate it and your feedback. Awww, thank you! That means a lot to me. I'm thrilled you enjoyed the story. Thank you again for reading. Take care. :D :D
Comment from Sanku
it read like a prose poem.but the form is suitable to tell the story of your journey .I was also an English teacher.
By joining fanstory you are one step closer to fulfilling your desire to become a writer
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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it read like a prose poem.but the form is suitable to tell the story of your journey .I was also an English teacher.
By joining fanstory you are one step closer to fulfilling your desire to become a writer
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing! I appreciate it and your feedback. Awww, thank you! That means a lot to me. That's awesome. What grade/grades did you teach, if I may ask? Thank you again for reading. Take care. :D :D
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Undergraduates ;general English and Literature
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Nice! I've mainly done elementary, intermediate, middle school, and then some college level with reviewing essays during my college days.
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Nice! I've mainly done elementary, intermediate, middle school, and then some college level with reviewing essays during my college days.
Comment from Mark Kuglin
That was a delightful piece and enjoyable read.
At first, the rhythm threw me. But then, I found myself grasping at each new line and bit of information.
Overall, it flows well.
It's a wonderful expression of your journey.
I can see why it was a labor of love.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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That was a delightful piece and enjoyable read.
At first, the rhythm threw me. But then, I found myself grasping at each new line and bit of information.
Overall, it flows well.
It's a wonderful expression of your journey.
I can see why it was a labor of love.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mark. I appreciate it and your feedback. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thank you again for reading. Take care. :D :D
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My pleasure
Comment from Heather lyn Tobias
Wow, that was great. I smiled, laughed, and remembered what it was like as a child. Now as a grown-up going after my passions. Thank you for sharing this poem.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Wow, that was great. I smiled, laughed, and remembered what it was like as a child. Now as a grown-up going after my passions. Thank you for sharing this poem.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Heather. I appreciate it and your feedback. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thank you again for reading. Take care. :D :D
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The subject of this poem is excellent, as is the organisation. It's the general nuts and bolts of the structure that let you down slightly, as an over-reliance on enjambement detracts from the power of your message. kay
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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The subject of this poem is excellent, as is the organisation. It's the general nuts and bolts of the structure that let you down slightly, as an over-reliance on enjambement detracts from the power of your message. kay
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Kay. I appreciate it and your feedback. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thank you again for reading. Take care. :D :D
Comment from Aussie
Yes, the spacing is messy. How about quatrains? Four lines and hit ENTER twice. However, I would have written this as a short story, it isn't a poem. But, congrats on All Time Best. It is biographical, your life story. Only the lack of spacing holds it back.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Yes, the spacing is messy. How about quatrains? Four lines and hit ENTER twice. However, I would have written this as a short story, it isn't a poem. But, congrats on All Time Best. It is biographical, your life story. Only the lack of spacing holds it back.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate it and your feedback. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thank you again for reading. Take care. :D :D
Comment from AudreyRose
I love it! What a journey, andnone that I can relate to. I just graduated in October with a degree in writing and am struggling to find my place. You inspire me though.
The loose flowing, free style fits the topic and allows you to express your emotions with meter change and rhythm alteration. You provide enough details for the imagery to come through clearly and the story to make sense. I especially like the way each ending line, stating that its ik n your blood, was different in how it was said - whispered, giggled, echoed, etc. All in all, wonderful job. Don't change a thing!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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I love it! What a journey, andnone that I can relate to. I just graduated in October with a degree in writing and am struggling to find my place. You inspire me though.
The loose flowing, free style fits the topic and allows you to express your emotions with meter change and rhythm alteration. You provide enough details for the imagery to come through clearly and the story to make sense. I especially like the way each ending line, stating that its ik n your blood, was different in how it was said - whispered, giggled, echoed, etc. All in all, wonderful job. Don't change a thing!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, AudreyRose. (Gorgeous name, by the way). I appreciate it and your feedback. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Congrats on your graduation. You'll find your place. Sometimes it takes a bit, but it'll happen. The best advice I ever got was during my college orientation, where the speaker said to follow my passion. Thank you again for reading. Take care. :D :D
Comment from Ida T. Johnson
I share your perseverance for staying true to yourself! Yes, your journey indeed makes YOU who you are, and you're proud of "these hats" that you collected along the way! I'll bet it felt good getting this out of your word processor! Spacing: when you go back to edit your poem, turn on "BASIC EDITOR" for help in pasting from Word; there's a highlighted link under the textbox for your work. When you're ready to actually edit, delete your entire poem and RECUT AND REPASTE it in BASIC editor. Make all further edits in ADVANCED editor. Hope this helps. Great job!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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I share your perseverance for staying true to yourself! Yes, your journey indeed makes YOU who you are, and you're proud of "these hats" that you collected along the way! I'll bet it felt good getting this out of your word processor! Spacing: when you go back to edit your poem, turn on "BASIC EDITOR" for help in pasting from Word; there's a highlighted link under the textbox for your work. When you're ready to actually edit, delete your entire poem and RECUT AND REPASTE it in BASIC editor. Make all further edits in ADVANCED editor. Hope this helps. Great job!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Ida. I appreciate it and your feedback. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Yes, it does. Thank you! Thank you again for reading. Take care. :D :D
Comment from Lady MJ
Loved it! I too started out writing in high school and the passion has never left me, although my life journey took me to finding a job that pays the bills, I still kept writing. At a family reunion I found out that my great grandmother wrote poetry. So, I guess, I too, have it in the blood.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Loved it! I too started out writing in high school and the passion has never left me, although my life journey took me to finding a job that pays the bills, I still kept writing. At a family reunion I found out that my great grandmother wrote poetry. So, I guess, I too, have it in the blood.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate it and your feedback. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. That's awesome about your great grandmother. Pretty cool when we have that sort of history, right? Thank you again for reading. Take care. :D :D
Comment from Mintybee
This is a very good poem. It reads a bit like nonfiction, as the lines are largely correct and complete sentences, but I'm not opposed to prose poems. It's hard to do well, but you have a lot of solid images that make it work, like, "A hand plunges through my sea of doubt, grasps my outstretched fingers." The repetition works nicely too. It's a longer poem, which allows the reader to follow your journey more closely, and identify with your feelings, struggles, and successes more fully. I'm sorry I can't help with your spacing issue. I've been unable to figure it out too, and it drives me nuts. Adding the spaces with an asterisk like you did was a creative solve!
Mintybee
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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This is a very good poem. It reads a bit like nonfiction, as the lines are largely correct and complete sentences, but I'm not opposed to prose poems. It's hard to do well, but you have a lot of solid images that make it work, like, "A hand plunges through my sea of doubt, grasps my outstretched fingers." The repetition works nicely too. It's a longer poem, which allows the reader to follow your journey more closely, and identify with your feelings, struggles, and successes more fully. I'm sorry I can't help with your spacing issue. I've been unable to figure it out too, and it drives me nuts. Adding the spaces with an asterisk like you did was a creative solve!
Mintybee
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mintybee. I appreciate it and your feedback. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thank you again for reading. Take care. :D :D
