Bend
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Comment from pome lover
this is lovely and true, and I think, (unless I'm wrong :) there is structural ambiguity here, as this poem could also apply to people who bend under pressure, surviving, or to people who agree to meet in the middle - that's a bit far fetched as an example, but there's a word I'm looking for but can't come up with for your poem - a phrase or sentence that could refer to something else, as well. (help?)
Anyway, good poem and picture, and best of luck in the contest.
Katharine
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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this is lovely and true, and I think, (unless I'm wrong :) there is structural ambiguity here, as this poem could also apply to people who bend under pressure, surviving, or to people who agree to meet in the middle - that's a bit far fetched as an example, but there's a word I'm looking for but can't come up with for your poem - a phrase or sentence that could refer to something else, as well. (help?)
Anyway, good poem and picture, and best of luck in the contest.
Katharine
Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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You are right, I was aiming for that duel meaning. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Are you certain that this is about nature and not the storms that rage in your soul?
Ha! Just playing. This is a great piece of work for the Nature Haiku. Did you know that one Haiku is a Haiku but two Haiku are also Haiku? The plural is the same. I just learnt that.
Okay, good work here!
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Are you certain that this is about nature and not the storms that rage in your soul?
Ha! Just playing. This is a great piece of work for the Nature Haiku. Did you know that one Haiku is a Haiku but two Haiku are also Haiku? The plural is the same. I just learnt that.
Okay, good work here!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the lesson and review.
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I do tend to ramble?
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem and entry for the contest
with exact syllable count and very good description.
The theme of bending in nature is well applied to being flexible
in life. Rigidity leads to many problems, even trees will snap
if they don't bend.
Well done.
Best wishes in the contest.
Robert
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem and entry for the contest
with exact syllable count and very good description.
The theme of bending in nature is well applied to being flexible
in life. Rigidity leads to many problems, even trees will snap
if they don't bend.
Well done.
Best wishes in the contest.
Robert
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Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind words.
Comment from mermaids
You have a strong image of nature in your words. The bending trees show how strong and resilient they are. Your words appeal to the senses and the strong wind is felt. Excellent use of words.
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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You have a strong image of nature in your words. The bending trees show how strong and resilient they are. Your words appeal to the senses and the strong wind is felt. Excellent use of words.
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Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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Thank you for your wonderful review.
