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Comment from royowen
You said you were going to spend some time sharing an adventure writing, with some of your bloodthirsty characters, cutting through flesh and fixing the little red wagon of their victims, well done Bill, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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You said you were going to spend some time sharing an adventure writing, with some of your bloodthirsty characters, cutting through flesh and fixing the little red wagon of their victims, well done Bill, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Roy, for giving this a look.
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Most welcome Bill
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Bill,
There's blood and guts all over the greens at this golf course! Holy Cow!
Chainsaws instead of golf clubs. All that's needed here is the Queen of Hearts yelling: "Off with their heads!"
Loved all the contestants' names, especially "The Man Who Shall Not Be Named".
You have quite the imagination, buddy! Nicely penned! I wish I had your muse.
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Hi Bill,
There's blood and guts all over the greens at this golf course! Holy Cow!
Chainsaws instead of golf clubs. All that's needed here is the Queen of Hearts yelling: "Off with their heads!"
Loved all the contestants' names, especially "The Man Who Shall Not Be Named".
You have quite the imagination, buddy! Nicely penned! I wish I had your muse.
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Have to air out the maniac wing of the mansion every once in a while.
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Lol!
Comment from Malcolm Rothery
Words and phrases like random and out-there come to mind, but boy do I like this. If you stuck it between two tectonic plates it could not be more twisted. But I want to know - why did Love Boat and Angus run off? I won't be able to sleep now!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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Words and phrases like random and out-there come to mind, but boy do I like this. If you stuck it between two tectonic plates it could not be more twisted. But I want to know - why did Love Boat and Angus run off? I won't be able to sleep now!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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Stay tuned for Hot Potato Hand Grenades.
Comment from judiverse
I'd say this contest was doomed from the start. Running with a chainsaw could in itself lead to tragedy. This isn't much worse than some of those reality shows I've seen promoted on TV. I'm glad the winner, The Man Who Shall Not Be Named, spared the sapling. If he hopes to survive, I hope he avoids the hot potato hand grenades contest. His luck won't last forever. Excellent presentation, and it was enhanced by the matter-of-fact description judi
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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I'd say this contest was doomed from the start. Running with a chainsaw could in itself lead to tragedy. This isn't much worse than some of those reality shows I've seen promoted on TV. I'm glad the winner, The Man Who Shall Not Be Named, spared the sapling. If he hopes to survive, I hope he avoids the hot potato hand grenades contest. His luck won't last forever. Excellent presentation, and it was enhanced by the matter-of-fact description judi
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Judi, for giving this a look. Bill
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YOu're welcome. I hope this doesn't spark a new reality TV series. It could be dangerous. judi
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is the weirdest world and the strangest game I've ever read about. I would not like to live here, although having so many one handed or one armed people suggests they have a lot of games to play. It definitely cuts down on an overpopulation problem. Very well written and no problems found, although I do wonder why the last two with chainsaws ran off in different directions. You do have an original imagination.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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This is the weirdest world and the strangest game I've ever read about. I would not like to live here, although having so many one handed or one armed people suggests they have a lot of games to play. It definitely cuts down on an overpopulation problem. Very well written and no problems found, although I do wonder why the last two with chainsaws ran off in different directions. You do have an original imagination.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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This is the sequel to CLEAVER CLASH. There will be a third with grenades. The characters with partial limbs were in the first story.
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Of course they were. Grenades don't usually take just one limb.
Comment from Earl Corp
Hot potato hand grenades sounds like a fun read and I'll be waiting to check it out. This one was hard to predict. How ironic the man who shall not be named won without touching a chainsaw. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Hot potato hand grenades sounds like a fun read and I'll be waiting to check it out. This one was hard to predict. How ironic the man who shall not be named won without touching a chainsaw. Very nice job.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Earl
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Someone used a chainsaw to cut the hedge near my brand new car whilst I was at work one day. They bounced it across the bonnet of my care and I was devastated when I saw the damage. The accountant at the firm I worked for was responsible and he never admitted to it and the insurance company paid for my bonnet to be repaired. Later I was made redundant from this firm and the accountant came to my house to deliver the news, it is a wonder I didn't take a chainsaw to him and chop off his head! Sorry for the violence in my reply! Your directions here made me smile as your massacre is tongue in cheek, an inventive write Bill, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Someone used a chainsaw to cut the hedge near my brand new car whilst I was at work one day. They bounced it across the bonnet of my care and I was devastated when I saw the damage. The accountant at the firm I worked for was responsible and he never admitted to it and the insurance company paid for my bonnet to be repaired. Later I was made redundant from this firm and the accountant came to my house to deliver the news, it is a wonder I didn't take a chainsaw to him and chop off his head! Sorry for the violence in my reply! Your directions here made me smile as your massacre is tongue in cheek, an inventive write Bill, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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I?ll give this accountant a part in the hot potato hand grenade game.
Comment from kahpot
Gruesome! though not so gruesome so the reader could concentrate and follow the carnage, hot potato hand grenades should be an interesting read, very well written, a most enjoyable story****kahpot
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Gruesome! though not so gruesome so the reader could concentrate and follow the carnage, hot potato hand grenades should be an interesting read, very well written, a most enjoyable story****kahpot
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thank you, kahpot.
Comment from susand3022
Someone missed a Halloween post!
Hey Bill, gruesome!
What's with the chainsaw massacre? Have you been having nightmares recently? Watching too much Criminal Minds? I haven't seen the new show yet, but it sounds like something they'd do. Ever think of writing for them? lol
Of course, it wouldn't be a game... it's got to be some nasty serial killer that's put them all in there, and the one that survives, goes free or something.
Looks like non-violence is the answer after all. Either that or just having no name so Death can't find you...
Susan :)
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Someone missed a Halloween post!
Hey Bill, gruesome!
What's with the chainsaw massacre? Have you been having nightmares recently? Watching too much Criminal Minds? I haven't seen the new show yet, but it sounds like something they'd do. Ever think of writing for them? lol
Of course, it wouldn't be a game... it's got to be some nasty serial killer that's put them all in there, and the one that survives, goes free or something.
Looks like non-violence is the answer after all. Either that or just having no name so Death can't find you...
Susan :)
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Sorry so violent. I'm catering to demand.
Comment from lyenochka
Well, I had to speed-read past the massacre but am happy that the Man Who Shall Not Be Named made off with the sapling which could have easily been killed off by the numerous attempts.
I find this character gender-confusing: Claudia, the former "bearded man" wasn't this the man who claimed to be the "bearded woman" ?
Insane Dwayne, a traveling one-hand nurse (one-handed?)
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Well, I had to speed-read past the massacre but am happy that the Man Who Shall Not Be Named made off with the sapling which could have easily been killed off by the numerous attempts.
I find this character gender-confusing: Claudia, the former "bearded man" wasn't this the man who claimed to be the "bearded woman" ?
Insane Dwayne, a traveling one-hand nurse (one-handed?)
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Claudia was first described as the former bearded woman who was now a bearded man. I kept referring to Claudia as him. I think "one- handed" would be an adverb, where one-hand is an adjective, however, there is no research to back me up.
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I would think the adverb would be one-handedly. Here's one website that says one-handed is an adjective:
https://www.wordnik.com/words/one-handed
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You are correct. Helen 2, Bill 0.
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Lol. You win in other categories. I had to learn this language and so the rules somehow stick more.
