Some Call It Luck
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Comment from Jay Squires
I don't know who was the bigger saint, E.J. or Abby. The last part of this chapter had a feeling of a summary to it. Not a bad thing, but too much of it can lose the identification of the reader with the character.
I told her all about the dream I'd had--about the putting lesson with Eddie to cure my yips, [Wait, that was also part of the dream? That was some dream! ... That said, I fully expected you to tell me that the putting lesson wasn't a dream ... and I was surprised later to find it was. This is not said in criticism, but speaks more of my earlier inattention. As an aside, if you ever did go back to revise your entire novel (perhaps in readiness of getting it published) I would consider tossing in some very, very subtle hints that, while they do not suggest that E.J. was dreaming, they would cause the reader later on, when it IS disclosed, to remember the hints in his mind. Do you know what I mean?
Anyway, you did a fabulous job with this chapter, Jim.
Jay
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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I don't know who was the bigger saint, E.J. or Abby. The last part of this chapter had a feeling of a summary to it. Not a bad thing, but too much of it can lose the identification of the reader with the character.
I told her all about the dream I'd had--about the putting lesson with Eddie to cure my yips, [Wait, that was also part of the dream? That was some dream! ... That said, I fully expected you to tell me that the putting lesson wasn't a dream ... and I was surprised later to find it was. This is not said in criticism, but speaks more of my earlier inattention. As an aside, if you ever did go back to revise your entire novel (perhaps in readiness of getting it published) I would consider tossing in some very, very subtle hints that, while they do not suggest that E.J. was dreaming, they would cause the reader later on, when it IS disclosed, to remember the hints in his mind. Do you know what I mean?
Anyway, you did a fabulous job with this chapter, Jim.
Jay
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Excellent suggestion, Jay. I'll have to think of a few of those. Thanks!
Comment from royowen
It certainly looks like E.J. is over the worst part, the need will never quite go away, the weakness in the personality that caused the addiction in the first place will never go away, but a decision to be addicted to something healthier will be better, because God appeared for me, He is my saviour and addiction. Everyone needs Him, whether they believe it or not. People are not enough. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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It certainly looks like E.J. is over the worst part, the need will never quite go away, the weakness in the personality that caused the addiction in the first place will never go away, but a decision to be addicted to something healthier will be better, because God appeared for me, He is my saviour and addiction. Everyone needs Him, whether they believe it or not. People are not enough. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much, Roy. I'm so glad you were able to replace your addiction with a healthy one, as you say.
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I never joined AA, but it?s a great organisation, I was with people that didn?t drink, or smoke, or gamble. That helps.
Comment from MissMerri
I thought this chapter was extremely well written and edited and full of interesting information too. The characters are real to me, making me care a lot about what happens to them. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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I thought this chapter was extremely well written and edited and full of interesting information too. The characters are real to me, making me care a lot about what happens to them. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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I'm very happy you found this, MM. I've been posting a chapter almost every day for a while now. The book is about 3/4 of the way through, and there should be about 15 more chapters before it's done. I hope it maintains your interest.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I had an appointment; I may be late but when I saw you had posted this, I just had to read it. I'm glad E.J. is on the road to recovery. I hope he remains on it. Bye, of to my appointment.
nurse Betty told me that Dr. Perrott would talk to me at 10:00 the next morning (the following morning)
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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I had an appointment; I may be late but when I saw you had posted this, I just had to read it. I'm glad E.J. is on the road to recovery. I hope he remains on it. Bye, of to my appointment.
nurse Betty told me that Dr. Perrott would talk to me at 10:00 the next morning (the following morning)
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Barbara. Nice to see you're so invested in the story. It's about at the 3/4 point, so still lots of action to come--perhaps 15 more chapters.
Comment from jmdg1954
Looks like EJ is back on the mends with Abby's help. This chapter seemed to span a few weeks time.
Looking forward to see what happens next.
Cheers. John
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Looks like EJ is back on the mends with Abby's help. This chapter seemed to span a few weeks time.
Looking forward to see what happens next.
Cheers. John
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thanks, John. We're now 3/4 of the way through the story. Lots yet to come.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Well that's a complete 180 for E.J.
One fine tune:
she told me to drink down and a pill of some kind. I didn't ask her any questions about what she was giving me. I was very tired and didn't feel so well, so I just did what she told me.
(I would reword one of the 'she told me' because it trips up the reader. Just my two cents. )
Great work here. Character growth is important and you are nailing it!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Well that's a complete 180 for E.J.
One fine tune:
she told me to drink down and a pill of some kind. I didn't ask her any questions about what she was giving me. I was very tired and didn't feel so well, so I just did what she told me.
(I would reword one of the 'she told me' because it trips up the reader. Just my two cents. )
Great work here. Character growth is important and you are nailing it!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Douglas, and good catch on the repetition.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
If this was the end, Amen, I say, I think this chapter is as good as it gets, though I felt odd with one word used ... bastion. Yes, it fits but it fel odd on the read. The final chapter, right?
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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If this was the end, Amen, I say, I think this chapter is as good as it gets, though I felt odd with one word used ... bastion. Yes, it fits but it fel odd on the read. The final chapter, right?
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Not quite. We are 3/4 of the way through the story now. Lots more excitement ahead.
Thanks for the great review, Tom, and for staying with it.
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Hmm. I read someone's note it was a final chapter. Me thought, it was your story.
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Yeah, it was probably my note that said this was the conclusion of the chapter E.J. Budrowski - September, 1987. (Not the whole book--just that chapter, which I had to cover in about 5 chapters in FanStory because of its length.)
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