Greedy Parasite
Restitution never ends26 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a well-written account of a white-collar trial and how he had little remorse for what he did to his boss since his boss made so much more money than he did he felt he didn't deserve the sentence in prison. I have my own feelings about these crimes which go unnoticed so much of the time and are still wrong in every sense of the world.
Thank you for writing and I wish you the best in the contest for two kinds of vices.
Jesse
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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This is a well-written account of a white-collar trial and how he had little remorse for what he did to his boss since his boss made so much more money than he did he felt he didn't deserve the sentence in prison. I have my own feelings about these crimes which go unnoticed so much of the time and are still wrong in every sense of the world.
Thank you for writing and I wish you the best in the contest for two kinds of vices.
Jesse
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Jesse for reading my entry.
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You're welcome. Good luck with the contest!
Jesse
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely written. Good work.
"courts dismissed." - court's dismissed
Your last sentence declares sloth and envy to be the two picked, but neither is described in the story except in the statement - "I was envious."
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Nicely written. Good work.
"courts dismissed." - court's dismissed
Your last sentence declares sloth and envy to be the two picked, but neither is described in the story except in the statement - "I was envious."
Best wishes.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading and your insight. Greed should?ve been picked up.
Thx again.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting story. Setting the telling in court as evidence was a nice idea. The pace is good. The images are clear. The narrative stays on point. The two deadly sins seem to be greed and pride or maybe envy. The dialogue is believable. The end is expected.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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An interesting story. Setting the telling in court as evidence was a nice idea. The pace is good. The images are clear. The narrative stays on point. The two deadly sins seem to be greed and pride or maybe envy. The dialogue is believable. The end is expected.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading and sharing your comments.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Jay Squires
Your story was entertaining and engagingly written. White-collar crime goes on right under our eyes and certainly greed is probably at its base. However, though I read your piece once and scanned it a second time, I can't, for the life of me, find the second of the seven deadly sins mentioned in your story. Since this is a contest entry, you might want to solidify your chances by mentioning the second sin.
Jay
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Your story was entertaining and engagingly written. White-collar crime goes on right under our eyes and certainly greed is probably at its base. However, though I read your piece once and scanned it a second time, I can't, for the life of me, find the second of the seven deadly sins mentioned in your story. Since this is a contest entry, you might want to solidify your chances by mentioning the second sin.
Jay
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Greed and envy.
Thank you for reading and commenting.
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I'm sure that envy played a part in the crime, but I don't see envy mentioned "by name" in the story, and I think the rules require that two of the sins are mentioned in your otherwise fine story. I just don't want you to be disqualified on a technicality.
Jay
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I made a change. Hopefully in time. Thanks for that but of info that it had to be said.
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You're very welcome. I'm not going crazy, then? I'm glad you made the change and didn't possibly disqualify yourself.
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting. Strange court system in this imaginary world. I am assuming the deadly sin here is Greed. And the that last line was to insert the sin of Envy, so that you officially have two deadly sins in your story.
Good luck. From what I can tell, yours in the only qualifying entry of the two.
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Very interesting. Strange court system in this imaginary world. I am assuming the deadly sin here is Greed. And the that last line was to insert the sin of Envy, so that you officially have two deadly sins in your story.
Good luck. From what I can tell, yours in the only qualifying entry of the two.
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you for stopping to read snd comment.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
He sounds like a rather typical American. They want what the boss has without doing any work. This guy just went a little further and started taking what the boss was supposed to get to keep the business going. Near the beginning, you have this sentence: . . . "case of uttering forged securities. . ." What does this mean?
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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He sounds like a rather typical American. They want what the boss has without doing any work. This guy just went a little further and started taking what the boss was supposed to get to keep the business going. Near the beginning, you have this sentence: . . . "case of uttering forged securities. . ." What does this mean?
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Embezzlement.
Thank you for reading. Very much appreciated.
