Drowning in Close-Mindedness
Just something on a whim to hopefully inspire.9 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I found the first two lines tightly interconnected and focused. Unfortunately I fely that the last, whilst being a valid statement, moved off point slightly. kay
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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I found the first two lines tightly interconnected and focused. Unfortunately I fely that the last, whilst being a valid statement, moved off point slightly. kay
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thank you
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I love the title and I do think a lot about how I think and how it shows me what others think about what I think. This is profound and very telling as you say in your last pivotal line pride anchors, you sink. I am aware that foolish pride gets in the way of ponderous and wise thoughts so I often think before I do.
Jesse
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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I love the title and I do think a lot about how I think and how it shows me what others think about what I think. This is profound and very telling as you say in your last pivotal line pride anchors, you sink. I am aware that foolish pride gets in the way of ponderous and wise thoughts so I often think before I do.
Jesse
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thank you much!
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Good luck with the contest.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
When you have pride, it takes away the kindness and goodness of a person. While pride causes us to filter out the evil, we see in ourselves, it also causes us to filter out God's goodness in others. Like your explanation.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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When you have pride, it takes away the kindness and goodness of a person. While pride causes us to filter out the evil, we see in ourselves, it also causes us to filter out God's goodness in others. Like your explanation.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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I appreciate the feedback so much!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonderful entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. .
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Wonderful entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. .
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Sally Law
I do find a lot of sense in here. A beautifully penned and illustrated poem, colorful and creative. The message is well received and appreciated. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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I do find a lot of sense in here. A beautifully penned and illustrated poem, colorful and creative. The message is well received and appreciated. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from prettybluebirds
I can relate to this writing. I was married to a close-minded man. If he said something was so, no power on earth would change his mind. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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I can relate to this writing. I was married to a close-minded man. If he said something was so, no power on earth would change his mind. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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I?m grateful you found connection to this! Thanks so much for your feedback!
Comment from Douglas Goff
Well oh my goodness, you said whole lot with just a few words. This is certainly a first place contender.
The presentation of art, mixed with your colorful font, are a homerun.
Swing batter!
Great work. Thank you for sharing your big brain!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Well oh my goodness, you said whole lot with just a few words. This is certainly a first place contender.
The presentation of art, mixed with your colorful font, are a homerun.
Swing batter!
Great work. Thank you for sharing your big brain!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much!!
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Thank you so much!!
Comment from lancellot
You think that you know,
But do not know what you think
Pride anchors, You sink.
I get the sentiment behind these words, but I think... you mean excess of almost anything can be a bad thing. Pride by itself isn't an anchor that sinks you. You should have pride in many cases. Pride in yourself, your honor, your children and their accomplishments. Pride in your wife's love and her acts. Yes, even pride in one's country.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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You think that you know,
But do not know what you think
Pride anchors, You sink.
I get the sentiment behind these words, but I think... you mean excess of almost anything can be a bad thing. Pride by itself isn't an anchor that sinks you. You should have pride in many cases. Pride in yourself, your honor, your children and their accomplishments. Pride in your wife's love and her acts. Yes, even pride in one's country.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Agreed wholeheartedly with this! I hoped to convey the message through the fun word play of the first two lines that I was referring to close mindedness and someone who thinks they know everything, shutting any possibility out for no reason other than they know that they know. I appreciate this new perspective and agree that pride is a great thing in many forms! Appreciate the comment! Best to you!
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Agreed wholeheartedly with this! I hoped to convey the message through the fun word play of the first two lines that I was referring to close mindedness and someone who thinks they know everything, shutting any possibility out for no reason other than they know that they know. I appreciate this new perspective and agree that pride is a great thing in many forms! Appreciate the comment! Best to you!
Comment from Nicki Nance
I'm not too free with the sixth star, but your statement that pride anchors is profound. You followed it with the outcome - you sink. What a straightforward way to deliver that lesson. THe graphic was icing on the cake.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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I'm not too free with the sixth star, but your statement that pride anchors is profound. You followed it with the outcome - you sink. What a straightforward way to deliver that lesson. THe graphic was icing on the cake.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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My heart is full! This means a lot! Thank you so so much!
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My heart is full! This means a lot! Thank you so so much!
