The Best Time of Ohmie's Life
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Comment from Susan Newell
Wayne,
I'm assuming this is the end based on your notes. I'm still not sure whether May is real, a delusion, or an Angel of Death come to take Ohmie home. I choose to believe the latter. You have done a great job of blending the real and surreal throughout. Great job giving us a peek into Ohmie's brain and soul.
Sue
Did Michelangelo want to paint anything between God's hand and man's, a priest? As he painted God's hand, did he imagine that it was truly there all the time, and Adam, need only reach out to touch him? I saw myself as Michelangelo, his painting hand wanting to close the gap between the stretching fingertips. -- ******
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Wayne,
I'm assuming this is the end based on your notes. I'm still not sure whether May is real, a delusion, or an Angel of Death come to take Ohmie home. I choose to believe the latter. You have done a great job of blending the real and surreal throughout. Great job giving us a peek into Ohmie's brain and soul.
Sue
Did Michelangelo want to paint anything between God's hand and man's, a priest? As he painted God's hand, did he imagine that it was truly there all the time, and Adam, need only reach out to touch him? I saw myself as Michelangelo, his painting hand wanting to close the gap between the stretching fingertips. -- ******
Comment Written 16-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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I left the ending ambiguous. Your take was perfect, a delight to my eyes and soul.
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I'm glad I got it.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
It's the end of the story, but does Ohmie end? I read it as him imagining the people around him, helping him get back on his feet yet one more time. My husband's mother described all manner of friends and family (all dead) coming in "the screened door on the back of the house" as she was dying. The fact that he made peace with all his loved ones here tells me that he died. It's sad, but I think it's appropriate and well thought out.
It's been quite a journey - I applaud you for sticking with one idea for so long. I can't imagine my brain being engaged in one story idea for as long as it takes to write a book! Great job, Wayne!
Pam
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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It's the end of the story, but does Ohmie end? I read it as him imagining the people around him, helping him get back on his feet yet one more time. My husband's mother described all manner of friends and family (all dead) coming in "the screened door on the back of the house" as she was dying. The fact that he made peace with all his loved ones here tells me that he died. It's sad, but I think it's appropriate and well thought out.
It's been quite a journey - I applaud you for sticking with one idea for so long. I can't imagine my brain being engaged in one story idea for as long as it takes to write a book! Great job, Wayne!
Pam
Comment Written 13-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Believe it or not. This was written in less than two weeks. The next part, Civil War 2 was a lot slower coming. I stopped after 9 chapters - no heart for it.
I thought I would leave Ohmie's end ambiguous. I was just kinda sorry at this point (considering Beautiful May) that he was only 13. (smiley face here)
Thank you for your very kind review.
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Sometimes it's hard to end a story, especially one that you have spent so much time with. I've had the same experience.
Comment from lyenochka
So Ohmie didn't die but has a bit of a recovery because of his love for May? I felt like the telling of this scene was rather like a dream and I wasn't quite sure what was really happening and what was imagined by Ohmie.
I do agree that stage 4 cancer patients could live longer than the experts predict.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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So Ohmie didn't die but has a bit of a recovery because of his love for May? I felt like the telling of this scene was rather like a dream and I wasn't quite sure what was really happening and what was imagined by Ohmie.
I do agree that stage 4 cancer patients could live longer than the experts predict.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Thank you.
Yes, I left Ohmie's end ambiguous.
Comment from Wendy G
The end? It seems so. Everything is complete, and he is happy. As much as he can be, given the health struggles. Yet, being Ohmie, perhaps .... Well written, Wayne. Kudos.
Wendy
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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The end? It seems so. Everything is complete, and he is happy. As much as he can be, given the health struggles. Yet, being Ohmie, perhaps .... Well written, Wayne. Kudos.
Wendy
Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Thank you for a very nice review.
Yes, I left Ohmie's end ambiguous.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a good ending. Not knowing what awaited on the other side of the door can give everyone a little hope. Not that we really believe the worse won't happen, not knowing how ill he is, but that little bit of hope is a good thing. This has been a wonderful story. Ohmie is a little like the Hardy Boys, he can always pull good out of bad things.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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This is a good ending. Not knowing what awaited on the other side of the door can give everyone a little hope. Not that we really believe the worse won't happen, not knowing how ill he is, but that little bit of hope is a good thing. This has been a wonderful story. Ohmie is a little like the Hardy Boys, he can always pull good out of bad things.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Your story is so well written. I thought you were going to let him die this time. It is true people often live a long time with cancer. In the year 2000, the doctors gave my brother three months to live. My brother said he had things to do and wasn't ready to die yet. He lived until August 2008.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Your story is so well written. I thought you were going to let him die this time. It is true people often live a long time with cancer. In the year 2000, the doctors gave my brother three months to live. My brother said he had things to do and wasn't ready to die yet. He lived until August 2008.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Thank you for a very nice review.
But Ohmie quit his treatments, so...
Comment from royowen
I suppose when sick, we are likely to be almost completely alone, or there will sign I can't others to help us on our way, without which we would be completely bereft, unless, of course, they weren't there at all. A lot of my close friends who have died had an obviousness of God with, a great comfort to them. Beautifully wrutten, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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I suppose when sick, we are likely to be almost completely alone, or there will sign I can't others to help us on our way, without which we would be completely bereft, unless, of course, they weren't there at all. A lot of my close friends who have died had an obviousness of God with, a great comfort to them. Beautifully wrutten, blessings Roy
Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Thank you for your very nice review.
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Welcome
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
But you didn't write THE END. So there's going to be a reprise right? Smething, somewhere is yet to happen. It has to. The world needs all the Ohmie it can get. Rest, then let him roam some more. kay xx
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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But you didn't write THE END. So there's going to be a reprise right? Smething, somewhere is yet to happen. It has to. The world needs all the Ohmie it can get. Rest, then let him roam some more. kay xx
Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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smiley face here
Thank you for a very encouraging review.
Yes, I left the door open on purpose. The stuff I'm not posting is an American Civil War between the left and the (MAGA) right. While I have strong feelings in that realm, I really don't want to alienate friends (and/or relatives). My wife says that I can do a continuation without going political. Maybe. I'll have to get on Ohmie's thinking rock.
