Comment from Rachelle Allen

Excellent

Yikes. This was painful! But then, what marital discord isn't! So, job well done that way. The picture you found to go with it really amusing. The car certainly has some serious "headlights." Good luck in the contest. I hope it's a happier ending for you than it was for these two in your story!

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thanks for the review, Rachelle. We've been taking those Sunday rides for fifty-seven years now, and we still sleep in the same bed.

reply by Rachelle Allen on 13-Jan-2023

Well, I am more impressed now than ever!!!!

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

AaaaaaaHAHAHAHAHA!

'Tis such a worn-out, lengthy tune,
I think, perhaps, that very soon
a minister will have to wear two hats -
one for the joining of two souls,
another for defining roles
amidst the arguments 'tween dogs and cats.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

That's a great review, Dawn. Thank God, my poem is fictitious.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This story poem, The Sunday Outing, is well-old to the extent that I would have jumped from the car halfway through the wife's diatribe ..................

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thanks, Bill. I probably would have if it had not been so far back to the house.

Comment from Sarah Das Gupta

Excellent

I am sorry I have exhausted all my six star ratings! This witty poem really deserves top marks! It is a real tour de force, sustaining the meter and rhyme throughout the story. The wife is a horror and you certainly need two cars!

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thanks, Sarah. If my wife finds out that I wrote this poem, I'll probably get six scars.

reply by Sarah Das Gupta on 13-Jan-2023

I was thinking that! Flowers and chocolates may be a good idea!

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Lol. Well, all I can say is I hope your relationship is restored! You described your outing very well, and with humour and wit. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thanks, Wendy. You'll never guess who is sitting beside me. No, not my wife. It's Sam. My son has gone on a short trip, and Sam is spending a couple of days with us.

Comment from Chris Davies

Excellent

I had no idea what to make of this poem, but the poetry was good, and it was definitely entertaining. The picture was a hoot! Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thanks, Chris. It's one of those poems that you write and don't show to your wife.

reply by Chris Davies on 13-Jan-2023

LOL! A whole new genre of poetry!

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

I enjoyed your humour in this one. Apart from the first stanza where compromise is set out, I particularly enjoyed:
I thought of turning on the news
Or faking a much-needed snooze
total avoidance has always seemed the preferred way to me to deal with trouble. kay

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thanks, Kay. The news is always a good substitute for an ass chewing.

Comment from DeboraDyess

Excellent

Well, Author, I wish I had a six-star left to give you! This is an exceptional entry for the contest! It tells a story in such a fun and whimsical way that you cannot help but love it. :)
There are no corrections or suggestions to be made. It's perfect. :)
Blessings and best,
Deb

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thanks, Deb. My wife didn't think it was perfect.

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

The author's words made me laugh all the way through! The author's words are engaging, descriptive, humorous and creative. The author's poem was long yet I found I was curious to see what came next. The
ending is perfect especially the last line! The artwork is awesome!

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thanks, Maria. I laughed all the way through when I was writing this.

Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

Well done on this poem that tells a story. So sad that a Sunday drive that should have been a relaxing time, turned into a disappointing afternoon. I like your ending: "So next week I think we better
Take that Sunday drive in separate cars."

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thanks, Anne. I'm more comfortable in my old pickup truck anyway.

reply by Anne Johnston on 13-Jan-2023

You are welcome