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Comment from Mark D. R.
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Debi,

This is a funny post for this contest entry. Do like the entire presentation of the hokey-pokey dance performance. Yes, you did turn it around! Cookies are my addiction -- with or without milk. They never seem to be hidden effectively from me LOL

Mark

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
    How awesome to hear from my mentor of these poems. Thanks so much!
    I don't write them too often, but try to always remember what you taught me. Thanks so much my dear friend! It sure was nice to hear from you again!
reply by Mark D. R. on 10-Jan-2023
    Thanks for your gracious remarks.

    Mark
Comment from Mary Shifman
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Gosh, that sure brings back memories! I remember back when I could actually dance, it was one of the those that always played. Of course, I would get confused and be out of step but it was a lot of fun. I can't say I was addicted to it.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
    Lol, actually Mary, I really don't know anyone who is addicted either, but the last line wouldn't be funny if my poem didn't pretend that someone was.
    Thanks for your fun comments my dear friend!
Comment from jessizero
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Your Hokey Pokey poem was so cute and fun! I don't think anyone would be offended by this or anything. Thank you so much for sharing again, and continued best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
    Thanks Jessi, and I appreciate that, as I never want to offend anyone.
    So thanks for your kind comments and review!
Comment from Teri7
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Debi, This is a very cute and well written 3 Line poem you have penned for the contest. You used very cute descriptive words and very neat imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest! love and blessings, teri

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
    Teri, you are so sweet and I appreciate your lovely review and comments.
    As always you are adorable and so is your kitty! (Smile and big Hug)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Haha, but this contest entry could be viewed at least 2 ways,
Debi. Of course, most all kids know the Hokey Pokey. Adults
do, too. But on another level, this could be hokey such as not
so good, and one could be addicted to that aspect. Think of all
the rehab places hoping to turn those individuals around. I liked
the play on words and the double meaning at least as I saw it. Your
syllable count was correct per line. The picture was perfect.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
    Lol, Actually I never thought about that. Is that like a little hanky panky?
    You my dear are so sweet and once again I thank you for the member cent pumps to put it on top. And of course I appreciate your kind comments and generous six stars! You are the best, my very very dear friend !
Comment from Carol Clark2
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Great poem. I like this humorous approach to the serious problem of addiction. With the humor of the final line comes hope for a better life for those enslaved to some habit. Best wishes in the contest. Carol

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
    Hi Carol! Thank you for you fun and kind review and comments for my poem.
    I sure appreciate it my friend
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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This could be one of the most harmless addictions an individual could have developed.
As long as they could get someone one else involved & spend some time with their family. This could be fun to continue with, but I'll stop here. This is a clever metaphor.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
    Hi Liz! Thank you for you fun and kind review and comments for my poem.
    I sure appreciate it my friend
Comment from Douglas Goff
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Dang I'm out of sixes all ready. Wasted them all on the tawdry scantily clad sonnets in the back room.

Having said that you are one of the most brilliant minds on this site! Your poem is so simple, but so complex.

Very nicely done. Thanks enjoy you!

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
    And you are one of the sweetest and kindest guys ever! Thanks for the awesome review and fun comments! So appreciated my dear friend
Comment from nomi338
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Some addictions are not only okay, they can be fun, wholesome and healthy as well. There can be nothing better than having fun, while being active, laughing and being silly all at once.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
    Hi Nomi! Thank you for you fun and kind review and comments for my poem. Good to see you again my sweet brother and appreciate it my friend
Comment from Karyn2
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Ha, Ha! Debi this is hysterical! My kinder kids can definitely have too much of a good thing believe me!! It is not so much fun the umpteenth time around. You have no idea after a day of repeat classes what repetition can do to a good song!
You made my day with this witty one! That last line is a pearler - as our Aussie slang would say!

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
    Hi Karyn! Thank you for you fun and kind review and comments for my poem.
    I sure appreciate it my friend