Come Spring
Seasonal transition46 total reviews
Comment from Kaiku
Great! Loved it! Flowed extremely well and provided a wonderful, full exposure to the treat ahead- Spring. I can`t wait. Of course, nothing like a toe-warming fire in New Hampshire.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Great! Loved it! Flowed extremely well and provided a wonderful, full exposure to the treat ahead- Spring. I can`t wait. Of course, nothing like a toe-warming fire in New Hampshire.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Kaiku. I warmed my toes in New Hampshire for ten years.
Comment from Ulla
Yes, it so very true. Nature as people who are of course part of nature as well, are all awaiting for spring to break through.
I really liked this poem. To me it just says it all. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Yes, it so very true. Nature as people who are of course part of nature as well, are all awaiting for spring to break through.
I really liked this poem. To me it just says it all. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Ulla. Breaking through to spring. That's a good way to think about it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love this quaint poem filled with the promise of spring when everything wakes up and the siege of winter ends. Your words are full of hope Paul, a skilful write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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I love this quaint poem filled with the promise of spring when everything wakes up and the siege of winter ends. Your words are full of hope Paul, a skilful write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Christine. I always look forward to your reviews.
Comment from June Sargent
I cannot wait for the grass to turn green again and for trees to bud once more! I'll be glad to get rid of these woolen socks and sweaters. Just a couple of months - patience!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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I cannot wait for the grass to turn green again and for trees to bud once more! I'll be glad to get rid of these woolen socks and sweaters. Just a couple of months - patience!
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Thanks, June. I start running out of patience about February.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao !
I think every season has its strong points..I love autumn , love the warm sunset hues and the many flavours: apples, grapes, nuts, mushrooms cabbages, pumpkin etc.
In Winter I have my fireplace burning and I love to watch the flames dance in the dark. And come morn, I warm my clothes on the warm mantle piece above.
Come Spring the barn swallows return from Africa and the countryside comes to life.
I like the picture you brought to life with your words.
Good rhyme and a pleasant read.
Keep safe!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Ciao !
I think every season has its strong points..I love autumn , love the warm sunset hues and the many flavours: apples, grapes, nuts, mushrooms cabbages, pumpkin etc.
In Winter I have my fireplace burning and I love to watch the flames dance in the dark. And come morn, I warm my clothes on the warm mantle piece above.
Come Spring the barn swallows return from Africa and the countryside comes to life.
I like the picture you brought to life with your words.
Good rhyme and a pleasant read.
Keep safe!
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the review. We use to have barn swallows, but no more. Probably because all the barns have been torn down or have fallen down.
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Ciao , I just gave you your 5th vote!
No I?m perched at 700m and we still have barns.
We have less swallows because during the trip ( North of Italy / Sahara) these birds have to cope with pollution, erratic out of season weather, plagued with mites and other unforeseen trouble.
Even our bee🐝 population has been drastically reduced.
These are signs our planet is dying slowly.
Keep safe!🍀
Comment from rama devi
Superb rhyming in this lovely poem. I love the tone and tenor of this: pensive yet expectant. Superb phrasing phonics, especially the alliteraiton of A and B and C in the first stanza coupled with consonance of S and L, plus the medley of S sounds in the second stanza coupled with W and F. Sounds fantastic read aloud. Quite well cadenced too. Love the use of SIEGE in the second stanza. Fine imagery. Lovely presentation.
Just one optional suggestion:
The fields of snow turn into grass(,)
Come Spring.
Or even a dash for a more pregnant pause to accentuate the fine closing line:
The fields of snow turn into grass--
Come Spring.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Superb rhyming in this lovely poem. I love the tone and tenor of this: pensive yet expectant. Superb phrasing phonics, especially the alliteraiton of A and B and C in the first stanza coupled with consonance of S and L, plus the medley of S sounds in the second stanza coupled with W and F. Sounds fantastic read aloud. Quite well cadenced too. Love the use of SIEGE in the second stanza. Fine imagery. Lovely presentation.
Just one optional suggestion:
The fields of snow turn into grass(,)
Come Spring.
Or even a dash for a more pregnant pause to accentuate the fine closing line:
The fields of snow turn into grass--
Come Spring.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Thanks, rama. Great suggestion. I'll stick that in in the future.
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Comment from Mario PIERRE
The poem is a positive reminder that better times will come, and that we can endure periods of cold with that assurance.
You used very visual ecpressions to describe nature .
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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The poem is a positive reminder that better times will come, and that we can endure periods of cold with that assurance.
You used very visual ecpressions to describe nature .
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Mario. We have had an easy winter so far on the coast of Maine.
Comment from zanya
Yes here is a poem that portrays effectively the arrival of Spring - the new warmer season shows up, quietly, bringing warmth and a renewed sense of hope - exquisite pic-captures the transition- just checked out that novel you mentioned-
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Yes here is a poem that portrays effectively the arrival of Spring - the new warmer season shows up, quietly, bringing warmth and a renewed sense of hope - exquisite pic-captures the transition- just checked out that novel you mentioned-
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Thanks, zanya. You will like the book. It is local history. The main characters are buried in the town cemetery
Comment from Aussie
Well done Paul. Most descriptive of the change of seasons. I've only seen snow once. Living in the subtropics, we only have two seasons. I liked your poem because it brought to life the burst of Spring. K xx
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Well done Paul. Most descriptive of the change of seasons. I've only seen snow once. Living in the subtropics, we only have two seasons. I liked your poem because it brought to life the burst of Spring. K xx
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Kay. The only bad thing about spring is the mud season.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I love this, Paul. You describe our non activities of winter while we wait (and often take a break from outdoor chores), then the transition to a new and more active season - for us and for Mother Nature.
Very well done!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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I love this, Paul. You describe our non activities of winter while we wait (and often take a break from outdoor chores), then the transition to a new and more active season - for us and for Mother Nature.
Very well done!
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Pam. Those non activities of winter usually add a few inches to my waistline.
