Come Spring
Seasonal transition46 total reviews
Comment from Charlie Shine
Very good poem.
Read really well.
Loved the imagery Paul.
Good work.
Charlie.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2023
Very good poem.
Read really well.
Loved the imagery Paul.
Good work.
Charlie.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2023
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Thanks for the review, Charlie. The novel by Ben Ames Williams is a good one.
Comment from nomi338
I am sure that for those imprisoned by cell bars of ice. They long to be paroled by the warming rays of Springtime sun, so that they may once again frolic among the gifts of nature's bountiful displays.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
I am sure that for those imprisoned by cell bars of ice. They long to be paroled by the warming rays of Springtime sun, so that they may once again frolic among the gifts of nature's bountiful displays.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the review, Nolan. Your first two lines are pure poetry.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
A very melodious poem. I particularly liked the reprise of 'spring' witout the indulgence of a direct refrain, and the idea of staying cozy inside whilst watching for spring to arrives (makes me think back to better winters than thi troubled one. kay
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
A very melodious poem. I particularly liked the reprise of 'spring' witout the indulgence of a direct refrain, and the idea of staying cozy inside whilst watching for spring to arrives (makes me think back to better winters than thi troubled one. kay
Comment Written 11-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Kay. I just came in from cutting wood up in back of our house. I didn't see any green grass and it was 15* F.
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I'm clueless. How little is that in °C?
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That's about -10* C.
Comment from Anne Johnston
I love the picture you have chosen to illustrate this great entry for the two-line contest. Now that we are part way through January, we look forward to Spring.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
I love the picture you have chosen to illustrate this great entry for the two-line contest. Now that we are part way through January, we look forward to Spring.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Anne. I was looking forward to spring about a month ago.
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You are welcome, and Spring will come eventually.
Comment from Jim Wile
This is a beautiful 2-stanza poem. I loved your rhyme scheme and perfect iambic tetrameter meter, ending each stanza with two words about spring. You chose a beautiful picture as well. This should place very high in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
This is a beautiful 2-stanza poem. I loved your rhyme scheme and perfect iambic tetrameter meter, ending each stanza with two words about spring. You chose a beautiful picture as well. This should place very high in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Jim. If you have a chance, you should read the book.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The photograph is well chosen and suggests the change of season. The poem too captures very well that moment of suspense waiting for grass to replace the snow!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
The photograph is well chosen and suggests the change of season. The poem too captures very well that moment of suspense waiting for grass to replace the snow!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Sarah. The winter hasn't been too bad this year on the coast of Maine. I'm still anxious for spring.
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Very wet in Cambridge, UK!
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Come Spring, places the reader at that hopeful point where the cold is tolerated because the promise of spring becomes more and more evident. Nice.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
This poem, Come Spring, places the reader at that hopeful point where the cold is tolerated because the promise of spring becomes more and more evident. Nice.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Bill. I was outside for a few hours this morning. After working in the 15* F cold, I had to come inside and read this poem again.
Comment from Sanku
It is a beautiful description of the advent of spring .I like the way you described the change through the frosted panes of the glass.All the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
It is a beautiful description of the advent of spring .I like the way you described the change through the frosted panes of the glass.All the best for the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Sanku. If you get a chance, read the book.
Comment from G0dd0ll
How cute! It has me looking forward way too soon! Too bad you had to only use 2 stanzas. It would have taken to flight even more! It has a beautiful rhythm to me.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
How cute! It has me looking forward way too soon! Too bad you had to only use 2 stanzas. It would have taken to flight even more! It has a beautiful rhythm to me.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the review. If you have time, you should read the book.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Two Stanza Poem writing prompt contest.
The rhymes don't sound forced and flow well.
The poem is well written with well chosen words that flow nicely.
The rich nature-imagery is very pleasant
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
Excellent entry for the Two Stanza Poem writing prompt contest.
The rhymes don't sound forced and flow well.
The poem is well written with well chosen words that flow nicely.
The rich nature-imagery is very pleasant
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Gypsy. If you are a reader, you should read the book.