Lords Of The Glen
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Lords Of The Glen"A A new threat arises to the north.
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing. I am wondering if you intend to publish. Your writing of action is excellent.
Captain Prince Classius[D1] climbed off his horse, a little perturbed at stopping, because he knew that Nehi and Fidium had left hours earlier. (nothing showed in notes about 'D1' & you can omit 'that')
The prince was startled to realize he was happy that she hadn't abandoned them. (omit 'that')
"I bet you thought I had deserted you?" she giggled. (Capital 'S' on 'she' giggles isn't a speech tag.)
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Thank you for sharing. I am wondering if you intend to publish. Your writing of action is excellent.
Captain Prince Classius[D1] climbed off his horse, a little perturbed at stopping, because he knew that Nehi and Fidium had left hours earlier. (nothing showed in notes about 'D1' & you can omit 'that')
The prince was startled to realize he was happy that she hadn't abandoned them. (omit 'that')
"I bet you thought I had deserted you?" she giggled. (Capital 'S' on 'she' giggles isn't a speech tag.)
Comment Written 07-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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The series needs some work before I would consider publication. They were written for my kids who enjoy them immensely. One day though. I really am planning on putting my book Implantation out there to see what happens. It got much better reviews on here and in now edited.
Nice catch on the capital "s"
Comment from lancellot
Well, yes, I guess Classius can trust his 'former' criminals. I still see an unlikely wedding or at least some late-night romping with our super strong female thief.
A very well written action sequence. It was fast paced and detailed. The reader could picture the battle like a movie.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Well, yes, I guess Classius can trust his 'former' criminals. I still see an unlikely wedding or at least some late-night romping with our super strong female thief.
A very well written action sequence. It was fast paced and detailed. The reader could picture the battle like a movie.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the great review. I think you are very perceptive.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Your stories are well written, but I still haven't seen those ugly green things get annihilated. It is what I have been waiting for all through the story. I wish you the best with the rest of your writings.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Your stories are well written, but I still haven't seen those ugly green things get annihilated. It is what I have been waiting for all through the story. I wish you the best with the rest of your writings.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thank you, my friend. Its a five book series. The seven tribes are defeated in book three. Book four starts with the child wizards of the heroes in one through three. Unfortunately, everyone who has read this series has absolutely loved book four the most, which puts me in an odd spot. Book five wraps up the entire series. I know, it needs work.
