Spa Ring Poem
a spring poem8 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You can delete some of the extra space on the bottom if you would like. Edit, advanced edit, and then go to the last line and click on delete. Your poem looks very springy!
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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You can delete some of the extra space on the bottom if you would like. Edit, advanced edit, and then go to the last line and click on delete. Your poem looks very springy!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Rosemary
Comment from Mario PIERRE
I am a little puzzled by this poem. While the general tone indicates a renewal of sorts, it does not feel anything like spring. Also, the ' jargon' used here doesn't seem to pertain to this type of theme. Anyway I couldn't find spuds ( potato) associated with roses, and the correct writing of ' underpants' would still rhyme with ' gents'.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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I am a little puzzled by this poem. While the general tone indicates a renewal of sorts, it does not feel anything like spring. Also, the ' jargon' used here doesn't seem to pertain to this type of theme. Anyway I couldn't find spuds ( potato) associated with roses, and the correct writing of ' underpants' would still rhyme with ' gents'.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Thanks, MP. The words I couldn't use were bud, new, flower, blossom, and rain. So, I used homonyms, which, as you are suggesting, are probably not going to take this poem to the winner's circle.
Comment from JLR
A wonderful frolic through your poetry. Some crafty work of wording to zero,I on the subject at hand. Kudos for your wit and obvious humor instilled in mind, body and spirit.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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A wonderful frolic through your poetry. Some crafty work of wording to zero,I on the subject at hand. Kudos for your wit and obvious humor instilled in mind, body and spirit.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Thank you, JLR
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is unusual and inventive and also delightful. I loved the rhymes and language in this skilled write from a poet thinking completely outside the box, I felt the Spring coming alive here, a fun write full of clever words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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This is unusual and inventive and also delightful. I loved the rhymes and language in this skilled write from a poet thinking completely outside the box, I felt the Spring coming alive here, a fun write full of clever words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Dolly, for the kind review.
Comment from Gloria ....
What fun! You have cleverly used homophones for the words not allowed, buds/spuds, new/gnu, flour/flower, reign/rain and in the process created a creative spring poem, that stretches the imagination with images of the impossible.
Wishing you great luck in the booth. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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What fun! You have cleverly used homophones for the words not allowed, buds/spuds, new/gnu, flour/flower, reign/rain and in the process created a creative spring poem, that stretches the imagination with images of the impossible.
Wishing you great luck in the booth. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Gloria
Though the King has got the (blahs some) times?,
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have done a wonderful job with the writing prompt. It has a nice touch of humor, too. I like the play of words you used in the writing. I wish you tons of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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You have done a wonderful job with the writing prompt. It has a nice touch of humor, too. I like the play of words you used in the writing. I wish you tons of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thanks, PBB
Comment from royowen
This is an usual poem for this time of the year, in the Southern Hemisphere, it's summer and in the North it's winter, but I can understand looking forward to spring. Beautifully written with a very upbeat and quirky entry in this contest, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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This is an usual poem for this time of the year, in the Southern Hemisphere, it's summer and in the North it's winter, but I can understand looking forward to spring. Beautifully written with a very upbeat and quirky entry in this contest, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Roy
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Bless you
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Bless you
Comment from Ric Myworld
AS I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know the difference between a sonnet and sorbet. But I do enjoy reading and seeing where the forms might take you. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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AS I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know the difference between a sonnet and sorbet. But I do enjoy reading and seeing where the forms might take you. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Ric