Dumplin
fable poem6 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I have never thought of creating a poem about a dumpling. How many times we have used the word 'dumpling' when we speak to a child? This time the dumpling is a glob of dough! I enjoyed your poem.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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I have never thought of creating a poem about a dumpling. How many times we have used the word 'dumpling' when we speak to a child? This time the dumpling is a glob of dough! I enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Kind of how I got there. Thank you for the kind review
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Kind of how I got there. Thank you for the kind review
Comment from Ric Myworld
AS I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But I guess i'm still just a big kid at heart who enjoys reading children's poem. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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AS I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But I guess i'm still just a big kid at heart who enjoys reading children's poem. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Something that popped in my head watching my granddaughters play with their toy baking set. Written for them. Thank you for your kind review. Hope you had a fine holiday.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Doughy Blob, shines a sad light on the otherwise noble ogre. Being bested by a lump of dough does nothing for one's confidence.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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This poem, Doughy Blob, shines a sad light on the otherwise noble ogre. Being bested by a lump of dough does nothing for one's confidence.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Something that popped in my head watching my granddaughters play with their toy baking set. Written for them. Thank you for your kind review. Hope you had a fine holiday.
Comment from jmdg1954
I wish I had a six-star still in my pocket to reward. I found the rhymes to be perfect, not forced and made sense.
A good poem for children to read and get the true meaning of determination.
You fine well. John
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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I wish I had a six-star still in my pocket to reward. I found the rhymes to be perfect, not forced and made sense.
A good poem for children to read and get the true meaning of determination.
You fine well. John
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thank you...Something that popped in my head watching my granddaughters play with their toy baking set. Written for them. Thank you for your kind review. Hope you had a fine holiday.
Comment from Debbie Pope
What a funny poem! What an original plot--child versus dumpin' (I think I would have used the word dumplin'). And then you elevate the battle, comparing it to a David and Goliath foray. So funny! I like how you use high falutin words like foray and juxtapose them with simple words like 'dumpin'. Your internal rhymes also add a fun flair to the battle.
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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What a funny poem! What an original plot--child versus dumpin' (I think I would have used the word dumplin'). And then you elevate the battle, comparing it to a David and Goliath foray. So funny! I like how you use high falutin words like foray and juxtapose them with simple words like 'dumpin'. Your internal rhymes also add a fun flair to the battle.
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Fixed dumplin... thanks. Something that popped in my head watching my granddaughters play with their toy baking set. Written for them. Thank you for your kind review. Hope you had a fine holiday.
Comment from Jim Wile
Hey, this is really good. Humorous and clever with terrific rhyme and meter. A wonderful children's poem.
Just a few minor corrections: I think you mean dumplin' (with an "l") in the first line. Despair is spelled with an "e." "Oger" should be spelled "ogre."
Excellent job otherwise.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Hey, this is really good. Humorous and clever with terrific rhyme and meter. A wonderful children's poem.
Just a few minor corrections: I think you mean dumplin' (with an "l") in the first line. Despair is spelled with an "e." "Oger" should be spelled "ogre."
Excellent job otherwise.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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All fixed I think, thanks for your input. Something that popped in my head watching my granddaughters play with their toy baking set. Written for them. Thank you for your kind review. Hope you had a fine holiday.