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Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "White Hope for 2023"Do good and feel good poems
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Comment from Charles W. Johnson
I like it. Causes one to pause and think on the words. Fulfills the contest requirements. Better than the one I submitted for the same contest. "white hope" is an interesting word choice combination; the picture provides the context. Good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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I like it. Causes one to pause and think on the words. Fulfills the contest requirements. Better than the one I submitted for the same contest. "white hope" is an interesting word choice combination; the picture provides the context. Good luck!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Charles, I am behind almost 80 reviews, but must respond to this one. I love your suggestions and will use it. Thank you my friend for the great feed back and wonderful comments. You are awesome, my friend.
Comment from Celyn
This is a well written reverse haiku with the correct number of syllables in each line and a colour mentioned in each line. The end words also rhyme as required - well one. I presume by 'white hope' you are referring to white as in white heat or to God, while 'gold hearts' means precious ones maybe. I like this poem but it was not obvious to me initially what you meant - that is probably me being a dumb though so good luck with it
Celyn
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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This is a well written reverse haiku with the correct number of syllables in each line and a colour mentioned in each line. The end words also rhyme as required - well one. I presume by 'white hope' you are referring to white as in white heat or to God, while 'gold hearts' means precious ones maybe. I like this poem but it was not obvious to me initially what you meant - that is probably me being a dumb though so good luck with it
Celyn
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Hi Celyn, thank you so much for your kind thoughts on this. And no problem to explain it. The first thing is if you looked at the description notes then you could tell that it was talking about childhood abuse or molestation and domestic abuse in the home. I used the picture that I did to symbolize God or Angels, Spiritual. Where I normally don't have a color for hope, google does and it can be blue or white. So in the first line since it is early in the New Year, it says, midnight blues won't disappear. It is midnight on New Years Eve and those saddened by abuse, are not going to feel better all of a sudden won't feel better just because it is NYE at midnight.
Then it says, ~gold hearts live in fear~ As a molested child by my godfather. Who told me that if I ever told anyone about it, that something bad would happen to my dad. So I lived in fear of something happening to him, but its the same as if a child is being beaten at home. They live in fear.
As far as white hope, I would have never given it a color. But since the prompt called it to be a color in each line, i that one just had to be white that represented hope. In those issues, we do have to rely on God and our spirituality to get us through. That is the best way I can explain, but i thank you for taking the time to read, review and ask questions.
You are always so good about that. It really shows that you are doing the best as a reviewer that we could ask for.
I remember you did the same in one of my last poems, yet can't remember which one. So I went to nominate you as a reviewer for the month and it would not let me. It kept saying that I already nominated you. I tried numerous times, and the only thing that I could figure out is that maybe it was still going off of December's nominations. If that could be the case, I am going to try again. So thanks again Sweetie, for your thoughtful review and comments. You are so very special Celyn. And I appreciate it so much.
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Thanks for the explanation and nomination.
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Hi Celyn, thank you so much for your kind thoughts on this. And no problem to explain it. The first thing is if you looked at the description notes then you could tell that it was talking about childhood abuse or molestation and domestic abuse in the home. I used the picture that I did to symbolize God or Angels, Spiritual. Where I normally don't have a color for hope, google does and it can be blue or white. So in the first line since it is early in the New Year, it says, midnight blues won't disappear. It is midnight on New Years Eve and those saddened by abuse, are not going to feel better all of a sudden won't feel better just because it is NYE at midnight.
Then it says, ~gold hearts live in fear~ As a molested child by my godfather. Who told me that if I ever told anyone about it, that something bad would happen to my dad. So I lived in fear of something happening to him, but its the same as if a child is being beaten at home. They live in fear.
As far as white hope, I would have never given it a color. But since the prompt called it to be a color in each line, i that one just had to be white that represented hope. In those issues, we do have to rely on God and our spirituality to get us through. That is the best way I can explain, but i thank you for taking the time to read, review and ask questions.
You are always so good about that. It really shows that you are doing the best as a reviewer that we could ask for.
I remember you did the same in one of my last poems, yet can't remember which one. So I went to nominate you as a reviewer for the month and it would not let me. It kept saying that I already nominated you. I tried numerous times, and the only thing that I could figure out is that maybe it was still going off of December's nominations. If that could be the case, I am going to try again. So thanks again Sweetie, for your thoughtful review and comments. You are so very special Celyn. And I appreciate it so much.
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Once again, I get this message. You already nominated this member. You can nominate them once per month. Please try again or nominate another member you think deserves it.
I will contact Tom and see what is going on. I will be in touch.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Beautiful sentiment. Your words reverberate through the world, I'm sure. You have said this with grace and meaning, and our children and the abused deserve to be at peace. Unfortunately, the turmoil they have already received is a scare they will carry for the rest of their lives. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Beautiful sentiment. Your words reverberate through the world, I'm sure. You have said this with grace and meaning, and our children and the abused deserve to be at peace. Unfortunately, the turmoil they have already received is a scare they will carry for the rest of their lives. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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John, I am so sorry for this late thank you to your review. I was a little under the weather, but am feeling better now. I cannot tell you how very much your lovely review, and words mean to me. Thank you again my dear friend
Comment from Karyn2
You cleverly ticked every box for this reverse Haiku poem with prompts galore! Well done on the inclusion of every detail. I also really appreciate the sentiment of hope for the New Year as its theme and message that over rides all darkness and fear. Great writing!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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You cleverly ticked every box for this reverse Haiku poem with prompts galore! Well done on the inclusion of every detail. I also really appreciate the sentiment of hope for the New Year as its theme and message that over rides all darkness and fear. Great writing!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Karyn, I am so sorry for this late thank you to your review. I was a little under the weather, but am feeling better now. I cannot tell you how very much your lovely review, and words mean to me. Thank you again my dear friend
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A colourful and hopeful write for the New Year and we always appreciate positive thoughts to begin a new year to quell the strife and in particular domestic abuse, especially for children, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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A colourful and hopeful write for the New Year and we always appreciate positive thoughts to begin a new year to quell the strife and in particular domestic abuse, especially for children, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Hi Dolly! Boy, am I ever late in thanking you for your wonderful review. Once again, I am so sorry. I am usually more on the ball, and I do truly appreciate your wonderful comments for my White Hope poem! Thank you so very much my dear friend.
Comment from bob cullen
What an impressive image you post. In less than twenty syllables it says so much. And it could represent so many differing scenarios. Is it Divinity? Spiritual? Or just an inventive publicity promo? Personally, I see it as the first category.
On this basis I see it as moral challenge and that promotes the query, how do I rate? I'm not sure I enjoy having my judgements questioned.
All I can say is, a really great and provocative write. And I issue one final plea, in future, PLEASE leave my conscience alone.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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What an impressive image you post. In less than twenty syllables it says so much. And it could represent so many differing scenarios. Is it Divinity? Spiritual? Or just an inventive publicity promo? Personally, I see it as the first category.
On this basis I see it as moral challenge and that promotes the query, how do I rate? I'm not sure I enjoy having my judgements questioned.
All I can say is, a really great and provocative write. And I issue one final plea, in future, PLEASE leave my conscience alone.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Hi Bob, first of all thank you for the awesome & fun review and comments. And those beautiful stars are so very much appreciated.
However, I must ask you my dear friend, did you happen to read the description by the title of what this one was about? Lol, Knowing you the way I do, I don't think so. You are too good of a guy.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are so true. I enjoyed the last line. Yes, hope is so
needed in the New Year as the author states. Thank you for the words
above the title - they are an important reminder. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is awesome! Happy New Year!....Maria
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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The author's words are so true. I enjoyed the last line. Yes, hope is so
needed in the New Year as the author states. Thank you for the words
above the title - they are an important reminder. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is awesome! Happy New Year!....Maria
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Hi Maria, Boy, am I ever late in thanking you for your wonderful review. Once again, I am so sorry. I am usually more on the ball, and I do truly appreciate your wonderful comments for my White Hope poem! Thank you so very much my dear friend.
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and entertaining to read. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and entertaining to read. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Hi Raul! Boy, am I ever late in thanking you for your wonderful review! Once again, I am so sorry. I am usually more on the ball, and I do truly appreciate your wonderful comments for my White Hope poem! Thank you so very much my dear friend.
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You're welcome!
Comment from LJbutterfly
The rules for the poetry structure seemed to be quite a challenge, but you seemed to have met the challenge easily. The syllable count and end rhymes are correct and your use of a color is not forced. Additionally, you have delivered a powerful message. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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The rules for the poetry structure seemed to be quite a challenge, but you seemed to have met the challenge easily. The syllable count and end rhymes are correct and your use of a color is not forced. Additionally, you have delivered a powerful message. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Hi Lorraine! Boy, am I ever late in thanking you for your wonderful reviews. Once again, I am so sorry. I am usually more on the ball, and I do truly appreciate your wonderful comments for my White Hope poem! Thank you so very much my dear friend.
Comment from Sally Law
I've never heard of this unique form of haiku. You have done a splendid job with this one, mystery poet. A subject dear to my heart. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally Law :)) XOs
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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I've never heard of this unique form of haiku. You have done a splendid job with this one, mystery poet. A subject dear to my heart. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally Law :)) XOs
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Hi Sally, Boy, am I ever late in thanking you for your wonderful review. Once again, I am so sorry. I am usually more on the ball, and I do truly appreciate your wonderful comments for my White Hope poem! Thank you so very much my dear friend.
