Times of Sorrow
Reverse Haiku9 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This reverse haiku, Time of Sorrows, presented with a 7-5-7 formatting, finds the family in the dark time after a loss and during the realization that what has changed, has changed forever.
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This reverse haiku, Time of Sorrows, presented with a 7-5-7 formatting, finds the family in the dark time after a loss and during the realization that what has changed, has changed forever.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant write about grief and how it affects us, the shock, the pain at loss and the relief as time passes is all part of the process, you captured the stress of it all here, love Dolly x
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A poignant write about grief and how it affects us, the shock, the pain at loss and the relief as time passes is all part of the process, you captured the stress of it all here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good syllables count for the contest. Good rhyme. I love the presentation and imagery. I hope you do well in the contest. This contest is not a haiku but it sounds like a fun project.
Gypsy
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Good syllables count for the contest. Good rhyme. I love the presentation and imagery. I hope you do well in the contest. This contest is not a haiku but it sounds like a fun project.
Gypsy
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, a reverse Haiku, in some ways is like a swap quatrain were one writes the first line, then reverses it at the end of the stanza. You've chosen a great genre for your poem, great job, well done, great job, good luck, blessings Roy
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Oh yes, a reverse Haiku, in some ways is like a swap quatrain were one writes the first line, then reverses it at the end of the stanza. You've chosen a great genre for your poem, great job, well done, great job, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
Comment from Michele Harber
Nicely done. You followed all the rules of this unusual style perfectly, and have created a poem that is simultaneously sad, moving and kind. Your rhyming words are well chosen, and sound organic and not as though they're there just to meet the rhyming requirement. Good luck in the contest.
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Nicely done. You followed all the rules of this unusual style perfectly, and have created a poem that is simultaneously sad, moving and kind. Your rhyming words are well chosen, and sound organic and not as though they're there just to meet the rhyming requirement. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
Comment from Julie G1
Well done. This poem provides a great response to the prompt. The choice of language and imagery was apt. The use of the graphic was effective, and also worked well for this reader. I hope you keep on writing such verse.
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Well done. This poem provides a great response to the prompt. The choice of language and imagery was apt. The use of the graphic was effective, and also worked well for this reader. I hope you keep on writing such verse.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A very poignant Haiku depicting the sorrow the grief of losing a loved one.
heart red with tears
very true, very descriptive. Good luck in the contest. Cheers
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A very poignant Haiku depicting the sorrow the grief of losing a loved one.
heart red with tears
very true, very descriptive. Good luck in the contest. Cheers
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and very well written reverse haiku you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive rhyming words. Very nice art work. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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This is a very beautiful and very well written reverse haiku you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive rhyming words. Very nice art work. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is a most poignant piece of work for the Reverse Haiku entry.
I would consider not capitalizing the first word as sometimes it gives the word, and even the whole piece, a more powerful impact. I think this would be one of those spots.
Just my two cents.
Great work here! I like this one.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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This is a most poignant piece of work for the Reverse Haiku entry.
I would consider not capitalizing the first word as sometimes it gives the word, and even the whole piece, a more powerful impact. I think this would be one of those spots.
Just my two cents.
Great work here! I like this one.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Thanks for your two cents. I was wondering whether to capitalise or not. You've convinced me.
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Yes. Odd how subtle little things can have a big impact. This is definitely a power move! Good work, my friend.