Jealousy
Feelings may cause physical characteristics.3 total reviews
Comment from Shanan Lorin
I might be thrown from the title, so take this with grain of salt: the first line makes sense with envy/jealousy, but preen is more about making oneself look good, albeit with a bird/pecking connotation, and hence didn't see the connection with jealousy--more self confidence maybe--similarly last line is transparent, but not really about jealousy given the use of "always" in the line...I'm also being too literal about the psychology of jealousy, so again, take with grain of salt or ignore completely and I'll go back to the peanut galleryâ?¦adding another way to attack it below if it helps with future thinking. If not just ignore.
Envy green eyes, blind her soul
Black now, hence sinâ??s toll
Empath lost, red devil control
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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I might be thrown from the title, so take this with grain of salt: the first line makes sense with envy/jealousy, but preen is more about making oneself look good, albeit with a bird/pecking connotation, and hence didn't see the connection with jealousy--more self confidence maybe--similarly last line is transparent, but not really about jealousy given the use of "always" in the line...I'm also being too literal about the psychology of jealousy, so again, take with grain of salt or ignore completely and I'll go back to the peanut galleryâ?¦adding another way to attack it below if it helps with future thinking. If not just ignore.
Envy green eyes, blind her soul
Black now, hence sinâ??s toll
Empath lost, red devil control
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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I think jealousy contains all the elements mentioned in the haiku. She preens trying to make herself look better than the person for whom she has bitter feelings. Her heart is made black by her envy. Thanks for your read and opinion.
Comment from EVA LEE MILLER
Powerful.
It fits perfectly with the colors you've chosen and with the picture. It says so much. The words you've selected to rhyme, along with the syllable requirement, is impressive.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Powerful.
It fits perfectly with the colors you've chosen and with the picture. It says so much. The words you've selected to rhyme, along with the syllable requirement, is impressive.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for your encouraging words and the six star honor.
Comment from JT traveller
I found this poem extremely clever. I enjoyed reading this. It met the criteria and the featured photograph spoke a thousand words. Thankyou for sharing your thoughts.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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I found this poem extremely clever. I enjoyed reading this. It met the criteria and the featured photograph spoke a thousand words. Thankyou for sharing your thoughts.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review.
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Oh, thankyou. Your words are very much appreciated.
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