Lords Of The Glen
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Worse Things Than Goblins"A A new threat arises to the north.
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Comment from CrystieCookie999
Eww, the zombies took over after a deceptive image of a yellow-lit woman takes him off guard, and now Lord Duve is a pile of crumpled skin without bones. Daggart the Dark (what a great name) must have been taking lessons from a voodoo master or Lord Voldemort. I am thinking yellow is getting a workout in the last part of this chapter. You might want to change one of the instances of yellow to a yellowish color, like putrid, half-murky golden-gray.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Eww, the zombies took over after a deceptive image of a yellow-lit woman takes him off guard, and now Lord Duve is a pile of crumpled skin without bones. Daggart the Dark (what a great name) must have been taking lessons from a voodoo master or Lord Voldemort. I am thinking yellow is getting a workout in the last part of this chapter. You might want to change one of the instances of yellow to a yellowish color, like putrid, half-murky golden-gray.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thank you! Glad you are enjoying my little endeavor.
Comment from JT traveller
Extremely well written. Not the sort of story I would normally be drawn to but the imagery you were able to conjure made me believe I was watching a movie as I read your words. Keep up the fine work. Very inspiring.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Extremely well written. Not the sort of story I would normally be drawn to but the imagery you were able to conjure made me believe I was watching a movie as I read your words. Keep up the fine work. Very inspiring.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thank you again for another wonderful review of my book!
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Excellent read. It expanded my mind as to the sort of books I may just enjoy. Thankyou.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You do a great job writing action and descriptions. Lord Duve doesn't look like he came to a good end. I want to caution you about starting your paragraphs the same. Lord Duve started seven or eight paragraphs and King Darian probably started about as many.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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You do a great job writing action and descriptions. Lord Duve doesn't look like he came to a good end. I want to caution you about starting your paragraphs the same. Lord Duve started seven or eight paragraphs and King Darian probably started about as many.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thank you! Great catch. I made some adjustments. Have a blessed day, my friend!
