Would Rather We Just Lie Down
Pondering Life Today2 total reviews
Comment from susand3022
Hi Rob,
I see that you're new to the site, and other than that I see absolutely nothing else about you... so welcome to the site. I hope you find what you're looking for here.
I really liked the poem, sort of an "if the tree falls in the woods and nobody's there to hear it, does it make noise" type of thing...
So, is there a typo on the 4th line? Should it be "around" instead of "abound?" I ask because it would make grammatical sense that way, and though poetry doesn't have to make grammatical sense, it does help.
My only other issue is with the size of the text, which as a new member, you can hardly be responsible for.
As time goes by, you will learn to add images, and use the advanced editor to change your fonts to a more acceptable size for reading... because most of us here are half blind already. lol
Whatever you do, make it easier for us to read! :)
If you have any questions about any of this stuff, I had plenty when I began, let me know, I'd be happy to try and help. Fair warning, I'm no pro... I can get you through the basics though!
Happy New Year, and Welcome to the forum!
Susan :)
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Hi Rob,
I see that you're new to the site, and other than that I see absolutely nothing else about you... so welcome to the site. I hope you find what you're looking for here.
I really liked the poem, sort of an "if the tree falls in the woods and nobody's there to hear it, does it make noise" type of thing...
So, is there a typo on the 4th line? Should it be "around" instead of "abound?" I ask because it would make grammatical sense that way, and though poetry doesn't have to make grammatical sense, it does help.
My only other issue is with the size of the text, which as a new member, you can hardly be responsible for.
As time goes by, you will learn to add images, and use the advanced editor to change your fonts to a more acceptable size for reading... because most of us here are half blind already. lol
Whatever you do, make it easier for us to read! :)
If you have any questions about any of this stuff, I had plenty when I began, let me know, I'd be happy to try and help. Fair warning, I'm no pro... I can get you through the basics though!
Happy New Year, and Welcome to the forum!
Susan :)
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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I will update my profile (when I figure out how)
Not sure if this site is for me bc I am more into using words and letting the readers mind add the "art" and interpretations... this is what struck me about Robert Frosts "Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening"... I could hear the horse bells, the quiet snow through the trees and relate to the tasks at hand (promises to keep), and I still hold the same images in my mind from the first time I read this poem decades ago. Time flies !
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
This poem poses a number of important questions! In the end Man is a social being. Most people prefer to face problems and life generally in company with others! The images are powerful here, especially that of the lone figure in the Arctic wastes. I think you could change the line with 'abound' to 'would hate still abound?'
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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This poem poses a number of important questions! In the end Man is a social being. Most people prefer to face problems and life generally in company with others! The images are powerful here, especially that of the lone figure in the Arctic wastes. I think you could change the line with 'abound' to 'would hate still abound?'
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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TY.
This one came out of nowhere... my brother and I were texting one day and he sent me some lyrics from a song.... I replied with these words back to him.... made sure to then write it down and "tidy" it up... but just a little to get beat / cadence right
