Lords Of The Glen
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "The Rogue"A A new threat arises to the north.
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Very good and believable dialogue. I'm not sure I would trust Cedar myself. He does seem rogue.
It was rumored that his entire squad had been killed by a horde of Swamp Crawlers and he was the lone survivor. & Classius retorted, realizing that he needed to expedite his departure before the rumors spread further. & "Are you saying that you have seen the white kingdom that I seek?" (You can omit the 'that' in each sentence. There are more 'that's needing omitted. I only copied these down.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Very good and believable dialogue. I'm not sure I would trust Cedar myself. He does seem rogue.
It was rumored that his entire squad had been killed by a horde of Swamp Crawlers and he was the lone survivor. & Classius retorted, realizing that he needed to expedite his departure before the rumors spread further. & "Are you saying that you have seen the white kingdom that I seek?" (You can omit the 'that' in each sentence. There are more 'that's needing omitted. I only copied these down.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thank you! I found a few more of those pesky rascals. I appreciate your help!
Comment from Ricky1024
This chapter was based on assembling the right people to go on a journey across the lake and find the white Kingdom.
Ans, with the assistance of an elf named Cedar who was a rogue, an interesting theif Kara, and a few more.
During the beginning part though, they had a cool battle with the black dragon and there was much pain and torturing.,
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This chapter was well written rich in theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing and have a Blessed New Year.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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This chapter was based on assembling the right people to go on a journey across the lake and find the white Kingdom.
Ans, with the assistance of an elf named Cedar who was a rogue, an interesting theif Kara, and a few more.
During the beginning part though, they had a cool battle with the black dragon and there was much pain and torturing.,
...
This chapter was well written rich in theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing and have a Blessed New Year.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thank you my friend! Thanks for hanging in. We are close to the end of Book One
Comment from JT traveller
Great content, fantastic imagery. Your words are extremely descriptive. Thankyou for sharing such a well written and composed work. Best of luck in the future.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Great content, fantastic imagery. Your words are extremely descriptive. Thankyou for sharing such a well written and composed work. Best of luck in the future.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thank you for your kind review!
