Comment from Aiona

Exceptional

Very vivid description, and solid emotional POV. I like the twist at the end that his rescuer isn't his parents or a lifeguard or even the USCG. Just Aunt Ginny! :)

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023

Hi Aiona, Thanks so much for the wonderful review and six stars! It is truly appreciated. Kind regards, Bill

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Thanks for sharing some mighty fine descriptive writing to show you are talented with letters as an accountant with numbers. I've become a fan of flash fiction since I can get to the punch so quickly.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023

Ric, thanks so much for the review and very kind words. I've also become a fan of flash fiction. It illustrates how so much can be said with few words. It has helped me become more concise in my writing. Take care. Bill

reply by Ric Myworld on 03-Jan-2023

Keep up the good work, Bill, and I'll be looking forward to reading more. I don't post often, but I think you'll find I'm a fairly concise writer. I plan to post the last two chapters to close out the first two of my latest post this coming weekend. If will probably be outside your comfort zone, as it is mine. But I like to think we have a similar style of writing. Wishing you the best!

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

This well written, succinct story started out mysterious and suspenseful with the tiny body of a seven year old child struggling in the ocean, trying to reach the shore. Your story includes great descriptive imagery, while your chosen artwork pairs perfectly. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023

Hi LJ, Thanks so much for the very kind words and review. I appreciate the encouragement. Take care, Bill

Comment from JT traveller

Average

Good imagery. Short story. I want to know more about Aunt Ginny. She seems like a game, relentless woman. So many questions. Where were the boys parents?

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Thanks for the review. Do you not realize that this is an entry in a flash fiction contest? The requirement of the contest is that the piece must be 150 words. Clearly 150 words is not enough to tell more about Aunt Ginny or to answer questions about the boy's parents.

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

You need a comma after "unforgiving"
This was an exciting story. You managed to capture the reader's attention and keep it all the way through. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023

Hi Jessi, Thanks so much for the kind review and words. Thanks, also, for pointing out the comma after unforgiving. It's interesting that you mention it, because, after deliberating over it a bit, I decided to leave out the comma. My naturally inclination was to include it, but I can sometimes get a bit comma crazy. so I was probably over-compensating. I am going to put it in. Thanks! Bill

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This one-hundred-fifty-word flash fiction story, Waves, creates a tense situation and raises nthe pressure as nature tries to take a child out. The hero, another force of nature, arrives in the nick of time and saves a life. Nice.

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023

Hi Bill, Thanks very much for the kind review and words. Regards, Bill

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

"Waves" a Flash fiction contest entry was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Good luck with your contest entry and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023

Hi Doctor Ricky, thanks so much for the kind review and encouragement. Take care, Bill

Comment from RodG

Good

Your story truly dramatizes the invisible horror of an undertow that can suddenly rip anyone's legs from under him.
You set the scene vividly in paragraph one.
A secondary character--strong and determined Aunt Minny-- comes to the rescue.
But your ending needs to be more dramatic. How can you SHOW rather than TELL what happened?

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023

Hi Rod, Thanks for reading and reviewing my piece, and for the suggestions. Regards, Bill