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Comment from Ulla
Debi, this is so beautifully written and it feels as if it's coming straight from your heart. I loved every word and it's a great entry for the contest. All the best of luck, dear friend. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Debi, this is so beautifully written and it feels as if it's coming straight from your heart. I loved every word and it's a great entry for the contest. All the best of luck, dear friend. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Ulla, you are so sweet. I thank you so very much for your lovely review and kind words for my poem. It's so appreciated, my dear friend!
Comment from karenina
Debi~ I believe God gives us gifts, such as your skill in writing, in order to heal, not only ourselves but others who've perhaps not found their voice and are still beneath a shroud of shame that was never theirs, to begin with. Love the way your envoi turns into a positive blessing to repeat often!
"Forgiveness is key, it will kill most the pain" is a tiny bit stilted. --
One suggestion might be "Forgiveness is key, it will mitigate pain."
I suggest this word because in my own experience pain is never really killed, but it is certainly lessened through forgiveness.
It's fine as it is... Sometimes I feel the need to try to add my two cents!
(smile)
"The poet is one who is able to keep the fresh vision of the child alive."
--Anais Nin
As you write, you recreate your innocence, my friend!
Karenina
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Debi~ I believe God gives us gifts, such as your skill in writing, in order to heal, not only ourselves but others who've perhaps not found their voice and are still beneath a shroud of shame that was never theirs, to begin with. Love the way your envoi turns into a positive blessing to repeat often!
"Forgiveness is key, it will kill most the pain" is a tiny bit stilted. --
One suggestion might be "Forgiveness is key, it will mitigate pain."
I suggest this word because in my own experience pain is never really killed, but it is certainly lessened through forgiveness.
It's fine as it is... Sometimes I feel the need to try to add my two cents!
(smile)
"The poet is one who is able to keep the fresh vision of the child alive."
--Anais Nin
As you write, you recreate your innocence, my friend!
Karenina
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Hi Karenina, I hope you are feeling better today. I know you can relate all too well. I didn't like the word kill in there either, but did so some changes and used the word mend some of the pain. When you stop adding your two cents is when I will start worrying. I love you for it,
Anger was something that I had found again and when you let that back in your life, the old pain seems to follow. So this was a poem that needed to be written as a reminder, what happens when you allow bad feelings back into the heart and soul.
Thanks my dear friend. I have really been trying hard not to bother you with things as I know you have so much on your plate. Just know that I am always here for you and pray that Ed will soon be on the mend. I know with my physical pain, I haven't had more than two hours of sleep since my surgery,, so that is when the bad attitude starts to creep back in when stress of everything catches up with you. Just as I know too well what you and Ed are going through with everything lately.
I just try to keep saying this isn't God testing me, its satan tantalizing and tormenting me. I am thankful for a new year to try to start fresh. Love ya to pieces my sweet friend.
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Point taken... I know faith carries us through the deep water, but it doesn't mean we don't get cold and weary...
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I have to be careful that I don't expect more from you than what any human can withstand. If I do, knock me back to my senses. I think of you as almost not human, because you are so Angelic, sweet and good.. That is the highest compliment I can give, but have to be careful, to not hold you or anyone so high. That pedestal isn't always the safest place to be held. But it might be a nice height for Thelma and Louise to jump another car over! Lol
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Wow. I wish I were 1% of any of that!
I'm in on the Thelma/Louise jump though!
Lol....
Comment from Lilly Flowers
Hi Debi, I seem to remember you alluded to being abused by someone in one of your past postings. This poem is reflecting the trauma you suffered and the faith you've found.
This is beautifully written, with wonderful meter and well-chosen rhymes. I'm wishing you a very happy and healthy new year. Hugs, Lilly
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Hi Debi, I seem to remember you alluded to being abused by someone in one of your past postings. This poem is reflecting the trauma you suffered and the faith you've found.
This is beautifully written, with wonderful meter and well-chosen rhymes. I'm wishing you a very happy and healthy new year. Hugs, Lilly
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Lily, you are so sweet. I thank you so very much for your lovely review and kind words for my poem. It's so appreciated, my dear friend!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. The repeating line 'Don't let those events define you and scar' is absolutely perfect. So many of us allow that to happen. Nobody's had a perfect life, some less perfect than others. Yes, forgiveness is key, and God will help us forgive. Good luck with this contest.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. The repeating line 'Don't let those events define you and scar' is absolutely perfect. So many of us allow that to happen. Nobody's had a perfect life, some less perfect than others. Yes, forgiveness is key, and God will help us forgive. Good luck with this contest.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Barb, you are so sweet. I thank you so very much for your lovely review and kind words for my poem. It's so appreciated, my dear friend!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is sound advice, and I really could imagine God writing this, using your hand. We must forgive ourselves if we want to move on to a better place. I thought your couplet refrain went perfectly and thought it should also be at the end as well. They are powerful words that leap out at you. Well done, Debi. Happy New Year, my friend, I hope it's a lot healthier for you too, Love and hugs, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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That is sound advice, and I really could imagine God writing this, using your hand. We must forgive ourselves if we want to move on to a better place. I thought your couplet refrain went perfectly and thought it should also be at the end as well. They are powerful words that leap out at you. Well done, Debi. Happy New Year, my friend, I hope it's a lot healthier for you too, Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Sandra, you are so sweet. I thank you so very much for your lovely review and kind words for my poem. It's so appreciated, my dear friend!
Comment from Cathy M
I love how you made progression in this poem and created a great flow with your refrain lines. I do have a couple small critiques. The first being on the last line I would get rid of the word the. I know you wanted to keep the 11 syllables count, and it is perfectly okay, and is just my opinion. The second is i would at the end repeat your refrain, to me they give us guidance and would be a nice way to end the poem. But it is very beautiful the way it is written.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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I love how you made progression in this poem and created a great flow with your refrain lines. I do have a couple small critiques. The first being on the last line I would get rid of the word the. I know you wanted to keep the 11 syllables count, and it is perfectly okay, and is just my opinion. The second is i would at the end repeat your refrain, to me they give us guidance and would be a nice way to end the poem. But it is very beautiful the way it is written.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Cathy, I thank you so much for your lovely review and words. But I absolutely love getting the prospective of others and will do that. So then if I do the refrain one more time, then I should probably add a fourth line that ends with the word pain as I had only done the three? Thank you for your whole package review. That get's me even more excited for another year of writing. Thank you again my sweet friend.
Comment from Marienkiefer
This is so beautiful a poem. Painful, raw. Beautiful, uplifting.
I have no words today.
Thank you for all the emotion you put in your writing.
God keeps us strong and never leaves us. Our scars make us grow.
Blessings, Debi. in 2023.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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This is so beautiful a poem. Painful, raw. Beautiful, uplifting.
I have no words today.
Thank you for all the emotion you put in your writing.
God keeps us strong and never leaves us. Our scars make us grow.
Blessings, Debi. in 2023.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Marien, you have no idea how very much your compassionate review means to me. I am so sorry that I am late. I am trying to write as much as I can now, giving my eyes more breaks. But will be having eye surgery on both eyes. So certainly not because Im not so very appreciative.. in. Fact your sweet words are like gold to me. Thank you from the bottom of my heart for your beautiful gift of six stars. Happy New Year my very sweet friend.
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Oh, Debi, it is a pleasure to read your beautiful work, and heart ❤️ poems, jewel quality. I send a prayer your way for your surgery full recovery and healing. Blessings, may God grant you strength, my dear friend.
Marienkiefer 🌸🌸
Comment from susand3022
Hi Debi,
I really liked this one. It has a nice progression to it. I did find one awkward line near the end.
"Forgiveness is key, it will kill most the pain"
I feel the idea behind the words, but it's the words themselves I'm having trouble not stumbling over. Might I make a suggestion? You may feel free to use it, or not as you wish...
"Forgiveness is key, it will help heal the pain"
I also liked the repeating lines in the first few stanzas. Very powerful.
A really good job, Debi!
Happy New Year!
Susan :)
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Hi Debi,
I really liked this one. It has a nice progression to it. I did find one awkward line near the end.
"Forgiveness is key, it will kill most the pain"
I feel the idea behind the words, but it's the words themselves I'm having trouble not stumbling over. Might I make a suggestion? You may feel free to use it, or not as you wish...
"Forgiveness is key, it will help heal the pain"
I also liked the repeating lines in the first few stanzas. Very powerful.
A really good job, Debi!
Happy New Year!
Susan :)
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Susan I did change it and for some reason it feels like we talked about this already. But anyway, you are so sweet. I thank you so very much for your lovely review and kind words for my poem. It's so appreciated, my dear friend!
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Debi,
I loved this exquisite poem. It's erasing past hurts and replacing them with Jesus' power and love.
Your work and presentation are exceptional.
Good luck.
Have a wonderful blessed 2023!
Cindy
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Debi,
I loved this exquisite poem. It's erasing past hurts and replacing them with Jesus' power and love.
Your work and presentation are exceptional.
Good luck.
Have a wonderful blessed 2023!
Cindy
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Hi Cindy, as always, you are so sweet.And I am so sorry for being a couple days late getting back to you! I thank you so very much for your lovely review and kind words for my poem. And also for your gift of six stars!
You have no idea how much the whole package means to me!
It's so appreciated, my dear friend! Happy New Year!🎆🎊
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You?re welcome, Debi.😊
Comment from Sally Law
This is SO beautiful and freeing-! I'm so glad you are free and cleansed of those old things and fresh as the rain! We are new in Christ, cleansed by His atoning blood! A lovely poem, Debi dear, and new beginning for each day in 2023! Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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This is SO beautiful and freeing-! I'm so glad you are free and cleansed of those old things and fresh as the rain! We are new in Christ, cleansed by His atoning blood! A lovely poem, Debi dear, and new beginning for each day in 2023! Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Sally., you are Precious!! I am so sorry for the late thank you. I will explain later Sweetie.. I thank you so very much for your lovely review, kind words and gracious six stars for my poem. It's so appreciated, my dear friend!
PS. I did not forget about you, but had a little set back and will be there yet to night. After all, I am excited to see what is next! I have three new ones since New Years. And will be doing a fourth soon. Love ya.... Debi
