Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from lyenochka
It's so refreshing to have so many good people - even the ladies who have reason to be jealous of Alexandra are happy for her and take care of her. I guess Cord needed to find just the right woman first.
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Your mom called, I guess Alexandra used hers on horses." (period instead of comma after 'called')
Rosa shook her head. "She is. Cord..." (She shook her head to say yes?) Maybe it was disbelief? The three other "shook" actions indicated a "no."
"I know Mom, Samson could've hurt her plus he made a huge mess," (I know, Mom. Samson etc.)
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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It's so refreshing to have so many good people - even the ladies who have reason to be jealous of Alexandra are happy for her and take care of her. I guess Cord needed to find just the right woman first.
Suggestions/Comments:
Your mom called, I guess Alexandra used hers on horses." (period instead of comma after 'called')
Rosa shook her head. "She is. Cord..." (She shook her head to say yes?) Maybe it was disbelief? The three other "shook" actions indicated a "no."
"I know Mom, Samson could've hurt her plus he made a huge mess," (I know, Mom. Samson etc.)
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the catches. I have made the changes. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Alexandra blames herself for the barn fire.
Cordero appears to be in need of a special ring.
"He handed her it" would read better as He handed it to her.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Alexandra blames herself for the barn fire.
Cordero appears to be in need of a special ring.
"He handed her it" would read better as He handed it to her.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good progress. Nicely written.
I'm not sure about the dog in the tub, though. (smiley face here)
So, I guess Cord has worked out all his internal objections to asking Ali to make a permanent move.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Good progress. Nicely written.
I'm not sure about the dog in the tub, though. (smiley face here)
So, I guess Cord has worked out all his internal objections to asking Ali to make a permanent move.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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We'll see. That idea still has problems. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from amahra
Understandingly no action since this part B of the chapter. Good dialogue, though.
He handed [her it] and kissed her. "Don't forget breakfast." [He handed it to her.]
"Mom! I think Samson jumped into the bathtub with Ali!"[LOL!]
Alexandra shook her head. ["It's] never [came] up." [It] never came up. or [It's] never [come] up.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Understandingly no action since this part B of the chapter. Good dialogue, though.
He handed [her it] and kissed her. "Don't forget breakfast." [He handed it to her.]
"Mom! I think Samson jumped into the bathtub with Ali!"[LOL!]
Alexandra shook her head. ["It's] never [came] up." [It] never came up. or [It's] never [come] up.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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I made the correction. Thank you for the help.
Comment from lancellot
Well done. And solid penmanship.
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Jorge continued, "I know how much you care and respect her."
- Not an insult. But, two adults can be together 'in that way' and still care, respect, and love each other (I know shocking). What I mean is, Do you want everyone sounding and acting like either, Howdy Doody or Darth Vader?
One last thing. You can write, no doubt, but you have Alexandra vacillate between, childlike and Wonder Woman. You don't have to believe me, but I felt someone should warn you.
Have a great New Year.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Well done. And solid penmanship.
Suggestions only:
Jorge continued, "I know how much you care and respect her."
- Not an insult. But, two adults can be together 'in that way' and still care, respect, and love each other (I know shocking). What I mean is, Do you want everyone sounding and acting like either, Howdy Doody or Darth Vader?
One last thing. You can write, no doubt, but you have Alexandra vacillate between, childlike and Wonder Woman. You don't have to believe me, but I felt someone should warn you.
Have a great New Year.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from prettybluebirds
I have found the best way to stop evil eddy is to type a story right on the site. It seems every time I try to post something I have a bunch of computer glitches to clean up. Keep writing. I'm enjoying your story.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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I have found the best way to stop evil eddy is to type a story right on the site. It seems every time I try to post something I have a bunch of computer glitches to clean up. Keep writing. I'm enjoying your story.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the suggestion. My typing is nowhere close to that good. Before my posts are posted, I've edited close to 100 times.
Comment from Ric Myworld
This is a very typical type of chapter giving another glimpse into how different every situation and relationship is viewed through the eyes of men and women. I think there was a book written once claiming men were from Mars and Women from Venus, or something like that. LOL. Thanks for sharing. And I'm wishing you the Happiest and Healthiest New Year ever!
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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This is a very typical type of chapter giving another glimpse into how different every situation and relationship is viewed through the eyes of men and women. I think there was a book written once claiming men were from Mars and Women from Venus, or something like that. LOL. Thanks for sharing. And I'm wishing you the Happiest and Healthiest New Year ever!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and Happy NEW YEAR!!!!!!!!!!!
Comment from BethShelby
It certainly sounds like to me they are in a relationship, It also seems that Ali is happier being where she is than she was in New York and there is plenty of work for her right where she is. When the new ring selection is on display in the jewelry store, I would imagine she would be happy to accept one. I enjoying the story.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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It certainly sounds like to me they are in a relationship, It also seems that Ali is happier being where she is than she was in New York and there is plenty of work for her right where she is. When the new ring selection is on display in the jewelry store, I would imagine she would be happy to accept one. I enjoying the story.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
Up to your usual magic with this chapter, Barbara. Only it left me confused. You wrote in the Author's remarks, "This novel is completed so I am going to try to post every six days." You DO mean, don't you, that the writing of the novel is over, but you have more to post on it, right? In other words, this wasn't the last chapter, was it?
Jay
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Up to your usual magic with this chapter, Barbara. Only it left me confused. You wrote in the Author's remarks, "This novel is completed so I am going to try to post every six days." You DO mean, don't you, that the writing of the novel is over, but you have more to post on it, right? In other words, this wasn't the last chapter, was it?
Jay
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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I have finished writing the novel, but not posting it. I guess I should change my wording. No it's not the last chapter. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Beautifully written as always Barbara. This was a great, reflective episode, they are getting to a resolution in their relationship, with he NY Jeweller being in touch with the west Texas jeweller, and Cord asking for examples of engagement rings. Beautifully written dear girl. Happy new year to you and yours, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Beautifully written as always Barbara. This was a great, reflective episode, they are getting to a resolution in their relationship, with he NY Jeweller being in touch with the west Texas jeweller, and Cord asking for examples of engagement rings. Beautifully written dear girl. Happy new year to you and yours, blessings Roy
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
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Most welcome
