The High Life
a Naani poetic form20 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This naani, The High Life, has the proper formatting and takes the readers to the opposite of what the addict is searching for, but the destination he or she will reach.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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This naani, The High Life, has the proper formatting and takes the readers to the opposite of what the addict is searching for, but the destination he or she will reach.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much, Bill. Appreciate your wonderful review.
Melissa
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Congratulations on this winning naani poem. Each carefully chosen word is loaded with the anguish and price of addiction. Best wishes for the new year.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Congratulations on this winning naani poem. Each carefully chosen word is loaded with the anguish and price of addiction. Best wishes for the new year.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thank you Ginda. So appreciate you! This one just leapt from my pen... it is a bit rugged and not my usual style. :)
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
Sorry to have missed this riveting poem. I was I could say I hadn't witnessed this stuff, but I have. There's always someone in my life addicted to this S...! Oh if they could only see the devil within. Sending you my best today as always and congratulations on your well deserved win.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Sorry to have missed this riveting poem. I was I could say I hadn't witnessed this stuff, but I have. There's always someone in my life addicted to this S...! Oh if they could only see the devil within. Sending you my best today as always and congratulations on your well deserved win.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Thank you so very much, Sally. It was something that just flew out from my pen... hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Good poem overall, technically conforms to the naani structure. The words chosen here are strong and convey a dark atmosphere, which evidently the author wanted and successfully achieved.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Good poem overall, technically conforms to the naani structure. The words chosen here are strong and convey a dark atmosphere, which evidently the author wanted and successfully achieved.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much Mario. :)
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Whew! This is a starkly stated Naani. This is a good entry into the contest. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated and easily understood. The visual is great and fits the text well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Whew! This is a starkly stated Naani. This is a good entry into the contest. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated and easily understood. The visual is great and fits the text well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much, Sandra.
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You are welcome. I voted for it.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The sound of the tummy is making its way to the stomach through gurgling and rumbling sounds. They are typically caused by gas flowing through our intestines. Doctors call these types of sounds rumbling or gurgling --and more often than not, the cause is benign. Your wording is right on in this poem.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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The sound of the tummy is making its way to the stomach through gurgling and rumbling sounds. They are typically caused by gas flowing through our intestines. Doctors call these types of sounds rumbling or gurgling --and more often than not, the cause is benign. Your wording is right on in this poem.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thank you Rosemary. I appreciate your thoughts on this verse and the explanation for the sounds in the tummy. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Addiction has that grip of power over us and when we succumb we lose control over ourselves and fall under its spell and the groaning continues until there is another fix, the highs and lows are gut wrenching, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Addiction has that grip of power over us and when we succumb we lose control over ourselves and fall under its spell and the groaning continues until there is another fix, the highs and lows are gut wrenching, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thanks for a meaningful and spot on review!
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet, you now have 8 votes.
Have you ever seen Trainspotting , it's an English film which became a cult film .. it's about Renton an heroin addict and his three nut case friends.
Here is the trailer you have to copy and paste cause I'm in bed and I need my pc to embed it. Sorry.
Listen to the words. Watch the film.
Renton gives it a try , dumps the drugs to conform to society which mean putting a noose around your neck : job, family , kids, house, car, mortgage etc.
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=pehVTRDTe7Q
Love the artwork I imagine that's what an addict sees when they are high but then there's inevitably the fall.
It's a shame this contest went to the booth with only 3 entries..it should have been postponed to a later date.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Ciao poet, you now have 8 votes.
Have you ever seen Trainspotting , it's an English film which became a cult film .. it's about Renton an heroin addict and his three nut case friends.
Here is the trailer you have to copy and paste cause I'm in bed and I need my pc to embed it. Sorry.
Listen to the words. Watch the film.
Renton gives it a try , dumps the drugs to conform to society which mean putting a noose around your neck : job, family , kids, house, car, mortgage etc.
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=pehVTRDTe7Q
Love the artwork I imagine that's what an addict sees when they are high but then there's inevitably the fall.
It's a shame this contest went to the booth with only 3 entries..it should have been postponed to a later date.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much sweet Franca. I appreciate the notice about the film. I agree it would have been better to postpone it, but they didn't (:
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Write a Naani writing prompt contest.
syllables count and connection between lines. Nice presentation.
Addiction is a terrible disease
Good luck in the contest.
rough cur/sing, low groan/ing
wretch/ing spa/sms
deep, pri/mal, gut/tur/al moans...
the sounds of a/ddict/ion 23 syllables
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Excellent entry for the Write a Naani writing prompt contest.
syllables count and connection between lines. Nice presentation.
Addiction is a terrible disease
Good luck in the contest.
rough cur/sing, low groan/ing
wretch/ing spa/sms
deep, pri/mal, gut/tur/al moans...
the sounds of a/ddict/ion 23 syllables
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much Gypsy!
Comment from Celyn
This poem follows the rules of the Naani poetry competition and is very emotive and guttural. It describes the physical pangs associated with addiction well and read smoothly. It is also a clever idea for a poem so well done and good luck with it.
Celyn
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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This poem follows the rules of the Naani poetry competition and is very emotive and guttural. It describes the physical pangs associated with addiction well and read smoothly. It is also a clever idea for a poem so well done and good luck with it.
Celyn
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thank you.
