"The Gift of Life 2003"
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Comment from Spitfire
I'm so sorry to hear of this tragedy in your life, Ricky. Your poem links his birthday to the dying of a season. The empty sky foreshadows his senseless death. I love that you donated his organs. In that way, his body still lives on.
I've read that when you think of a diseased one, that means his soul or spirit is thinking of you too.
Shari aka spitfire.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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I'm so sorry to hear of this tragedy in your life, Ricky. Your poem links his birthday to the dying of a season. The empty sky foreshadows his senseless death. I love that you donated his organs. In that way, his body still lives on.
I've read that when you think of a diseased one, that means his soul or spirit is thinking of you too.
Shari aka spitfire.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your review and your words touch deeply. It's so nice to see when someone not only realizes and understands my work. But it's generous in return.
Doctor Ricky 1025
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this heartfelt poem with us. It's almost a testimony of the wonderful things God accomplished in your life through one of the most heart-breaking situations one could ever imagine.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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Thank you for sharing this heartfelt poem with us. It's almost a testimony of the wonderful things God accomplished in your life through one of the most heart-breaking situations one could ever imagine.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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I like writing the Deep stuff most people get into it and think it still affects my personal life.
Now don't get me wrong it's completely normal to grieve at least a year for a loss when you lose two people in a short period I grieve two and a half years.
But now I agree through my journaling journaling is a healthy way to get your thoughts out and self-medicate.
Thanks Barbara.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this heartfelt poem with us. It's almost a testimony of the wonderful things God accomplished in your life through one of the most heart-breaking situations one could ever imagine.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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Thank you for sharing this heartfelt poem with us. It's almost a testimony of the wonderful things God accomplished in your life through one of the most heart-breaking situations one could ever imagine.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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I just went through twice.
Thanks again.
Ricky
Comment from royowen
If one cannot enjoy Christmas, somehow I think that some sort of hope has gone, when everything that one enjoys is gone in life, there's nothing left, then it is time to die I guess. If everything on earth is gone, there is still God, beautifully written, Ricky, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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If one cannot enjoy Christmas, somehow I think that some sort of hope has gone, when everything that one enjoys is gone in life, there's nothing left, then it is time to die I guess. If everything on earth is gone, there is still God, beautifully written, Ricky, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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Self medication through reading the holy book journaling besides a normal grieving. Are completely natural and healthy.
Thanks Roy.
Doctor Ricky
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That?s right
Comment from irishauthorme
Heartfelt! A terrible blow to try and recover from. A hard test of faith, while attempting to find a reason for what was done to us.
Great that you were able to donate your son's organs to give the gift of life to another person.
We have suffered through several close losses, and like you, have maintained our faith, relying on the hope of the life after, and the reunion.
Thanks for sharing.
irish
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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Heartfelt! A terrible blow to try and recover from. A hard test of faith, while attempting to find a reason for what was done to us.
Great that you were able to donate your son's organs to give the gift of life to another person.
We have suffered through several close losses, and like you, have maintained our faith, relying on the hope of the life after, and the reunion.
Thanks for sharing.
irish
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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Thanks Irish for the comments and review.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nicely told. Good work.
Here are a few pointers. I hope they are helpful.
"The day Jay that you went away." - commas around 'Jay'
"What was there to to be Thankful for?" - oops
"Where are you are?"- huh?
"Even though sometimes I know in my Broken-Heart Jay.
If possible you would still have loved to be there." - no period, but commas around 'Jay'
"...God knows the shame though remains, a scar burnt and seared so, damn, deep." - none of these commas
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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Very nicely told. Good work.
Here are a few pointers. I hope they are helpful.
"The day Jay that you went away." - commas around 'Jay'
"What was there to to be Thankful for?" - oops
"Where are you are?"- huh?
"Even though sometimes I know in my Broken-Heart Jay.
If possible you would still have loved to be there." - no period, but commas around 'Jay'
"...God knows the shame though remains, a scar burnt and seared so, damn, deep." - none of these commas
Best wishes.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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My thanks Wayne.
I cleaned this up a bit and added to it but my style is definitely a little different than the norm.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment from Sarah Robin
Thank you for sharing your story of this very difficult time. I am so sorry you lost your son. He still lives in the four people who received his gift of life. I wish for you peace and joy in this holiday season. Sarah
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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Thank you for sharing your story of this very difficult time. I am so sorry you lost your son. He still lives in the four people who received his gift of life. I wish for you peace and joy in this holiday season. Sarah
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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Thanks again Sarah for your time, review, and Wonderful comments.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment from Faith Williams
What an incredibly heartbreaking story. Your words in describing your mood as the bleak November scene works as great imagery and metaphor.
Something to consider:
'But my shame through the seasons would become way to much to bare...' I believe 'to' should be 'too' and 'bare' in this instance should be 'bear' as in to 'bear the shame.'
Thank you so much for sharing your story though it must have been difficult for you to do so.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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What an incredibly heartbreaking story. Your words in describing your mood as the bleak November scene works as great imagery and metaphor.
Something to consider:
'But my shame through the seasons would become way to much to bare...' I believe 'to' should be 'too' and 'bare' in this instance should be 'bear' as in to 'bear the shame.'
Thank you so much for sharing your story though it must have been difficult for you to do so.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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I tried using the "b e a r"
word.
But the spelling check was kicking it out.
So I changed it to the other word.
Yhanks for stopping by Faithnand enjoying this one for my Son.
Doctor Ricky1024
