Arise, Arise
A sliced shirt ok. But no breast fillet.47 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Lee,
This is as scary as it is true. Until you see the blood, the tension probably makes you not feel the pain.
I hope this isn't autobiographical for you.
Something similar happened to my husband while he was picking up a pizza. A guy came in wielding a knife, but the police were called and got there before anyone got hurt,
Joan
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Hi Lee,
This is as scary as it is true. Until you see the blood, the tension probably makes you not feel the pain.
I hope this isn't autobiographical for you.
Something similar happened to my husband while he was picking up a pizza. A guy came in wielding a knife, but the police were called and got there before anyone got hurt,
Joan
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
Comment from Heather Knight
As you say, if it's just the shirt it's not too serious, but if flesh is involved it becomes more worrying.
Thanks for sharing your original horror poem.
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As you say, if it's just the shirt it's not too serious, but if flesh is involved it becomes more worrying.
Thanks for sharing your original horror poem.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing!
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
Comment from Terry Broxson
This looks like a good entry for this contest; good luck. But it is too bad you could not work in that subtitle line about no breast fillet. I thought that was a great line. Good work. Terry.
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This looks like a good entry for this contest; good luck. But it is too bad you could not work in that subtitle line about no breast fillet. I thought that was a great line. Good work. Terry.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
Comment from Jim Wile
This is an interesting little poem about near misses and the horror they may have brought had they not been misses.
It brings to mind an incident when my son was about 6 years old riding his bike on a family bike ride. A portion of the bike path we were on was perilously close to a busy road, and at one point he wobbled a little on his bike. If he had fallen to the left, he would have fallen right into traffic. Fortunately, he straightened himself out. After that near miss, we always walked our bikes along that part of the path that was so dangerous.
I also liked the stark appearance of this poem. Great job.
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This is an interesting little poem about near misses and the horror they may have brought had they not been misses.
It brings to mind an incident when my son was about 6 years old riding his bike on a family bike ride. A portion of the bike path we were on was perilously close to a busy road, and at one point he wobbled a little on his bike. If he had fallen to the left, he would have fallen right into traffic. Fortunately, he straightened himself out. After that near miss, we always walked our bikes along that part of the path that was so dangerous.
I also liked the stark appearance of this poem. Great job.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line says
it all! Frightening! I found the author's words thought provoking and filled with horror. The color scheme went well with these words.
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The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line says
it all! Frightening! I found the author's words thought provoking and filled with horror. The color scheme went well with these words.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
Comment from jacquelyn popp
I enjoyed reading your poem. Definitely true hurt. The three lines rhymed perfectly . The words of your poem flowed together nicely. Thank you for sharing.
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I enjoyed reading your poem. Definitely true hurt. The three lines rhymed perfectly . The words of your poem flowed together nicely. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a well-done 5-7-5 horror poem. It spells out the sliced shirt and then goes into the breast fillet and on to the ending where you use the last line as a way to go to the end with true horror alert. This speaks of the humor and horror in one that goes on in today's movies and flicks that show the way to save the day and still win the game.
Jesse
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This is a well-done 5-7-5 horror poem. It spells out the sliced shirt and then goes into the breast fillet and on to the ending where you use the last line as a way to go to the end with true horror alert. This speaks of the humor and horror in one that goes on in today's movies and flicks that show the way to save the day and still win the game.
Jesse
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
Comment from papa55mike
The title, description, and the poem all rhyme. Nice touch. Welcome back!
What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, ad God bless.
mike
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The title, description, and the poem all rhyme. Nice touch. Welcome back!
What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, ad God bless.
mike
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
Comment from TDLRasmar
That is an interesting 5-7-5 poem. It does paint a picture. I have to say that your prompt at the top "But no breast fillet" I thought was really cool. I would work that into your poem. I liked it.
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That is an interesting 5-7-5 poem. It does paint a picture. I have to say that your prompt at the top "But no breast fillet" I thought was really cool. I would work that into your poem. I liked it.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
