Arise, Arise
A sliced shirt ok. But no breast fillet.47 total reviews
Comment from Frank Malley
"Arise, Arise" is a brief poem about initially thinking an injury had been avoided, and then discovering by the seeping of blood that serious harm had been done. I think the last line, "true horror alert," could be improved; the endless flood of uncertainty that accompanies one's sudden awareness of grave injury.
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"Arise, Arise" is a brief poem about initially thinking an injury had been avoided, and then discovering by the seeping of blood that serious harm had been done. I think the last line, "true horror alert," could be improved; the endless flood of uncertainty that accompanies one's sudden awareness of grave injury.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent 5-7-5 horror poem for this writing prompt. You sure scared me with a slicing close to the heart. Love your humor along the way.
Blessings and good luck in the contest.
Janet
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Excellent 5-7-5 horror poem for this writing prompt. You sure scared me with a slicing close to the heart. Love your humor along the way.
Blessings and good luck in the contest.
Janet
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tom,
This is an excellent horror poem for the 5-7-5 contest.
The closeness of the wound to one's heart
is a horror that sends chills down the spine.
Nicely done.
Best wishes.
Robert
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Hello Tom,
This is an excellent horror poem for the 5-7-5 contest.
The closeness of the wound to one's heart
is a horror that sends chills down the spine.
Nicely done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Horrifying indeed. With your carefully chosen words you create the tension, the pain, and the horror of a physical assault. It stops the reader. Very well written.
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Horrifying indeed. With your carefully chosen words you create the tension, the pain, and the horror of a physical assault. It stops the reader. Very well written.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from dmt1967
I thought (till) breast bled and hurt (did you mean till or still)
I enjoyed reading this poem and loved the tone of voice the poet used. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Have a great week.
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I thought (till) breast bled and hurt (did you mean till or still)
I enjoyed reading this poem and loved the tone of voice the poet used. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Have a great week.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from jake cosmos aller
hey nicely done short horror poem about slicing meat, blood and gore and everything more to make a real picture of absolute horror all in the 5-7-5 pattern.
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hey nicely done short horror poem about slicing meat, blood and gore and everything more to make a real picture of absolute horror all in the 5-7-5 pattern.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
Comment from Aussie
Tom you are a true horror! Sliced your shirt and blood did spurt, today it seems the norm to attack any man or woman for no reason except 'because I can' good luck with your bleeding breast and a new shirt. K xx
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Tom you are a true horror! Sliced your shirt and blood did spurt, today it seems the norm to attack any man or woman for no reason except 'because I can' good luck with your bleeding breast and a new shirt. K xx
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
Comment from Karyn2
Your blood red background sets the horror scene well! Yes we all feel at ease thinking it's just a scratch, only the shirt..until it begins to pool!! Thank you for this delightful horror summed up neatly in a 5-7-5.
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Your blood red background sets the horror scene well! Yes we all feel at ease thinking it's just a scratch, only the shirt..until it begins to pool!! Thank you for this delightful horror summed up neatly in a 5-7-5.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness this is a near death experience as this attack is real and terrifying and I hope never to experience such a tragedy, few words of horror for the contest, love Dolly x
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Oh my goodness this is a near death experience as this attack is real and terrifying and I hope never to experience such a tragedy, few words of horror for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
Comment from godlucifer
true horror a topic this horror was. true sentencing,true imagination,and true graphic of the imagination. your poem was true to its heart and imaginary. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
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true horror a topic this horror was. true sentencing,true imagination,and true graphic of the imagination. your poem was true to its heart and imaginary. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
