Arise, Arise
A sliced shirt ok. But no breast fillet.47 total reviews
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Excellent entry for a horror themed contest. The rhyming is a bonus. What is the background for the title that you chose? I do hope that the incident is fiction and not biographical. Good luck.
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Excellent entry for a horror themed contest. The rhyming is a bonus. What is the background for the title that you chose? I do hope that the incident is fiction and not biographical. Good luck.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
Comment from jessizero
Yes, that's horror! You did a great job telling an unexpected story in just seventeen syllables. Thank you for sharing this poem here, and best wishes to you.
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Yes, that's horror! You did a great job telling an unexpected story in just seventeen syllables. Thank you for sharing this poem here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
Comment from jmdg1954
Must've been a super sharp knife to only "think" the shirt was cut. Only to find out that the flesh was slashed as well.
Nicely done in three short lines.
John
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Must've been a super sharp knife to only "think" the shirt was cut. Only to find out that the flesh was slashed as well.
Nicely done in three short lines.
John
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You know I have to write a comment in this space; but after the four college students that were fatally stabbed in their beds, I cringe! So, I will not comment right now, just say it is a horror alert for sure!
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You know I have to write a comment in this space; but after the four college students that were fatally stabbed in their beds, I cringe! So, I will not comment right now, just say it is a horror alert for sure!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
Comment from susand3022
Hi EE,
That's a little scary... another stabbing comes along. Well, better than a shooting. I for one, will be happy to go back to the hand-to-hand combat of the 50's and 60's. Gangs should all be running around with knives and chains. I think if they had to fight each other hand-to-hand, they might think twice. I think it's a different thing when you have to look at someone up close and do them damage.
Susan :)
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Hi EE,
That's a little scary... another stabbing comes along. Well, better than a shooting. I for one, will be happy to go back to the hand-to-hand combat of the 50's and 60's. Gangs should all be running around with knives and chains. I think if they had to fight each other hand-to-hand, they might think twice. I think it's a different thing when you have to look at someone up close and do them damage.
Susan :)
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nice Haiku with rhyme, Everett. It is difficult to effectively rhyme a Haiku, but you have done a good job with it. You should do well in the contest.
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Nice Haiku with rhyme, Everett. It is difficult to effectively rhyme a Haiku, but you have done a good job with it. You should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
Comment from GWHARGIS
Although I was unclear on the deeper meaning of this poem, here are my two scenarios. First, you were attacked, slashed, thought you had been cut only to realize they ripped your shirt. Second, this was about going under the knife for surgery. I'm probably way off but that's where your poem took me. I enjoyed it. Gretchen
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Although I was unclear on the deeper meaning of this poem, here are my two scenarios. First, you were attacked, slashed, thought you had been cut only to realize they ripped your shirt. Second, this was about going under the knife for surgery. I'm probably way off but that's where your poem took me. I enjoyed it. Gretchen
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
Comment from Tom Horonzy
???? This piece is above my pay grade. I am sure it means something to you. Maybe, I should speak to your erudite cat, or ... maybe he is the one who put these three lines into your mind. That's quite a profile story you left us to read.
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???? This piece is above my pay grade. I am sure it means something to you. Maybe, I should speak to your erudite cat, or ... maybe he is the one who put these three lines into your mind. That's quite a profile story you left us to read.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
Comment from Moonbeams Musings 55
A catchy little poem that paints a gory picture. Very well written so very descriptive. I can just picture it all. Did they slice their self or was it an attack? There are all kinds of scenarios I can imagine with this. Thanks for sharing.
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A catchy little poem that paints a gory picture. Very well written so very descriptive. I can just picture it all. Did they slice their self or was it an attack? There are all kinds of scenarios I can imagine with this. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I do enjoy rhyming poems even for 5/7/5 poems that are usually not rhymed. You did do a good job describing a horrible situation. I hope this is a piece of fiction, not a true story.
Well done.
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I do enjoy rhyming poems even for 5/7/5 poems that are usually not rhymed. You did do a good job describing a horrible situation. I hope this is a piece of fiction, not a true story.
Well done.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
