Take This Pain Away
Healing from all this pain.29 total reviews
Comment from royowen
"With the heart man believes unto righteousness, and with the mouth confession is made unto salvation" a continued confession is required. There must be an ounce of hope there Charity, I can't save you, but you can cry out. Nicely written, blessings Roy
Typo : demons surround(s) me
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"With the heart man believes unto righteousness, and with the mouth confession is made unto salvation" a continued confession is required. There must be an ounce of hope there Charity, I can't save you, but you can cry out. Nicely written, blessings Roy
Typo : demons surround(s) me
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from GWHARGIS
Your poem was fascinating. The pharmacy and liquor can only mask so much. Being the black sheep is harsh was to label yourself. I used to call myself the Blackshear but at 61, I refer to myself as the one that chose to ride down the unpaved road. This was a well instrumented cry for help. Merry Christmas. Gretchen
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Your poem was fascinating. The pharmacy and liquor can only mask so much. Being the black sheep is harsh was to label yourself. I used to call myself the Blackshear but at 61, I refer to myself as the one that chose to ride down the unpaved road. This was a well instrumented cry for help. Merry Christmas. Gretchen
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from Goodadvicechan
This is a moving and emotional piece. I can figure how painful one feels if the pain does not go away.
Unfortunately there are pain in life that don't go away. The only way is to forget it and don't think of it. That doesn't mean it goes away but at least let the past be the past.
Thanks for sharing
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This is a moving and emotional piece. I can figure how painful one feels if the pain does not go away.
Unfortunately there are pain in life that don't go away. The only way is to forget it and don't think of it. That doesn't mean it goes away but at least let the past be the past.
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent.
A realization that pain is the reward for those who take the psychopath.
Expel the negatives by embracing them, without medication.
Because "Job," and reclaim your life.
Realization that you are unique is your path; stimulants get in the way of Your journey.
I see another road for you; it is the "high road" to understanding. You must march to your own instincts.
Free your mind and you open your eyes to a new life.
Believe in yourself.
Never give up; become "Job."
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Excellent.
A realization that pain is the reward for those who take the psychopath.
Expel the negatives by embracing them, without medication.
Because "Job," and reclaim your life.
Realization that you are unique is your path; stimulants get in the way of Your journey.
I see another road for you; it is the "high road" to understanding. You must march to your own instincts.
Free your mind and you open your eyes to a new life.
Believe in yourself.
Never give up; become "Job."
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This poem is compelling and lasts just long enough to give the reader an intimate look inside your soul and heart. I love a few of the lines that speak to the heart of every poet such as the repeated line let the poetic voice of the streets forever play! I love this line and I'll bet every poet can relate to at least some of these heartfelt lines. Many good lines worth repeating!
Jesse
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This poem is compelling and lasts just long enough to give the reader an intimate look inside your soul and heart. I love a few of the lines that speak to the heart of every poet such as the repeated line let the poetic voice of the streets forever play! I love this line and I'll bet every poet can relate to at least some of these heartfelt lines. Many good lines worth repeating!
Jesse
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A poem that pulls no punches and is very honest and sincere. The writer presents an agonising struggle with the demons which torture her and from which there seems no escape!
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A poem that pulls no punches and is very honest and sincere. The writer presents an agonising struggle with the demons which torture her and from which there seems no escape!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Charity,
This mono-rhyme free verse shows the depression you have. I think that getting rid of the alcohol would add to the healing of writing your feelings out in your poem. I hope releasing your emotions makes Christmas and its season happier for you.
Keep writing and stay healthy and happy throughout the next year.
Joan
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Hi Charity,
This mono-rhyme free verse shows the depression you have. I think that getting rid of the alcohol would add to the healing of writing your feelings out in your poem. I hope releasing your emotions makes Christmas and its season happier for you.
Keep writing and stay healthy and happy throughout the next year.
Joan
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from jaded831
Writing your feelings down helps, you may feel alone, but you are not. God lives in you so we are never truly alone. But God only helps those that help themselves. There is no magic wand, we all need help, keep praying. Maybe God will send an angel disguised as a human.
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Writing your feelings down helps, you may feel alone, but you are not. God lives in you so we are never truly alone. But God only helps those that help themselves. There is no magic wand, we all need help, keep praying. Maybe God will send an angel disguised as a human.
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Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Writing can lead to healing. Continue to reach out and seek help, through prayer and the guidance of a good, compassionate counselor. This I write as someone who hears your cry for help within this verse. As a poem it is well written and definitely continue to use your talent as a writer. God bless
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Writing can lead to healing. Continue to reach out and seek help, through prayer and the guidance of a good, compassionate counselor. This I write as someone who hears your cry for help within this verse. As a poem it is well written and definitely continue to use your talent as a writer. God bless
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Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
