Lucky
Flaunting it.17 total reviews
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Multiple use of the word "ass".
Surprise ending, eating hay but not a horse.
Hand-counted sixty words so meets that requirement of the contest guidelinesl
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Multiple use of the word "ass".
Surprise ending, eating hay but not a horse.
Hand-counted sixty words so meets that requirement of the contest guidelinesl
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a fun contest entry, Gretchen. I enjoyed reading it.
You led readers on then hit them with a twist at the end.
Great little story in 60 words.
Thanks for sharing and for the laugh, Jan
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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What a fun contest entry, Gretchen. I enjoyed reading it.
You led readers on then hit them with a twist at the end.
Great little story in 60 words.
Thanks for sharing and for the laugh, Jan
Comment Written 25-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Thank you for reading this. Appreciate your comments. Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
LoL. So funny. Wonderful entry for the 60 WORD DASH writing prompt contest.
Good word count and smooth flow easy to follow.
Excellent flash fiction.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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LoL. So funny. Wonderful entry for the 60 WORD DASH writing prompt contest.
Good word count and smooth flow easy to follow.
Excellent flash fiction.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Thankbyou so much for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Hahaha....This is a good 60-word dash entry. The story is clearly stated and cleverly told. At first, I thought it was a woman. I was relieved to know it was a donkey. The text could be one or two sizes larger. It would also enhance your presentation if you had a visual of at least a stable. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Hahaha....This is a good 60-word dash entry. The story is clearly stated and cleverly told. At first, I thought it was a woman. I was relieved to know it was a donkey. The text could be one or two sizes larger. It would also enhance your presentation if you had a visual of at least a stable. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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I did look for a picture but could find what I wanted. Thank you so much for this nice review. Gretchen
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You are welcome.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I am lost in thought on this story; at first, I thought they were talking about the horse, but then was a donkey kind of walking around being admired from behind?
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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I am lost in thought on this story; at first, I thought they were talking about the horse, but then was a donkey kind of walking around being admired from behind?
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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It's hard to state very clearly in 60 words. Lol. Thank you for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Bill Schott
This sixty-word story, Lucky, has the proper word count and notes that being an ass is not a bad thing. Now, being an assHOLE is a horse of a different color.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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This sixty-word story, Lucky, has the proper word count and notes that being an ass is not a bad thing. Now, being an assHOLE is a horse of a different color.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Yes, sir. Being a whole ass is definitely better than being an ass hole. Thank you so much for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Ginda Simpson
This is hilarious. I don't know how you flash writers do it, but this is so well done. You draw the reader in with your first line and lead us skipping along with the playful dialogue. Great piece. Good luck.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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This is hilarious. I don't know how you flash writers do it, but this is so well done. You draw the reader in with your first line and lead us skipping along with the playful dialogue. Great piece. Good luck.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Very funny from the start, and keeps the reader wondering what's going on?? Is that perverted stuff really admissible here...sort of question. Then the twist and I say: they got me!
Very good plot and ending.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Very funny from the start, and keeps the reader wondering what's going on?? Is that perverted stuff really admissible here...sort of question. Then the twist and I say: they got me!
Very good plot and ending.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Thesis
Good thing it was an Ass. It was a cute, humurous, flash from the point of view of a farm animal who was glad to be admired, and happy not to be a run of the mill horse. I though it was a very good entry to the 60 word flash contest.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Good thing it was an Ass. It was a cute, humurous, flash from the point of view of a farm animal who was glad to be admired, and happy not to be a run of the mill horse. I though it was a very good entry to the 60 word flash contest.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your kind review. Gretchen
Comment from LJbutterfly
Say What? Your opening sentence really captures the reader's attention. When I went back and read this clever short story the second time, I got it. It wasn't a woman or a horse talking. Nice play on words. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Say What? Your opening sentence really captures the reader's attention. When I went back and read this clever short story the second time, I got it. It wasn't a woman or a horse talking. Nice play on words. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Thanknyou so much for thos nice review. Gretchen
