Be Wee With Bea Part 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "No Benny Around "Third in a series is quite sad in the beginning.
11 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I like how the vocabulary range seems to match the target audience. The animals seem to be going through longer-term reactions related to grieving. I bet many readers will like what you write. From a religious point of view, I have a different explanation for what causes 'crush' feelings. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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I like how the vocabulary range seems to match the target audience. The animals seem to be going through longer-term reactions related to grieving. I bet many readers will like what you write. From a religious point of view, I have a different explanation for what causes 'crush' feelings. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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Thank you for your review that is extremely confirming. Thank you also for your extra efforts. I'm curious as to your explanation. I love broadening my mind. I look back to my childhood & see all the crushes I had.
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I guess the best way to explain it would be that coming from a Mormon point of view, we believe we are repeating quite a lot of what we used to know and do before being born on this planet Earth, and what seems like a 'crush' is actually a memory getting filtered through a structure of thought that hasn't finished maturing yet. Bet I had one to three crushes on boys for nearly every year I was in school. We also have a tendency to resume and continue old friendships and even repeat jobs or areas of interest we had before. This is from a doctrine called the pre-mortal life. The Bible also refers to this pre-mortal period in several round-about ways, such as Jeremiah 1:5.
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Cool explanation...I would agree, now that you phrase it that way. I actually live in Vermont where Joseph Smith came from. This is why when I went to England with some friends, one said, "We were here. So I wrote a time travel section where we went back to the 16th century to a monastery. Funny how in this lifetime, I was in the convent for 28 years...bwaaa. Thank you for your further reflections.
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You're welcome. Have a super day.
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***Smile***
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Always a sad time when someone close travels to the "rainbow bridge" and this chapter is full of that event as it provides backstory on multiple relationships.
Appeared Sweet Puppy had a real attraction to Annie and wanted to make a good impression on her.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Always a sad time when someone close travels to the "rainbow bridge" and this chapter is full of that event as it provides backstory on multiple relationships.
Appeared Sweet Puppy had a real attraction to Annie and wanted to make a good impression on her.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I like and have read the story about life and activities of dogs and their emotions and feelings dramatically with a good contrast of doggy sentiments; well said; realistic and passionate has been the art and style of taletelling; well said; ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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I like and have read the story about life and activities of dogs and their emotions and feelings dramatically with a good contrast of doggy sentiments; well said; realistic and passionate has been the art and style of taletelling; well said; ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm honored.
Comment from strandregs
I must start with saying , my comments are from where I am now.
So I am not critisizing, as I have no leg to stand on.
Also might be English American difference.
Worked to understand more...
Sounds very adult to me.
Contented best friends...
Watched after one another...
Looked after each other?
Or looked at each other?
He was released...
He felt released?
Was he releaved?
She couldn't help herself sometime, that she seemed to get so anxious she would just let go.
This is not coherent to me/ I understand what you are saying/I would drop the 'that'
The story line , not allowing bullying is a favourite of mine.
:-))Z.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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I must start with saying , my comments are from where I am now.
So I am not critisizing, as I have no leg to stand on.
Also might be English American difference.
Worked to understand more...
Sounds very adult to me.
Contented best friends...
Watched after one another...
Looked after each other?
Or looked at each other?
He was released...
He felt released?
Was he releaved?
She couldn't help herself sometime, that she seemed to get so anxious she would just let go.
This is not coherent to me/ I understand what you are saying/I would drop the 'that'
The story line , not allowing bullying is a favourite of mine.
:-))Z.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. The idependent reading age is 4-6th grade ages 10-12
I think sometimes people express themselves differently than I. I use old Vermont idioms and dialect when I write.
I don't recognize it is different because that's all we hear. I taught in a school where the kids spoke more Appalachian than any standard English.
My pay was graded on how well they did on the standard English tests. Of course, they thought most incorrect expressions were ok.
I went around to see how many of the 12 incorrect ones they'd gotten. Most had 3 marked. I had to cheat a little by saying to them, "If it sounds right mark it wrong. I explained to my 6th graders that these test were unfair.
I went around again & they had 8-10 of the 12 marked.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Wow! This is so cute. I bet the kids love this. I think that second and third graders would love this as well. Well, I'm over fifty and I enjoyed it, but I'm a strange bird.
Anyhoo, nice work. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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Wow! This is so cute. I bet the kids love this. I think that second and third graders would love this as well. Well, I'm over fifty and I enjoyed it, but I'm a strange bird.
Anyhoo, nice work. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. This is the 3rd in a series. It is about me, The first 2 are all ready to be published. Each one is about stages in my life with specific pets. I am Bea. I'm glad you enjoyed it. There is more in my portfolio if you're interested.
Comment from aryr
An absolutely great continuation chapter, Liz. I really appreciate your narrative notes which was aimed at 4th to 6th grade for independent reading. I also appreciate your frequent mention of the Rainbow Bridge. It is rather important to cross over. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs! Merry Christmas and a happy New Years!!!
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
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An absolutely great continuation chapter, Liz. I really appreciate your narrative notes which was aimed at 4th to 6th grade for independent reading. I also appreciate your frequent mention of the Rainbow Bridge. It is rather important to cross over. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs! Merry Christmas and a happy New Years!!!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your lovely review. Joy to you & yours.
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Most welcome, Liz!
Comment from lyenochka
I like that you specified the age group of your target reader. With your characters as relatable animals, you cover a very adult topic of grieving and loss and the unexpected mood swings of grieving. Kids could find this helpful when going through loss themselves. I wasn't sure about using the word "crush" but knowing your age group, that works.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
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I like that you specified the age group of your target reader. With your characters as relatable animals, you cover a very adult topic of grieving and loss and the unexpected mood swings of grieving. Kids could find this helpful when going through loss themselves. I wasn't sure about using the word "crush" but knowing your age group, that works.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your supportive review. I'm glad you see the helpfulness for that age group.
Comment from Aussie
My dog is called Benny, a poodle mix. A sweet tale that I would put under Young Adult. Children would love this. When my Toby went to the Rainbow Bridge, I had never heard of this, now I know he waits for me. I loved your book chapter it has warmth, knowledge and explains death in a way that doesn't make the friend extra sad.
Blessings, Happy Christmas. Kay xx
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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My dog is called Benny, a poodle mix. A sweet tale that I would put under Young Adult. Children would love this. When my Toby went to the Rainbow Bridge, I had never heard of this, now I know he waits for me. I loved your book chapter it has warmth, knowledge and explains death in a way that doesn't make the friend extra sad.
Blessings, Happy Christmas. Kay xx
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your lovely review. I'm glad you appreciated my perspective.
Comment from Jay Squires
This story has a simple depth on many levels. Unfortunately, you know your characters so well in your mind that they are a part of you, and certain details of their relationship with one other can easily be missed by most readers. I realize, as I write this, that much may have been explained earlier, but when your story is told in chapters, you need some sort of index for new readers to jump aboard and not get lost. I really love all your characters for what they might become in my heart, but right now I only know part of them. I hope this makes sense to you, Liz. This can be such an amazing story -- one of those that we know is written for children of a particular age group, but that the life lessons, and the levels of alegory have the potential to take older minds to deeper levels as well. We just need a little help!
Liz, I hope you have a very special Christmas Holiday!
Jay
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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This story has a simple depth on many levels. Unfortunately, you know your characters so well in your mind that they are a part of you, and certain details of their relationship with one other can easily be missed by most readers. I realize, as I write this, that much may have been explained earlier, but when your story is told in chapters, you need some sort of index for new readers to jump aboard and not get lost. I really love all your characters for what they might become in my heart, but right now I only know part of them. I hope this makes sense to you, Liz. This can be such an amazing story -- one of those that we know is written for children of a particular age group, but that the life lessons, and the levels of alegory have the potential to take older minds to deeper levels as well. We just need a little help!
Liz, I hope you have a very special Christmas Holiday!
Jay
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Jay, Thank you for your supportive review. I'm glad you see the multi-leveled aspect. Much joy for you & yours.
Comment from Mariana Convery
I love animal- character stories. The theme is immediately apparent, dealing with death and lonliness, especially when our pets pass, it makes it even worse. I love your metaphor about feeling empty like an empty honey pot ð??¯. One thing I had a really hard time with is that there were just too many charachters to try and keep up with. It's important to visualize charachters and figuring out who's who. Other than that, cute story.
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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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I love animal- character stories. The theme is immediately apparent, dealing with death and lonliness, especially when our pets pass, it makes it even worse. I love your metaphor about feeling empty like an empty honey pot ð??¯. One thing I had a really hard time with is that there were just too many charachters to try and keep up with. It's important to visualize charachters and figuring out who's who. Other than that, cute story.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your effort at doing a review. This is the 3rd in a series. All of these characters were featured in Bea 1 and/or Bea 2. Now they've all passed on. The first were Bea the mom of Scruffles a Maine Coon cat and Sweet Puppy, a terrier mix. In Bea 2 the others were introduced. Now, in Bea 3, everyone has gone to the Rainbow Bridge. So as I did, Bea is beginning again to make friends. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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I figured that all the characters were introduced earlier. One thing I was also confused about was the "racoon" cat. Now that you said it's a Maine Coon cat, it makes more sense. Good luck with the story.
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The perspective comes from a bear who only learned a few terms & skill from her mom. Otherwise, she makes stuff up. lol
