Hatless
An encounter one warm day26 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Pat,
I enjoyed your 60 word dash. It isn't easy to tell a story with so few words. The vicar found you hatless, a big change from morning worship where you always wore your hat. He didn't realize that you wore your hat to the Community Center luncheon, but had taken it off to eat! So you fooled him. I'm the same way... though a man, I am seldom without my ball cap.
Congratulations on the win. It's always nice to come out on top, isn't it? Doesn't happen for me much. LOL.
Have a great day!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Hi Pat,
I enjoyed your 60 word dash. It isn't easy to tell a story with so few words. The vicar found you hatless, a big change from morning worship where you always wore your hat. He didn't realize that you wore your hat to the Community Center luncheon, but had taken it off to eat! So you fooled him. I'm the same way... though a man, I am seldom without my ball cap.
Congratulations on the win. It's always nice to come out on top, isn't it? Doesn't happen for me much. LOL.
Have a great day!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you found the story amusing.
Comment from jmdg1954
Well congrats on winning the contest. I just came across your post and found it comical. Why would one wear a hat in church?
I guess I'm a little bemused right about now.
Congrats once again.
Cheers. John
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Well congrats on winning the contest. I just came across your post and found it comical. Why would one wear a hat in church?
I guess I'm a little bemused right about now.
Congrats once again.
Cheers. John
Comment Written 26-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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It used to be traditional. Thank you.
Comment from Begin Again
Congratulations!
Hats (like our facial expressions) often camouflage the actual person beneath. So maybe the vicar was opening a door, telling you he appreciated the uncluttered side of you as well.
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Congratulations!
Hats (like our facial expressions) often camouflage the actual person beneath. So maybe the vicar was opening a door, telling you he appreciated the uncluttered side of you as well.
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 26-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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That is very perceptive. Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Did the vicar not like hats? At one time no woman would attend church without a hat but fashions change, you made me smile here, have a great day and congrats on your win, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2022
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Did the vicar not like hats? At one time no woman would attend church without a hat but fashions change, you made me smile here, have a great day and congrats on your win, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonderful entry for the 60 WORD DASH writing prompt contest.
Good word count and smooth flow easy to follow.
Excellent flash fiction.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2022
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Wonderful entry for the 60 WORD DASH writing prompt contest.
Good word count and smooth flow easy to follow.
Excellent flash fiction.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good 60-word dash entry. The story is clearly stated until the last few lines. Why is the speaker bemused by the vicar's comment? The text could be one or two sizes larger. A visual would enhance the presentation of your piece. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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This is a good 60-word dash entry. The story is clearly stated until the last few lines. Why is the speaker bemused by the vicar's comment? The text could be one or two sizes larger. A visual would enhance the presentation of your piece. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Hats are fashionable. But if you wear them down on your face it will hide your face. Staring at someone because you don't know them is embarrassing. Good thing he said something.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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Hats are fashionable. But if you wear them down on your face it will hide your face. Staring at someone because you don't know them is embarrassing. Good thing he said something.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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I hadn't thought of it like that. Thank you.
Comment from Bill Schott
This sixty-word story, Hatless, has the proper word count and gives an example of unexpected critiques for unknown offences which are neither eliminated nor were apt to be changed prior to the scene depicted
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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This sixty-word story, Hatless, has the proper word count and gives an example of unexpected critiques for unknown offences which are neither eliminated nor were apt to be changed prior to the scene depicted
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A curious incident which is capable of different interpretations! Did the vicar welcome having a better view of her face? Perhaps he liked meeting more informally?
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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A curious incident which is capable of different interpretations! Did the vicar welcome having a better view of her face? Perhaps he liked meeting more informally?
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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I had not looked on it like that. Thank you.
Comment from Soledadpaz
You paint a full picture with just a few words. I imagine Father David was glad to see the real you, relaxed, and laid back. A hat can be so formal, though it does make one look sharply dressed.
Sol
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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You paint a full picture with just a few words. I imagine Father David was glad to see the real you, relaxed, and laid back. A hat can be so formal, though it does make one look sharply dressed.
Sol
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much.
