The Best Time of Ohmie's Life
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Comment from LJbutterfly
I'm coming to this story after a lot has already happened. Parents who work for the CIA sounds intriguing. When I have time I'll go back to see what has taken place. I enjoyed this episode and Ohmie telling the story of the confiscated yacht.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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I'm coming to this story after a lot has already happened. Parents who work for the CIA sounds intriguing. When I have time I'll go back to see what has taken place. I enjoyed this episode and Ohmie telling the story of the confiscated yacht.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your review.
And yes, a lot has taken place.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for sharing another great chapter. It's always a pleasure to read your writing no matter what happens. You have me right in the action feeling like part of the story. Happy Holidays!
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thanks for sharing another great chapter. It's always a pleasure to read your writing no matter what happens. You have me right in the action feeling like part of the story. Happy Holidays!
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thank you. But be ready to duck.
Comment from Susan Newell
Wayne,
This chapter is a little more mellow-- a winding down, I suspect. I like the introduction of the grandparents and continued peeks into Ohmie's thoughts. The "one-legged dog" phrase really works. I'll be on stand-by for the wrap-up.
Sue
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Wayne,
This chapter is a little more mellow-- a winding down, I suspect. I like the introduction of the grandparents and continued peeks into Ohmie's thoughts. The "one-legged dog" phrase really works. I'll be on stand-by for the wrap-up.
Sue
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thank you, but hang on!
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Welcome. I'm hanging on with my fingernails.
Comment from lyenochka
I liked the reflection about many different languages in Europe vs. in the U.S. It really sounds like Ohmie has a good sense and acceptance about his short life span. It's good he could finally connect with his grandparents even getting a hug from his grandmother.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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I liked the reflection about many different languages in Europe vs. in the U.S. It really sounds like Ohmie has a good sense and acceptance about his short life span. It's good he could finally connect with his grandparents even getting a hug from his grandmother.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Hold on. All may not be as it seems.
Thank you for the review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
You finally use the line, "This was the best time of my life." Seeing that sentence gave this a feeling of being over soon.
Well, Ohmie is finally home and they had a nice time getting there. At least he had time with his parents in the end, and his parents will benefit from that as well.
It will be interesting to see what the narrative is now that they've returned home.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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You finally use the line, "This was the best time of my life." Seeing that sentence gave this a feeling of being over soon.
Well, Ohmie is finally home and they had a nice time getting there. At least he had time with his parents in the end, and his parents will benefit from that as well.
It will be interesting to see what the narrative is now that they've returned home.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Thank you. And thank you for catching the title that I finally got in there. (smiley face here)
Hang on for more action.
Comment from Wendy G
Sounds like his time is drawing near. Getting towards the end of the best time of his life, and it certainly has been exciting, as well as challenging and moving as they all learn poignantly to express their love for each other. Ohmie expresses himself with the realism and clever wit of a kid (well done!)
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Sounds like his time is drawing near. Getting towards the end of the best time of his life, and it certainly has been exciting, as well as challenging and moving as they all learn poignantly to express their love for each other. Ohmie expresses himself with the realism and clever wit of a kid (well done!)
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Thank you. That's high praise coming from an expert on teenage behavior.
Comment from karenina
As you well know I've been smitten with Ohmie wince I happened upon him mid-chapters. I LOVE the tone with which you serve up his expressions! Here's a young man, facing mortality and yet still wise-cracking and calling the shots of HIS life as best he can! "No mas!" Yes ~ this is how I feel. No more for Ohmie...still, against all odds I hope against hope he finds another chapter of light and life, and another, and one more after that.
The best sign of a good writer is his/her ability to connect with the reader. You do that in a straight-up, believable, no-nonsense, no "purple prose" kind of way.
So, I admit to getting my mind virtually tongue-tied with this passage:
"I saw Grandma frowning out of the corner of the corner of my eye. She wasn't frowning in my eye. From the corner of my eye, I saw her frowning just a little bit."
One or two too many "corners" for me, but if that's all I have to offer then cheers to you and write on my friend!
Karenina
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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As you well know I've been smitten with Ohmie wince I happened upon him mid-chapters. I LOVE the tone with which you serve up his expressions! Here's a young man, facing mortality and yet still wise-cracking and calling the shots of HIS life as best he can! "No mas!" Yes ~ this is how I feel. No more for Ohmie...still, against all odds I hope against hope he finds another chapter of light and life, and another, and one more after that.
The best sign of a good writer is his/her ability to connect with the reader. You do that in a straight-up, believable, no-nonsense, no "purple prose" kind of way.
So, I admit to getting my mind virtually tongue-tied with this passage:
"I saw Grandma frowning out of the corner of the corner of my eye. She wasn't frowning in my eye. From the corner of my eye, I saw her frowning just a little bit."
One or two too many "corners" for me, but if that's all I have to offer then cheers to you and write on my friend!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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too many! Thank you.
I edited not enough!
Thank you for a wonderful review.
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De nada....
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
An exciting journey for Ohmie on a confiscated Russian yacht. Interesting point about all the languages of Europe and how many you would need to master to travel across the continent. He is right, it helps to have English as a first language!
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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An exciting journey for Ohmie on a confiscated Russian yacht. Interesting point about all the languages of Europe and how many you would need to master to travel across the continent. He is right, it helps to have English as a first language!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you for the very nice review.
I couldn't imagine learning English as a second language.
Comment from irishauthorme
Wow. I went back and read chapter one, just to get the feel of the narrative, then I got hooked and read all the way to chapter 11!
Parts of your story sound pretty authentic and I am, retired law enforcement, which made me wonder?
Great, fast-moving story. Ohmie's pending death from cancer put an edge on the whole story, and great tension from Mom and Dad's precarious occupation.
Will read more and catch up.
irish
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Wow. I went back and read chapter one, just to get the feel of the narrative, then I got hooked and read all the way to chapter 11!
Parts of your story sound pretty authentic and I am, retired law enforcement, which made me wonder?
Great, fast-moving story. Ohmie's pending death from cancer put an edge on the whole story, and great tension from Mom and Dad's precarious occupation.
Will read more and catch up.
irish
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you so very much!
You are awesome!
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A simple, but interesting snippit. The flow is good. The images are clear. The dialogue is believable. The narrative stays on point. I see no grammar problems.
Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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A simple, but interesting snippit. The flow is good. The images are clear. The dialogue is believable. The narrative stays on point. I see no grammar problems.
Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Excellent review. Thank you.
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You are welcome.
