Random Rhyme and Petty Prose
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Run Through "a collection of phenomenally mundane work.
16 total reviews
Comment from Ginda Simpson
What a "bloody" nightmare. The horrible details of this man"s dream tell us change needs to happen, the sooner the better. I find that using a dream to tell us this is clever and works well.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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What a "bloody" nightmare. The horrible details of this man"s dream tell us change needs to happen, the sooner the better. I find that using a dream to tell us this is clever and works well.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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I thought the final line could leave the reader with a sense of choice.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Pretty gruesome but at the same time pretty clever. I did not see the ending coming leaving it open to interpretation.
Was Dave ream part of a dress rehearsal, or was it just a dream of wishful thinking?
Well done.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Pretty gruesome but at the same time pretty clever. I did not see the ending coming leaving it open to interpretation.
Was Dave ream part of a dress rehearsal, or was it just a dream of wishful thinking?
Well done.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Mary, for the great review. Bill
Comment from sunnilicious
Dave doesn't like his co-workers. That is a mentally sick dream. He should visit a therapist or find another place to work. I grew scared of him in that last paragraph. Dave popped a screw in himself. Well thought out story.
Happy Holidays
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Dave doesn't like his co-workers. That is a mentally sick dream. He should visit a therapist or find another place to work. I grew scared of him in that last paragraph. Dave popped a screw in himself. Well thought out story.
Happy Holidays
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thanks, Sunnilicious
Comment from eliz100
I enjoyed reading this story. The ending was quite a surprise. The build-up to the ending kept me on the edge of my seat. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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I enjoyed reading this story. The ending was quite a surprise. The build-up to the ending kept me on the edge of my seat. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Elizabeth
Comment from lyenochka
Oh no! The story started and ended with the same sentence. I hope it's in an infinite loop and it's always just a dream. We have enough of this kind of thing going on.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Oh no! The story started and ended with the same sentence. I hope it's in an infinite loop and it's always just a dream. We have enough of this kind of thing going on.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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I left out the contents of his pockets to allow that February 3rd would be happening next.
Comment from Spitfire
Seems Dave is rehearsing his plan while sitting in his car outside the building where he works. Excellent details on how he murdered each one. Evidently he's planning kill himself too. So familiar to the shootings that go on in this country although there seems to a lull right now.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Seems Dave is rehearsing his plan while sitting in his car outside the building where he works. Excellent details on how he murdered each one. Evidently he's planning kill himself too. So familiar to the shootings that go on in this country although there seems to a lull right now.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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I noted the lull and filled it, Shari
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Comment from Chrissy710
Well Bill it could go ways either his pockets were empty or he was checking to see if he still had the weapons of intent
Lol
I suppose we will find out ?
Vivid imagination though gruesome
Won't be joining a business with you yet ha ha
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Well Bill it could go ways either his pockets were empty or he was checking to see if he still had the weapons of intent
Lol
I suppose we will find out ?
Vivid imagination though gruesome
Won't be joining a business with you yet ha ha
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Chris
Comment from Earl Corp
It kind of sounds like dreams do come true and Dave is on his way to fulfill his. Good action which kept me riveted until the end. Very nice job.Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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It kind of sounds like dreams do come true and Dave is on his way to fulfill his. Good action which kept me riveted until the end. Very nice job.Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Thanks, Earl
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, Bill, this was harrowing to say the least. Where's the warning?
However, you did a good job with the theme. I thought it was
realm (fiction, I know), until he awoke from his dream. Then, he
seemed tom possibly intend to follow through with his dream in
real time.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Well, Bill, this was harrowing to say the least. Where's the warning?
However, you did a good job with the theme. I thought it was
realm (fiction, I know), until he awoke from his dream. Then, he
seemed tom possibly intend to follow through with his dream in
real time.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Maybe one of the others are dreaming?
Comment from Heather Knight
This is a lot of fun. I like the irony and how original the story is.
I also enjoyed the fast pace and the surprise ending.
Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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This is a lot of fun. I like the irony and how original the story is.
I also enjoyed the fast pace and the surprise ending.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Heather
