Lords Of The Glen
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Bullseye"A A new threat arises to the north.
6 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm sorry I've missed a few of your posts. My father-in-law passed away and I was unable to review. I'm trying to catch up and will attempt to go back and read. Thank you for understanding.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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I'm sorry I've missed a few of your posts. My father-in-law passed away and I was unable to review. I'm trying to catch up and will attempt to go back and read. Thank you for understanding.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Sorry for your loss. Sending healing thoughts and prayers to you and yours.
Comment from Malcolm Rothery
Well-written and well-imagined battle scenes. I got a real sense of fantasy in this chapter that I didn't quite get in the previous ones. The characters are very believable and the dialogue flows easily. Good job.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Well-written and well-imagined battle scenes. I got a real sense of fantasy in this chapter that I didn't quite get in the previous ones. The characters are very believable and the dialogue flows easily. Good job.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Thanks for hanging in! The thieves will play an interesting role in the battle for Port Turin!
Comment from Dr. Von
I like the structure you use to introduce new characters and new goals. This engages the reader's interest and maintains momentum. A solid addition to the story. This chapter gives the reader something to look forward to. Well-written.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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I like the structure you use to introduce new characters and new goals. This engages the reader's interest and maintains momentum. A solid addition to the story. This chapter gives the reader something to look forward to. Well-written.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Thank you Sir! I am glad that you are enjoying!
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You are welcome. Merry and Happy to you.
Comment from Ricky1024
A different chapter with new characters.
God know you must have killed off at least four on your last chapter
Maybe in the final one I can find on Goblin Meat loaf?
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This was another chapter well written rich in Theme and Imagery, great Flow, no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed Week.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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A different chapter with new characters.
God know you must have killed off at least four on your last chapter
Maybe in the final one I can find on Goblin Meat loaf?
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This was another chapter well written rich in Theme and Imagery, great Flow, no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed Week.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Thank you my friend. You are a blessing!
Comment from lancellot
This is a great chapter. Love the action and adventure. Even I wasn't sure if Lord Caspiat would live. I wouldn't be surprised if Caspiat take Icky to his woman. After she cleans up.
Kokor Village was about half a horse north of Keyorlock, which left about a horse and a half to patrol between Kokor Village and Hogarth Hills.
- I'll assume you wrote how long a horse or half a horse is somewhere.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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This is a great chapter. Love the action and adventure. Even I wasn't sure if Lord Caspiat would live. I wouldn't be surprised if Caspiat take Icky to his woman. After she cleans up.
Kokor Village was about half a horse north of Keyorlock, which left about a horse and a half to patrol between Kokor Village and Hogarth Hills.
- I'll assume you wrote how long a horse or half a horse is somewhere.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Thank you Sir! Yes the gorse measurement was explained. I appreciate you hanging in!
Comment from Ulla
Hi Douglas, I have obviously not followed the story, the main reason being that I'm not a great fan of fantasy writing. But I wanted to comment on this one part as I gave it a try and I found it very well written. The content is hard for me to comment on as I haven't followed the story. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Hi Douglas, I have obviously not followed the story, the main reason being that I'm not a great fan of fantasy writing. But I wanted to comment on this one part as I gave it a try and I found it very well written. The content is hard for me to comment on as I haven't followed the story. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Thank you for the peek! There aren?t a lot of fantasy fans on FS but still I try to pick off some editing tips here and there!
