The Best Time of Ohmie's Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Best Time of Ohmie's Life pt30"Dying of cancer, Ohmie learns his parents are spie
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Comment from Ricky1024
This is a review for a short story entitled, "Best Time of Ohmie's Life Pt.30"
This was about the main character Ohmie, and an, assassin, his hospital visit and a car chase.
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
My standard Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing and have a Blessed week.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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This is a review for a short story entitled, "Best Time of Ohmie's Life Pt.30"
This was about the main character Ohmie, and an, assassin, his hospital visit and a car chase.
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
My standard Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing and have a Blessed week.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Wendy G
Very exciting, but thanks to Ohmie being alert with his astute observations of the "doctor" they hasve managed to get away. Mme Benoir is now in danger too, but she is following the tradition of her family members by helping others in need. Looking forward to seeing the next chapter.
Wendy
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Very exciting, but thanks to Ohmie being alert with his astute observations of the "doctor" they hasve managed to get away. Mme Benoir is now in danger too, but she is following the tradition of her family members by helping others in need. Looking forward to seeing the next chapter.
Wendy
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you for the very nice review.
Comment from karenina
Again, pardon me because I came in late. However, I think the charm of this Ohmie character is that he IS over the top, exceeds all legal boundaries for clever observational skills, life expectation, "I Spy" like adventures and his "asides" such as:
"The man in front of her car with a pointed weapon suddenly dropped as if shot, which he was, by Dad."
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Not to mention: "Dad had a borrowed taxi a short distance away."
I'm totally bummed about this stage four lymphoma.
I guess I'm invested in your story since I'm off reading medicalnews.com where I was pleased to read that: "Overall, the 5-year survival rate for stage 4 Hodgkin lymphoma is 65 percent"
Yes. I'm looking up the survival rate, for a fictional character. Does this get me a member ship to your fan club? Please?
Smile.
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Again, pardon me because I came in late. However, I think the charm of this Ohmie character is that he IS over the top, exceeds all legal boundaries for clever observational skills, life expectation, "I Spy" like adventures and his "asides" such as:
"The man in front of her car with a pointed weapon suddenly dropped as if shot, which he was, by Dad."
and
Not to mention: "Dad had a borrowed taxi a short distance away."
I'm totally bummed about this stage four lymphoma.
I guess I'm invested in your story since I'm off reading medicalnews.com where I was pleased to read that: "Overall, the 5-year survival rate for stage 4 Hodgkin lymphoma is 65 percent"
Yes. I'm looking up the survival rate, for a fictional character. Does this get me a member ship to your fan club? Please?
Smile.
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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It does, indeed!
Thank you for a great review.
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Yay! I guess it's too soon to get the photo and membership pin?
:)
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Bonus points for your use of the word "reconnoitering" in this piece, lol!
Mme Benoir has been pulled into the drama, and her own life is in danger, but she has bonded with Ohmie and his parents and doesn't seem to mind. Brave woman.
Ohmie is having trouble finding a place to die! Not even the hospital is safe now, so I'm hoping they take him to some secluded place and the three of them can pass what's left of his time alone together.
Well-told chapter, and I couldn't find one single spag! Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Bonus points for your use of the word "reconnoitering" in this piece, lol!
Mme Benoir has been pulled into the drama, and her own life is in danger, but she has bonded with Ohmie and his parents and doesn't seem to mind. Brave woman.
Ohmie is having trouble finding a place to die! Not even the hospital is safe now, so I'm hoping they take him to some secluded place and the three of them can pass what's left of his time alone together.
Well-told chapter, and I couldn't find one single spag! Excellent writing.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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yay!!!
Thank you for the great review!
Comment from royowen
What an exciting episode Wayne, much action with mum dispensing a supposed doctor, but clearly not, and dumping hi in the bathroom. But dad turns up and lots of action proceeds, but they escape, relatively unscathed, beautifully written My friend, exciting stuff, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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What an exciting episode Wayne, much action with mum dispensing a supposed doctor, but clearly not, and dumping hi in the bathroom. But dad turns up and lots of action proceeds, but they escape, relatively unscathed, beautifully written My friend, exciting stuff, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you for a great review!
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Well done
Comment from Susan Newell
Wayne,
I'm wondering just how long you can extend Ohmie's life and maintain interest in the convoluted plots. Good chapter. Ohmie picking up on the recon man and the dispatching of the same by his mother was entertaining. One little note.
Sue
We'll have Your Ohmie and the wig near the reception -- your? (Lower case for consistency.)
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Wayne,
I'm wondering just how long you can extend Ohmie's life and maintain interest in the convoluted plots. Good chapter. Ohmie picking up on the recon man and the dispatching of the same by his mother was entertaining. One little note.
Sue
We'll have Your Ohmie and the wig near the reception -- your? (Lower case for consistency.)
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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WHO CAPITALIZED IT??????
I really question FanStory sometimes.
Thank you.
Yes, Ohmie stretches reality a bit.
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Gremlins!
Comment from papa55mike
Well they got him out of the hospital but what lies ahead for Ohmie? Tun in next chapter to see. What a wonderfully written chapter. Best of luck with your book!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Well they got him out of the hospital but what lies ahead for Ohmie? Tun in next chapter to see. What a wonderfully written chapter. Best of luck with your book!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you for a great review.
