Heart Crafted Poems - 2023
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Love at First Sight"Musing of an old man
19 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
This is really beautiful, a lovely testimony to true and everlasting love. I like love poems that offer true feelings and this one did just that. It felt real to me. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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This is really beautiful, a lovely testimony to true and everlasting love. I like love poems that offer true feelings and this one did just that. It felt real to me. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
An old-fashioned love poem and no one can argue with that. It has great rhyming and flow. This is a super entry for the love poem contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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An old-fashioned love poem and no one can argue with that. It has great rhyming and flow. This is a super entry for the love poem contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I've often wondered if there truly is such thing as love at first sight. But so many times being told to trust our instincts, I guess it's a definite probability. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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I've often wondered if there truly is such thing as love at first sight. But so many times being told to trust our instincts, I guess it's a definite probability. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Ric rare but possible.
Comment from JT traveller
"Amen", to finish a poem. Interesting choice of word. I can sense your deep love for your wife and that is a magical and beautiful thing. Thankyou for sharing your thoughts and life experience.
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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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"Amen", to finish a poem. Interesting choice of word. I can sense your deep love for your wife and that is a magical and beautiful thing. Thankyou for sharing your thoughts and life experience.
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Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Thank you. I know that she is a gift and I thank God for such a life companion who walks in union with me.
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Comment from Bill Schott
This sonnet, Love at First Sight, has the proper formatting and gives assurance to the listener that love is real, affirmed each day, and will be known through eternity. Nice.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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This sonnet, Love at First Sight, has the proper formatting and gives assurance to the listener that love is real, affirmed each day, and will be known through eternity. Nice.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Thanks Bill
Comment from Celyn
This is a beautiful love poem in sonnet form - well done. The rhythm is good throughout and so is the rhyming. The only thing I would change is that you have used stroll twice - once in the first stanza and once in the second. I would have picked a different word so as not to repeat myself.
Good luck with it
Celyn
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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This is a beautiful love poem in sonnet form - well done. The rhythm is good throughout and so is the rhyming. The only thing I would change is that you have used stroll twice - once in the first stanza and once in the second. I would have picked a different word so as not to repeat myself.
Good luck with it
Celyn
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Celyn, thanks
Comment from Sugarray77
A very lovely sonnet! Really!! Your love and devotion are beautifully written... but, I would mention that in the third stanza, fourth line the verb seems to be wrong... would you mean ... 'have' led my way? Just an observation. Hugs!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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A very lovely sonnet! Really!! Your love and devotion are beautifully written... but, I would mention that in the third stanza, fourth line the verb seems to be wrong... would you mean ... 'have' led my way? Just an observation. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Thanks I am thinking on this... thanks I perhaps will hange this to brought my way Smiles back, my friend!
Comment from Karyn2
A lovely poem that describes a deep an intimate love that stretched from the moment of first glance though the pathways of life and marriage. A love that is so strong that even as the poet may one day find eternal rest, his bride will always be on his heart being led to him. A beautifully structured poem, true to its form and heartfelt.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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A lovely poem that describes a deep an intimate love that stretched from the moment of first glance though the pathways of life and marriage. A love that is so strong that even as the poet may one day find eternal rest, his bride will always be on his heart being led to him. A beautifully structured poem, true to its form and heartfelt.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Karyn, thanks thank for your validation.
Comment from Moonbeams Musings 55
This is so incredibly romantic. Your writing reminds me of the old world poets. I am a true believer of love at first site. Your words and rhyme flow so smoothly.This Is a great tribute to true love. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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This is so incredibly romantic. Your writing reminds me of the old world poets. I am a true believer of love at first site. Your words and rhyme flow so smoothly.This Is a great tribute to true love. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Thank you your gift of validation is very soothing, I am richly blessed.
Comment from Cathy M
Indeed, love is ever changing and growing, and you show this with the poem very well. If you do decide to rework this poem a little, I would look at your last stanza. Because of the rules it sounds good, but I think it would have more impact if changed up a little. The at once; indeed, again just didn't feel a progression with the feelings. But for the contest it does very well.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Indeed, love is ever changing and growing, and you show this with the poem very well. If you do decide to rework this poem a little, I would look at your last stanza. Because of the rules it sounds good, but I think it would have more impact if changed up a little. The at once; indeed, again just didn't feel a progression with the feelings. But for the contest it does very well.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Thank for your thoughts Cathy.
