Lords Of The Glen
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Now We Take Your Heads"A A new threat arises to the north.
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
You are constant with the great action and descriptions. I can't believe all these horrible creatures attacking. This is good writing.
yorg (don't know what this is
(Omit 'that' from the following.) Frothy Stump looked about and realized that he only had three dwarves left, & army encircled around Frontier Fortress and knew that they would be coming soon. & He had been shot through the hole that he had been peeking out of. & Now his crew was firing rock after rock at the formations of goblins that surrounded the fortress, & The dragon followed that up by sweeping the tower clean with his deadly spiked ball tail, knocking off the remaining defenders & He would rather have died at his father's side, but knew that they could still do some damage to the enemy from this high position. & also after 'knew' you can omit 'that'
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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You are constant with the great action and descriptions. I can't believe all these horrible creatures attacking. This is good writing.
yorg (don't know what this is
(Omit 'that' from the following.) Frothy Stump looked about and realized that he only had three dwarves left, & army encircled around Frontier Fortress and knew that they would be coming soon. & He had been shot through the hole that he had been peeking out of. & Now his crew was firing rock after rock at the formations of goblins that surrounded the fortress, & The dragon followed that up by sweeping the tower clean with his deadly spiked ball tail, knocking off the remaining defenders & He would rather have died at his father's side, but knew that they could still do some damage to the enemy from this high position. & also after 'knew' you can omit 'that'
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much my friend! The ugly THAT monster has reared its ugly head again. I appreciate you.
Comment from Dr. Von
The tight weave you have written in this chapter is worthy of writing. It flows from battle scene to battle scene with clear connections as the characters battle and win only to engage and lose. Your writing skills keep the story moving and balanced. Thank you for your committed vision. This is what makes it fun to read.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2022
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The tight weave you have written in this chapter is worthy of writing. It flows from battle scene to battle scene with clear connections as the characters battle and win only to engage and lose. Your writing skills keep the story moving and balanced. Thank you for your committed vision. This is what makes it fun to read.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2022
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Thank you my friend! Hope is coming to the story-line!
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You are very welcome. Yes!
Comment from prettybluebirds
I wish somebody or something would come along and kill all those horrible goblins. Your story sure is a bloody one, but it seems like the wrong side is losing. I hope things improve soon.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2022
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I wish somebody or something would come along and kill all those horrible goblins. Your story sure is a bloody one, but it seems like the wrong side is losing. I hope things improve soon.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2022
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Hope is coming! Its always darkest before the dawn.
