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dark shapes at night

Senryu-Lune (on cold moonless nights)

5 total reviews 
Comment from Bill Schott
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This 5-7-5, Dark Shapes at Midnight, has the proper formatting and takes the readers to the scary silhouettes of bare trees in the dark winter, which will blossom again to friendly arbor. Nice.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2023

reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
    Bill,

    I actually think this is a very good poem. Your review verified the same.

    Thanks!

    Mark
Comment from tempeste
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Ciao poet!

I gave you your 12th vote!

Stripped from their foliage, I think trees even in Winter have beauty .. at night though, they do appear menacing .. even haunting at times while the wind is howling.

I particularly like your closing line.




 Comment Written 29-Dec-2022

reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
    Thank you for your vote Tempeste.

    I thought this was a good effort and for the moment it looks good for a podium placement.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
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Poetry about nature is always fascinating. Yours is too, because, in three short lines, you create a mood, an atmosphere and stirs our feelings.
Great poem!!

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2022

reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
    Thanks Mario for your confidence in my contest entry. My favored poetry style is typically three lines and 5-7-5 syllable counts.
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and a good comparison
between the trees and "dark skeletons."
-Good description of the "moonless night"
and a very good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2022

reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
    Pam,

    Thanks for such an encouraging review!
reply by Pam (respa) on 27-Dec-2022
    You are very welcome.
Comment from Mariana Convery
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Great theme. Yes, those Erie trees when the leaves are missing can be quite frightful. You did a good job breaking up your lines with the 5-7-5 syllable count.

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2022

reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
    Mariana,

    THANK YOU for such a nice review. In the winter, one can see this scene as we walk through the woods (-;