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Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. The package is perfect, the artwork, the colored font, and the words. I know from another poem a group of crows are called a murder, but I am struggling with that. LOL

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
    LoL my grandson loves calling crows-- murder. He is 5 yrs old. Sometimes he screams at them that they are a murder.. LoL

    Thank you very much. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.

    Gypsy Word Weaver ❤
    "handover the chocolate and nobody gets hurt" - anonymous
Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your haiku 4/5/4 - interesting concept- a murder of crows were all roadkill- definitely would be a red sunset- bad day to be a crow- good picture describing- Good job AP

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
    Thank you very much. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.

    Gypsy Word Weaver ❤
    "handover the chocolate and nobody gets hurt" - anonymous
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
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What a stunning presentation.
All the stated requirements for a Haiku are perfectly presented.
Thanks for attaching the requirements for this form.
Definitely worthy of a six so I've attached a virtual for you.
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Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
    Thank you very much for your time and kind review.

    Gypsy
reply by Shirley E Kennedy on 04-Dec-2022
    You're welcome
Comment from lyenochka
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Oh, that is a well known group name. Dean used to use the "murder of crows" phrase a lot in his poems. You made it even more ominous with the "blood red sunset" that "bleeds over the roadkill." Those crows will clean up!

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
    Yes, that's how I learned a group of crows is a murder. I love it but I try to not over do it. Classic Haiku masters wrote about crows often. They are intriguing and very smart birds. We have a lot around here. I told Atticus the group name, and when we go on walks he will scream at them, "you are a murder" haha. Atticus is very funny. Yesterday I was watching him while his mom and dad went on a date and when a package delivery man came to the door, he told him his mom and dad went on a date LoL his mom and dad are professional comedians so he got it from them.

    Thank you very much, big sister.

    Love,

    Marival ❤️

reply by lyenochka on 03-Dec-2022
    Atticus is so gifted! He has his verbal gift from you and his parents! 💖💖
Comment from RodG
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Gypsy, I really think Poe would have liked this haiku. It has several gothic elements: the bleeding sunset, the road kill, and that "murder" of crows. I also really like picture you chose illustrate this poem. Rod

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
    Thank you very much, Rod. I hope you have a wonderful weekend.

    Gypsy Word Weaver
Comment from royowen
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Yes we have so many roadkill here, all sorts of wild animals, kangaroos, wallabies, foxes, even koalas, it's carnage, and we do have crows too. Beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
    Thank you very much, Roy. I hope you have a wonderful weekend.

    Gypsy Word Weaver
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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I love the term murder of crows, they murder my peace, I murder their piece. You did an excellent poetic job of quieting their disruptive noise. Thankyou. Kate xx

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
    Thank you very much, Kate. I hope you have a wonderful weekend.

    Gypsy Word Weaver
Comment from Karyn2
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Another stunning contribution! The strong imaragery of red, blood, murder and death stands stark against the almost humorous word choice "roadkill". Love the creative play on murder of crows. Clever! Excellent presentation.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
    G'day, Karyn, thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. Hugs!

    Gypsy Word Weaver
    "Every sunset brings the promise of a new dawn." - Ralph Waldo Emerson
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Gypsy,

A very nice presentation for your Haiku club entry. Do like your connection with the crow collective and your phrasing in your first two lines. Of course, I like your b- and r-letter alliterative flourishes.

Mark

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
    Hello, Mark, thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. Have a nice weekend.

    Gypsy Word Weaver
    "Every sunset brings the promise of a new dawn." - Ralph Waldo Emerson