Lords Of The Glen
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Dragon Flesh"A A new threat arises to the north.
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Comment from Dr. Von
The vivid descriptions of the dragons and the hard-fought battles within the fortress leave the reader breathless. The storyline in this chapter is amazing. Your writing is sharp. Every paragraph is a solid step in this brilliant saga. Your pace is steady. The transitions between battles and characters and outcomes are maintained well. Congratulations on your talented weaving.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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The vivid descriptions of the dragons and the hard-fought battles within the fortress leave the reader breathless. The storyline in this chapter is amazing. Your writing is sharp. Every paragraph is a solid step in this brilliant saga. Your pace is steady. The transitions between battles and characters and outcomes are maintained well. Congratulations on your talented weaving.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Thank you, my Texan friend. Your words and kindness are refreshing!
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You are very welcome my friend. Enjoy the weekend.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
The Frontier Fortress is in trouble. The Red Dragon did it's job and now the goblins are entering. This isn't good. Once the again the description and the action were well written.
"Yes, but that doesn't mean I relished the thought that I may very well end up in the creature's belly," (omit 'that')
"Come to me foul dragon!" (comma after 'me')
Jayden swore that he could see a smile on the brown dragon's snarled lips while it flew away. (omit 'that')
Even as he ran, he realized that his position was basically defenseless without the ballista. & Jayden yelled back, realizing that her fire breath was getting weaker, even though it was still starting fires. & King Quaid looked towards the walls and realized that his son was right. (omit 'that')
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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The Frontier Fortress is in trouble. The Red Dragon did it's job and now the goblins are entering. This isn't good. Once the again the description and the action were well written.
"Yes, but that doesn't mean I relished the thought that I may very well end up in the creature's belly," (omit 'that')
"Come to me foul dragon!" (comma after 'me')
Jayden swore that he could see a smile on the brown dragon's snarled lips while it flew away. (omit 'that')
Even as he ran, he realized that his position was basically defenseless without the ballista. & Jayden yelled back, realizing that her fire breath was getting weaker, even though it was still starting fires. & King Quaid looked towards the walls and realized that his son was right. (omit 'that')
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Barbara. I nominated you because you have been a big help! Much appreciated, my friend.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The tension is maintained through most of the chapter and the reader awaits the climax. However, the pace slackens in one or two places where the attacks of the dragons become a little repetitive. It is very much a genre piece and would appeal to 'Lord of the Rings' fans.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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The tension is maintained through most of the chapter and the reader awaits the climax. However, the pace slackens in one or two places where the attacks of the dragons become a little repetitive. It is very much a genre piece and would appeal to 'Lord of the Rings' fans.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Thank you Sarah. I appreciate your review!
Comment from Ricky1024
This Chapter Entitled,
"Dragon Flesh"
Is exactly as it appears.
(Basically all Dragon Battles.
Rich in Theme and Imagery it also read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed weekend.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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This Chapter Entitled,
"Dragon Flesh"
Is exactly as it appears.
(Basically all Dragon Battles.
Rich in Theme and Imagery it also read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed weekend.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Thank you Sir!
