Cheers
A ritual with a loved one gone.16 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a lovely way to celebrate a life lived well. Only someone who made your life special would deserve such thoughtfulness. You are very fortunate to have had someone so special in your life. You have done a good job inviting us into your memory meeting.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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This is a lovely way to celebrate a life lived well. Only someone who made your life special would deserve such thoughtfulness. You are very fortunate to have had someone so special in your life. You have done a good job inviting us into your memory meeting.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Carol,
Thanks for taking the time to review my contest entry. Yes he did makemy life special. Please take care and have a wonderful Christmas and New Year.
Barry Penfold.
Comment from jessizero
I agree that memories can be so real. Your story of a ritual with a departed loved one was beautiful and sad. Thank you for sharing this, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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I agree that memories can be so real. Your story of a ritual with a departed loved one was beautiful and sad. Thank you for sharing this, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my contest entry. It is sad but great to be able to remember them in this way. We will have a couple of whiskies over the Christmas period . You take care and have a wonderful Christmas and New Year.
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Olivanne Marsh
Awesome picture painted including the memory in just 100 words. I am so impressed. It reads like a poem too, have you read it aloud? It is poetic. Has such a natural rhythm and rhyme. Good luck in the contest. I am sure there are little editing tweaks you could use that would make it even better, but honestly I don't see them, I took so much pleasure in reading it.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Awesome picture painted including the memory in just 100 words. I am so impressed. It reads like a poem too, have you read it aloud? It is poetic. Has such a natural rhythm and rhyme. Good luck in the contest. I am sure there are little editing tweaks you could use that would make it even better, but honestly I don't see them, I took so much pleasure in reading it.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Olivanne,
Glad you enjoyed the story. Yes it is poem like for sure. Was not intended to go that way. Just happened. Maybe it was because I have been writing quite a bit more poetry lately.
Thanks for the review and please take care over Christmas and the New Year.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You draw the reader in as you keep us in mystery in the first paragraph. and you continue to weave a mysterious air: "You would think that there is no one else in the other chair," This has a great ending leaving projection to the reader. So much more I could say, but this is enough.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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You draw the reader in as you keep us in mystery in the first paragraph. and you continue to weave a mysterious air: "You would think that there is no one else in the other chair," This has a great ending leaving projection to the reader. So much more I could say, but this is enough.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thanks Liz. Glad you took the time to review my entry. Lets see how it goes. Please take care and have a safe and Merry Christmas.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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The best to you & yours
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Your carefully selected words create a little mystery and a feeling that something good is about to happen. And then, you delight inthe memories of your son who is so near in spirit. Well done. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Your carefully selected words create a little mystery and a feeling that something good is about to happen. And then, you delight inthe memories of your son who is so near in spirit. Well done. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Ginda, ( what an interesting name )
Thanks for taking timeto read and review my contest entry. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes it does bring back memories. You have a great day and a safe and merry Christmas.
Barry Penfold
Comment from susand3022
Hi Barry,
This is such a sweet Flash. I know I feel my mom and sister around me all the time. I can't decide if my sister is encouraging me or telling me, as usual, that I'm not going anywhere with this.
We all have our rituals and feel our loved ones close.
Susan :)
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2022
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Hi Barry,
This is such a sweet Flash. I know I feel my mom and sister around me all the time. I can't decide if my sister is encouraging me or telling me, as usual, that I'm not going anywhere with this.
We all have our rituals and feel our loved ones close.
Susan :)
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2022
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Susan,
Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my contest flash. Glad you enjoyed it and yes we all have our rituals re loved ones no longer with us. You take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry .
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A story told very succinctly and suited to the festive season approaching!
Each paragraph in turn follows the form: introduction, development and a happy,positive conclusion!
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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A story told very succinctly and suited to the festive season approaching!
Each paragraph in turn follows the form: introduction, development and a happy,positive conclusion!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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Thanks Sarah for taking the time to read and review my contest entry.
Glad you enjoyed it. Please take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold
Comment from Mary Shifman
I think flash fiction is something of a challenge but you've managed it very well. This is a touching ritual and one that I can see myself engaging in. I think I will give it a try.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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I think flash fiction is something of a challenge but you've managed it very well. This is a touching ritual and one that I can see myself engaging in. I think I will give it a try.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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Mary,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my contest entry. I can assure you the ritual is helpful. Take care and have a great day.
Barry Penfold.
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You are welcome. I am going to do it. Thanks so much for the idea.
Comment from Thomas Blanks
Barry,
I counted seven places in your story where you do not have a space after a comma or a period. I suggest you take a look before the contest.
Regards,
Thomas
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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Barry,
I counted seven places in your story where you do not have a space after a comma or a period. I suggest you take a look before the contest.
Regards,
Thomas
Comment Written 04-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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Thomas,
Thanks for the great review and for your helpful suggestion. I will get to work on that very soon.
Have a great day.
Barry Penfold
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Remembering those who can no longer take a drink with us is sad and melancholy and I drink to my husband every year as his seat is empty at the table, a poignant write Barry, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Remembering those who can no longer take a drink with us is sad and melancholy and I drink to my husband every year as his seat is empty at the table, a poignant write Barry, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Dolly,
Thanks for the review and so sorry for your loss. My Dad passed away almost 6 years ago at 93. The ritual I describe in my story helps bring him back just for a bit. You would know how that is.
Cheers and keep smiling and writing.
Barry.
