Big City, Big Dreams
That may never come true10 total reviews
Comment from bob cullen
Is this a true story? It really does prompt so many questions. Did Johhny ever score a recording contract or is he like so many Fanstorians still awaiting the call from an agent.
This was well-written. It left the reader wanting more. Congratulations on winning the Phrase Maze competition.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023
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Is this a true story? It really does prompt so many questions. Did Johhny ever score a recording contract or is he like so many Fanstorians still awaiting the call from an agent.
This was well-written. It left the reader wanting more. Congratulations on winning the Phrase Maze competition.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023
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Thank you for this great review. Not a true story, but representative of a lot of people who struggle to make it to fame. I appreciate you reading my poem. :)
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Oh my goodness! You took on this most challenging writing and did and extraordinary job with it! This is very creative and clearly flowed from your imagination to the final product. It looks as if you've won this contest. Well, of course you did! It was fun to read and review!
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Oh my goodness! You took on this most challenging writing and did and extraordinary job with it! This is very creative and clearly flowed from your imagination to the final product. It looks as if you've won this contest. Well, of course you did! It was fun to read and review!
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thanks so much for this great review. :)
Comment from RodG
I am impressed with HOW you met the requirements of this contest and the NARRATIVE itself. You characterize Johnny Gage very well and even evoke our sympathy for him. We hope he someday achieves his dreams. Congrats on your win! Rod
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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I am impressed with HOW you met the requirements of this contest and the NARRATIVE itself. You characterize Johnny Gage very well and even evoke our sympathy for him. We hope he someday achieves his dreams. Congrats on your win! Rod
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thanks, I really appreciate you reading my poem. :)
Comment from Thomas Blanks
This narrative poem used all of the required words for the prompt. While rhyming poems seem to have gone out of style, I have a preference for them. I guess I am a dinosaur. I think your poem was the best of the ones I reviewed.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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This narrative poem used all of the required words for the prompt. While rhyming poems seem to have gone out of style, I have a preference for them. I guess I am a dinosaur. I think your poem was the best of the ones I reviewed.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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Thank you for this nice review and your kind words. Have a great day. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, what sort of restaurant is that with cockroaches running about! Your short story included all the odd words, but I didn't catch the words: (Bigfoot Lives)? You might want to include them for the contest, good luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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Oh my goodness, what sort of restaurant is that with cockroaches running about! Your short story included all the odd words, but I didn't catch the words: (Bigfoot Lives)? You might want to include them for the contest, good luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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Thanks for the nice review. That line is actually there, as a news story that he sees on the cafe TV. Thanks again. :)
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry to this contest. The text is a great size. The rhyme scheme is okay. It could be a bit better. The message of the poem makes sense, and you integrated the five required phrases well. The weakest verse is your last one. I would drop the first line down one space for better balance in your poem box. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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This is a good entry to this contest. The text is a great size. The rhyme scheme is okay. It could be a bit better. The message of the poem makes sense, and you integrated the five required phrases well. The weakest verse is your last one. I would drop the first line down one space for better balance in your poem box. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem and for this thoughtful review. :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from royowen
One can't help but like Johnny, a pragmatic soul, fulfilling his needs in life, he lives it the best way he knows how, excepts his weaknesses, (doesn't advertise them though) much like a youthful me. Fantastic post my friend, a great free verse. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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One can't help but like Johnny, a pragmatic soul, fulfilling his needs in life, he lives it the best way he knows how, excepts his weaknesses, (doesn't advertise them though) much like a youthful me. Fantastic post my friend, a great free verse. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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Thanks for reading my poem and for this nice review. ;)
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Most welcome
Comment from Karyn2
This is one of the best ones I've read attempting to incorporate all the prompts. Congratulations on using the prompts in a way that wasn't forced or out of place while maintaining clear character and plot development.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2022
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This is one of the best ones I've read attempting to incorporate all the prompts. Congratulations on using the prompts in a way that wasn't forced or out of place while maintaining clear character and plot development.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2022
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Thank you, I'm thrilled by this positive review. I really struggled with slime time...hahaha. Thanks again. :)
Comment from WriterHeather
Oh my this is sad. But you have done an amazing job of incorporating these tough phrases. The read is not clunky or awkward! Excellent job! Thanks for Sharing!
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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Oh my this is sad. But you have done an amazing job of incorporating these tough phrases. The read is not clunky or awkward! Excellent job! Thanks for Sharing!
Comment Written 28-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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Thank you for this amazing review, it's much appreciated. :)
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have done a great job with the writing prompt. Those were some difficult words to put all in one story. Your artwork is perfect and compliments the writing. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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You have done a great job with the writing prompt. Those were some difficult words to put all in one story. Your artwork is perfect and compliments the writing. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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Thank you, I appreciate this very nice review. :)
