Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What a monster Alan is; glad they found Alexandra safe, even though she was hurt somewhat. Could there be prison or jail time for such an evil person? Perhaps? Your story has lots of suspense in it!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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What a monster Alan is; glad they found Alexandra safe, even though she was hurt somewhat. Could there be prison or jail time for such an evil person? Perhaps? Your story has lots of suspense in it!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from JoannaN
This is a valuable part of the story. There are so many women falling victim to domestic abuse, it is great that such topic appears in your story.
Please stay safe and have a good week.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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This is a valuable part of the story. There are so many women falling victim to domestic abuse, it is great that such topic appears in your story.
Please stay safe and have a good week.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Frank Malley
I've come to this story in medias res, but it still read easily and it quickly engaged me. In addition, it contained details to the refresh and clarify characters during a first encounter with a chapter. The plot components emerged very functionally, and even in this brief piece, I acquired a sense of good guys and bad guy. I guess I hungered a little for some visual descriptions of people, dogs, horses, and location. But I enjoyed the chapter, and finished reading with an itch to know more.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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I've come to this story in medias res, but it still read easily and it quickly engaged me. In addition, it contained details to the refresh and clarify characters during a first encounter with a chapter. The plot components emerged very functionally, and even in this brief piece, I acquired a sense of good guys and bad guy. I guess I hungered a little for some visual descriptions of people, dogs, horses, and location. But I enjoyed the chapter, and finished reading with an itch to know more.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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I give descriptions as needed. These descriptions were given much earlier. Sorry, about that. It is chapter 23, if I repeat them, then the story would be too long.
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It's wonderful to meet a flawless writer. Be well. Frank Malley
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Who is the administrator of need? He or she might be a worthy source of mandatory components. I'm off to a meeting of snootery standards - things have gotten so shoddy.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. I did not look at the picture before I read the story, but it sure does fit. You surprised me with Allan coming back. I am really looking forward to the next chapter. I do not see any room for improvement.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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This is another excellent chapter. I did not look at the picture before I read the story, but it sure does fit. You surprised me with Allan coming back. I am really looking forward to the next chapter. I do not see any room for improvement.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and the support.
Comment from Ulla
This is a great chapter, Barbara. I just wonder how Alan managed.to getting to her. I'll have to wait until next week, won't I?
Now it's been another bad time for my brother and family. I just can't believe it. So no new chapter to the Fisherman. Ullaxx
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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This is a great chapter, Barbara. I just wonder how Alan managed.to getting to her. I'll have to wait until next week, won't I?
Now it's been another bad time for my brother and family. I just can't believe it. So no new chapter to the Fisherman. Ullaxx
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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DARN!! I will miss your writing but understand. I am praying as I write. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Here we go! Action!
He, again, studied the sky. - I don't think these commas are necessary.
"We'll discuss it later." - This sounds rather cold, more like father to daughter.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Here we go! Action!
He, again, studied the sky. - I don't think these commas are necessary.
"We'll discuss it later." - This sounds rather cold, more like father to daughter.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I didn't have the comma's there, but was told to put them in. I'll wait and see what others say.
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Prob'ly not technically wrong, but smoother without. (I think) lol
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, this is a well written chapter. Your style is very evident here and Alan behavior fits with his purpose is in the story. Everything is going just as they should in this type of story. I have no questions. Good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Hmm, this is a well written chapter. Your style is very evident here and Alan behavior fits with his purpose is in the story. Everything is going just as they should in this type of story. I have no questions. Good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
Mr. Griffin's bad times are about to get a great deal more difficult. I just hope that Cord doe not kill him. I am sure he will want to. Greed is such a corrosive element, it will cause men of normal conscience to act like monsters in the pursuit of things they have not earned. I fear Alan Griffin has bitten off much more than he will be able to chew, especially after he has been punched in the mouth by an angry and vengeful Cordero.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Mr. Griffin's bad times are about to get a great deal more difficult. I just hope that Cord doe not kill him. I am sure he will want to. Greed is such a corrosive element, it will cause men of normal conscience to act like monsters in the pursuit of things they have not earned. I fear Alan Griffin has bitten off much more than he will be able to chew, especially after he has been punched in the mouth by an angry and vengeful Cordero.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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It gets interesting from here on. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The story advanced well in this chapter, but I think it still needs a little tweak. eg remember serial reading: I have no idea when Thursday is relative to previous post. Grammar is a bit dodgy from time to time - She pressed against a tree trunk to help stand = telegraph style. And style chops around a bit making for a rocky ride where it maybe shouldn't be. Kate xx
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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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The story advanced well in this chapter, but I think it still needs a little tweak. eg remember serial reading: I have no idea when Thursday is relative to previous post. Grammar is a bit dodgy from time to time - She pressed against a tree trunk to help stand = telegraph style. And style chops around a bit making for a rocky ride where it maybe shouldn't be. Kate xx
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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The previous post was Wednesday, it's said it in the previous post. I added the missing word 'to help herself stand. Thank you for the kind review.
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I have read 15 stories just so far today. Such details cannot stay in mind, and I refuse to go back to previous post to look for them... I said, it's a problem of the serial posting/reading system, but the onus is on the writer to fix it, not to ask the reader to re-read. That would mean I could only read 50% of my current crop. K
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Excuse me, but I never asked or suggested that you go back and reread any posts. I simply stated that it was there. I am sorry for the misunderstanding.
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sorry too for same. K
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was amazing, Barbara! I hope he gets hold of Alan and gives him what for! That was one terrorising scene, well done on the writing of it. I doubt she thought Alan would ever come out to the farm. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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That was amazing, Barbara! I hope he gets hold of Alan and gives him what for! That was one terrorising scene, well done on the writing of it. I doubt she thought Alan would ever come out to the farm. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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She has no idea how Alan found her. Thank you for the kind review. I just read your latest post. GREAT JOB!!
