Comment from jmdg1954

Exceptional

I'm at a loss for words so I'll let the six stars speak for themselves.

Myself, March 14, 1981 we lost our first born 45 minutes into her precious life. That little angel fought those minutes but the meconium aspiration overwhelmed her. I did get a chance to hold her although briefly and to this day I still can feel her tiny body in my arms.

God bless you and your family. John

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022

Thanks and even though many years have now passed.
Even though so long ago.
The thought and memory will never erase.
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September 30th, 1985.
The last of five children.
Dana Alayse and this one would have been stillborn if I did not alert the hospital.
Staff to the fact the heartbeat was going backwards too quickly.
From 160 down to 90.
And, unfortunately the cord was wrapped twice around my youngest daughter's neck.
Yes, but fortunately they were able to react in time and save her life.
As for your situation, my deepest condolences.
Doctor Ricky1024

Comment from Sarah Das Gupta

Good

An ambitious piece of work, especially in poetic form. It covers some of the most philosophical aspects of faith and resurrection which are very difficult to express through rhyme and metre. A moving poem, nevertheless.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022

Thanks for your review.
Doctor Ricky1024

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

A wonderful tribute not only to God but to your relationship to Him. You have a gift for writing rhymed poetry that reads well. I got the impression that you lost faith for awhile but regained it eventually. That happened to my sister when she gave birth to a son with muscular dystrophy.

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022

Thanks for your timely review and understanding.
Understanding as I surely do.
Doctor Ricky 1024

Comment from Karyn2

Good

I can feel the depth of emotion and description that your writing carries. The implied rhyme, internal rhyme and poetic devices really help to capture feelings of sorrow but also that of hope. I love the use of repetition. Particularly when you have used it as the final word of a line and then again on the next. It gives the poetry breath and a satisfying moment to pause. There are a few typing errors "every forward" is possibly "ever" 5th line 2nd stanza. "He waiting ever patiently"/"He's" perhaps another word choice for "got" in "got my beginning"? A few capitalisations that I would use lower case for. I am truly sorry to read about your loss.

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022

Thanks ever so kindly for honoring my son with your time and review.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Comment from Jesse James Doty

Excellent

This appears heartfelt and endearing to the lord but I don't understand what is going on in this letter/poem you have importantly written for no one in particular. Please, clarify this letter/poem for me if you would, and do not keep me in the dark.
Jesse

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022

Jason Richard Smrkovsky my Only son.
Passed away unfortunately, on March 31st 2003.
On April 1st, 2003.
We donated his many organs.
Thanks for reviewing.
Doctor Ricky 1024