An Instant Change
Josh is a new man7 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What a changed life for a man. Probably everyone will want the recipe for this potion. It will either make life better or perhaps worse. I know that it can do something to the sexuality of a person.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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What a changed life for a man. Probably everyone will want the recipe for this potion. It will either make life better or perhaps worse. I know that it can do something to the sexuality of a person.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from jessizero
It's strange that one sip of coffee completely changed the course of this young man's life. This story/poem was very creative. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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It's strange that one sip of coffee completely changed the course of this young man's life. This story/poem was very creative. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your excellent review!
Comment from Ricky1024
This is The Drink Poetry Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with your contest Entry.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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This is The Drink Poetry Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with your contest Entry.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have done nice work with the writing prompt. The artwork you added is perfect for the subject of the writing. Your poem is a delight to read. I wish you tons of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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You have done nice work with the writing prompt. The artwork you added is perfect for the subject of the writing. Your poem is a delight to read. I wish you tons of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your excellent review!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, Mystery Author, I believe Josh found a new and improved
coffee. I enjoyed reading your contest entry. It had smooth flow,
great details which created great imagery, and a good picture, too.
I liked the progression of Josh after taking a sip of the new coffee.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Well, Mystery Author, I believe Josh found a new and improved
coffee. I enjoyed reading your contest entry. It had smooth flow,
great details which created great imagery, and a good picture, too.
I liked the progression of Josh after taking a sip of the new coffee.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good attempt at writing a drink poetry contest entry. The text is a great size. The message is stated clearly in some areas. Did you mean: sip" in this line~zip of coffee? Laughs is misspelled~luaghs. Screams is misspelled~sreams. A doctor's degree is higher than a master's degree. That verse is unclearly stated. One cannot get a doctor's degree by getting a master's degree. That's not how degrees are given out. This poem veers away from the drink theme and is stating ideas that are not in line with how degrees are obtained. You need to do some revision before this contest closes. You have time.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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This is a good attempt at writing a drink poetry contest entry. The text is a great size. The message is stated clearly in some areas. Did you mean: sip" in this line~zip of coffee? Laughs is misspelled~luaghs. Screams is misspelled~sreams. A doctor's degree is higher than a master's degree. That verse is unclearly stated. One cannot get a doctor's degree by getting a master's degree. That's not how degrees are given out. This poem veers away from the drink theme and is stating ideas that are not in line with how degrees are obtained. You need to do some revision before this contest closes. You have time.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Thank you!
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You are welcome. You have a chance to revise.
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I have revised it and made corrections. Can you please take another look? Is it now good enough for a five stars rating?
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It is so much better. However, what kind of coffee produces this kind of results? I want a gallon of it daily. I will for sure give it a 4 and remove my 3.
Comment from Tara Maxfield
So much better! Way to improve!
There are tons better editors and writers than me on this site. Some will really make you feel small with his awesome they are.
So, always make sure you edit as best you can before you post and no misspellings for sure. I have learned this lesson myself... several times.
Glad to improve to a 5. Have a great weekend!
Tara
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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So much better! Way to improve!
There are tons better editors and writers than me on this site. Some will really make you feel small with his awesome they are.
So, always make sure you edit as best you can before you post and no misspellings for sure. I have learned this lesson myself... several times.
Glad to improve to a 5. Have a great weekend!
Tara
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Thank you!
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I have changed the poem and revised it. Can you please take another look? Is it better now for a five stars rating?
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I'll bring glad to look! Just note... I am by far not the best editor. But if I can help. I will!
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How* not his. See? Happens to all of us!
